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 Posted: Wed Jul 09, 2008 10:47 pm
Oh s**t I think Richies' dead.
Oh s**t oh s**t oh s**t ohshitohshitohshi-
Oh God what do I do?
Oh ******** ******** ******** ******** ******** ******** wasn't ready for this.
I WASN'T ******** READY.
Oh God Richie what do I do?
Richie, please I need to hear your ******** ******** ******** ******** God you're breathing how can you breathe with no face-
Come on man, it's you and me against the world.
What am I going to tell your mom, Richie?
I told her we'd be safe.
I told her it wasn't going to still be an issue when we left boot-camp.
Oh God.
You know your mom scares me.
Why did you have to open that door before we cleared the house?
Richie
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Posted: Wed Jul 09, 2008 10:54 pm
"still be an issue went we left boot-camp."
Is that supposed to be when?
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Posted: Wed Jul 09, 2008 10:57 pm
Way to not drop a real comment.
Fixed.
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Posted: Wed Jul 09, 2008 11:08 pm
I'm sorry D, I just.. it creates monsters in my head..
I see him.. Hear him.. And it just creates a new scenerio...
A new way for him to die.. I'm sorry..
You get to me.. Your words get to me..
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Posted: Thu Jul 10, 2008 7:59 am
Oooooooooof. Poor Richie.
That last word seemed a bit off.
I liked "You know your mom scares me". This whole thing seems like a really accurate description of what someone must be thinking in a situation like this.
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Posted: Thu Jul 10, 2008 11:19 am
I agree with Kirby.
Very realistic description of what someone would do
in a situation like this.
...whatever that situation is.
Anyway,
Very nice.
Liked it very much.
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Posted: Thu Jul 10, 2008 11:32 am
Ow. I could FEEL that. I'm torn between wanting to yell at you for freaking me out and wanting to compliment you on your ability to bring a scene to life.
Does boot camp really have a hyphen?
And I disagree with Kirby. I liked the last word.
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Posted: Fri Jul 11, 2008 7:02 pm
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