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 Posted: Sat Jul 26, 2008 8:51 pm
I have removed my story and withdrawn from the contest.
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2008 1:00 am
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2008 4:19 am
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2008 1:14 pm
care to offer an explanation of why you gave me a score so low?
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2008 3:30 pm
eidolon nexxus care to offer an explanation of why you gave me a score so low? Your story is unrealistic yet not engrossing enough to suspend disbelief, very short, and doesn't have a clear point. I don't get how this is supposed to make me feel. Is it supposed to make me feel warm and fuzzy? Well, it doesn't, because I know that in real life if someone had brain cancer they would die. neutral
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2008 4:04 pm
Quote: Your story is unrealistic yet not engrossing enough to suspend disbelief, very short, and doesn't have a clear point. I don't get how this is supposed to make me feel. Is it supposed to make me feel warm and fuzzy? Well, it doesn't, because I know that in real life if someone had brain cancer they would die. Short? Ha! I believe it meets the criteria of 'longer than a paragraph'. That is a pretty pitiful basis to point your finger at. Unrealistic? I think the word for it is called fiction - science fiction to be more exact. If you read closely, at the top it said it was set in the near future. A clear point? Of course it has a clear point: a cure for cancer. That is pretty simple and it astounds me that you couldn't find the point. It's not my fault that you don't feel warm and fuzzy, I CAN'T CONTROL HOW YOU FEEL. Tell me: is every story you read supposed to make you feel warm and fuzzy? I think not. Tell me: is every story you read supposed to be all about action and guns, blood and gore, cliche drama? I think not! My story offers a more humanistic situation than the usual vampires, dragons, werewolves - the truely "unrealistic". I am very disappointed in your critique because it is very narrow-minded.
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Posted: Tue Jul 29, 2008 4:16 am
So basically you're angry at me for being honest and saying what I felt about your writing.
That's mature. =/
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Posted: Wed Jul 30, 2008 1:39 pm
1/10 Nexxus is right your critique is pretty narrow minded. I like that she did something more original, as writers we need to have originality so no she not mad at your honesty, just the fact that you were being narrow minded as her post clearly states. Quote: I am very disappointed in your critique because it is very narrow-minded.
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Posted: Sun Aug 10, 2008 2:44 pm
2/10
Not my type of story. Didn't keep me attatched to it in the beginning. But it was really good. Near the middle I finally got hooked. Very good. biggrin
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Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2008 4:47 pm
Wordwok 2/10 Not my type of story. Didn't keep me attatched to it in the beginning. But it was really good. Near the middle I finally got hooked. Very good. biggrin I had someone else tell me that the beginning didn't interest them either, and after they got past the beginning they liked it. What was the reason for you?
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Posted: Tue Aug 12, 2008 8:09 pm
Wordwok Not my type of story. Didn't keep me attatched to it in the beginning. But it was really good. Near the middle I finally got hooked. Very good. biggrin I agree. 3/10
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Posted: Sat Aug 16, 2008 12:35 pm
eidolon nexxus Wordwok 2/10 Not my type of story. Didn't keep me attatched to it in the beginning. But it was really good. Near the middle I finally got hooked. Very good. biggrin I had someone else tell me that the beginning didn't interest them either, and after they got past the beginning they liked it. What was the reason for you? 3/10 The beginning didn't interest me either, because it started out like another bloody horror story, which I hate. I changed my mind a bit because it didn't have grammar/spelling mistakes, which is what usually turns me off. I just think that it was a bit unrealistic that one hundred percent of all procedure-undergoers no longer had cancer, but that was a minor detail. All in all, a decent story.
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Posted: Sat Oct 04, 2008 2:16 am
3/10
well, when i started reading it i didn't felt like continuing it but after that, i kinda liked it... nice going...
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