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well i wrote a book of a fantasy story all my friends told me its cool, but it goes so fast that they think its a movie xp well i will start with the first page hope you like it

the name of the book is "El Reinado del mago" (spanish as you can see)
i dont know how i say it in english, but i will do everything that i can to re-write it in english so be patient mrgreen

if you wanna rate it use a 1-10 or mrgreen 5 stars (awesomeness) biggrin 4 stars (very nice) smile 3 stars (nice) stare 2 stars (bad) sad 1 stars (very bad) gonk 0 stars (pure crap)


hope you like it if you dont get how i write some words plz let me know

ok ooh and sorry for the weird names, they are based on friends real names ^^

PAGE 1 OF CHAPTER ONE (The meteor)

-Sir all the soldiers are ready-said the general of the Rodlerin´s army

In the battlefield the sky was dark like a huge storm was about to start, but that didnt stopped the huge armies of the two great kings, Rodlerin and Alberden, the 10 years war was about to finish, both armies started to run like beasts to the center of the battlefield, the archers started to shot.

-THE GLORY OR THE DEATH!!!!-the army of Alberden screamed

the soldiers where about to hit them, but... something happened, something more than terrible...

before all the soldiers could hit anotherone a meteor falled in the middle of the battlefield killing every single soldier, archer or any war machine, the big mess was heared in both kindoms of Rodlerin and Alberden

-what was that?!-said the king Rodlerin
-i dont know, but maybe its bad for us-said the "consejero" Vincent
-go and check the battlefield, now!-said the king

Vincent reached the impact site, he just found some corposes, partly burned, some where totaly ashes, destroyed war machines, but he saw something inusual, the meteor, he reached it, he was about to touch it but a lightbolt that came from the same meteor reached him first, after some minutes he felt week, and went back to his home...

-what is this, i dont feel normal, i feel more than blood running in my veins, what i should do?-Vincent was thinking

Vincent started to think, all the possible things, but everyone ended in the same question "MAGIC"?

-no its ridiculous!-exclamed Vincent, after that he started to walk, getting desesperate, he quited... and so angry he hitted his desk, but it burned in seconds, and his hands where on fire, but didnt hurted, he started to believe that it could be magic after all, but he had to tested it, he thinked "cold" and his hand stared to take a blue tone, he shaked his hands and ice spikes came out of his hands, he had just one thinking about this

-PERFECT- thinked with an evil smile in his face

what in the world will do Vincent with that evil thinkings??
i will post it tomorrow in the PAGE 2 OF CHAPTER ONE


about the "consejero" i dont know how you say that in english so i putted it like that sorry sweatdrop

anyway comments??

here it is PAGE 2 OF CHAPTER 1

-PERFECT- thinked with an evil smile in his face

Tree days later, Vincent went to the castle of the king Rodlerin, Vincent had to tell the king how the war was so far, but Vincent wanted to do another thing

-Vincent, how good to see you, what happened?-the king said kinda worried
-im sorry your majesty, but we lost everything, absolutley everything in there-said Vincent
-What?!-the king shouted totally shocked
-yes, well a meteor felt from the sky, and the explosion was so massive that killed and destroyed everyone and everything... but... thats not the point of my visit...-said Vincent
-then tell my your "point"-said the king
-i just came here to take over your kindom, simple no?-said Vincent smiling
-What?!, give you my kindom?, just like that!-said the King
-i didnt said that you "gave" me your kindom i said i will take it-said Vincent with the same smile
-hahaha, and how you will...!!!...uuh- said the king with a sword in his stomach

The guard tried to do something but in an instant they where frozen, and a few seconds later they where completly destroyed

-see, im already taking your kindom- said Vincent almost laughting(sorry if i wrote it bad)
-why...-said the King
-because i now have to power to do it, believe me i would done that like 10 years ago...-said Vincent
-you... dont... deserve... that... po... powe... power- after saying this the king died
-hahahaha!!!, im the perfect person to have this power!! you fool!!-said Vincent

Vincent went behind a pillar of the throne room, then he waited for the son of the king, since the son of the king was born Vincent was with him at everytime they where friends, or maybe the kid thinked that he was his family, but everything was in the past for Vincent, now the kid of the king was an obstacle and he had to pass it, the poor son of the king entered to the room the little 10 years old child came too the corpose of his father, the tears came out of his eyes.

-dad? are you ok?-said the kid with tears in his eyes
-Nothing personal kid-said Vincent with a ready to be shot ice spike
-Vincent what happene...-the boy said this before dying in his father belly, Vincent closed his eyes, because he didnt wanted to see him dying, but the power consumed him so much that after some hours he called the kindom to give the notice

-People of Asracrón!, today a great king has passed to a better life, and his poor child, went with him... but before dying the king said that if the boy died i would have to take the kindom as mine... that´s all now you can go back to your work- said Vincent, kinda happy, kinda sad
-A new era has begun- said Vincent sitting in his new throne...

What will happen next? Vincent is done?i dont think so
see the next page to know more


hope you like it,


i will put it tomorrow

PAGE 3 OF CHAPTER 1

-A new erea has begun- said Vincent sitting in his new throne

In the kindof of the king Alberden things wasnt going well too

-In that battle that didnt even last for five minutes i lost everything!-said Alberden
-Im sorry your majesty, but the things maybe happened for a reason?-said the first guard
-but what if the reason is that i lose my kindom... forget it, i just want to see my son-said the King, in that moment a general came to his room, he was too injured the king couldnt reconogize him at the first look
-your majesty, your majesty, i... im sorry for your son... i had to saw this coming *cough*- said the general
-why are you sorry for my son? what happened?!?!?!-said the king
-he... he... *cough* he came... to the battlefield... saying that he wanted to fight...*cough* and then it happened... i tried to protect him from the explosion, but it was useless... *cough* sir i just had to tell you... that- after this the general felt in the floor of the throne room
-...- the king was so shocked that he couldnt talk
-my... son...- a tear fell from the king face after this he fainted...

Tree hours later the king woke up, but something was wrong really, really wrong, he watched trough his window, the sky was orange and black, he ran to it and saw that his kindom was on fire, quickly took his sword to see if he could do something, he went to the throne room, he noticed that his general wasnt there any more, instead of him it was only his armor, and a figure was sitted in his throne.

-Hello your majesty- said Vincent
-who are you?-said the king
-dont you remember me??... i tried to protect him from the explosion, but it was useless... *cough* sir i just had to tell you... hahahaha!-said Vincent
-what? how could you?...- said the king
-interesting dont you think how an armor an some magic can make you look like anyone-said Vincent
-you!!!-said the king angry

The king ran to Vincent ready to stock his sword on him but one second before he could hit him he putted the son of the king in front of him taking all the impact

-dont worry he was sleeping-said Vincent
-my... my... so... my son!... AAARRGHH!!!!!- screamed the king with a lot of rage

Vincent took his sword too, that was all he could do with the little time he had before the king could attack him, they started a sword fight the king was attacking everywhere he wanted revenge with all his heart, Vincent tried to use his powers but it was useless, so he started to attack with his sword too, a lot of missed hits, the battle had a limit time, because the castle started to burn, the fire came to the throne room in seconds, the pilars started to debilitate, the door was an inferno, the roof was about to fall, but the king didnt care at all, Vincent had an opportunity and tried to stock the king but he fail hitting one of the pillars, the king tried to stock him but Vincent blocked it taking off his sword of the pillar causing that the pillar felt, the fire was intense, the roof started to fall, Vincent ran to the door and extingush all the fre, then ran to the outsides of the palace, the king followed him to the village, and started the fight again, but after a few seconds Vincent could get a hit in the leg of the king making him fall, after this Vincent said somethings

-YOUR KINDOM IS OVER!!!-screamed Vincent
-YOU Couldn´t defeat me, NO ONE CAN!!!-screamed Vincent
-FEEL ALL MY POWER IN YOUR BODY!!! AHAHAHAHA-screamed Vincent

After this he stocked his sword in the stomach of the king, after a few seconds he died...

-im not a human any more- said Vincent
-im a God now!!!-screamed Vincent
-and im not anymore Vincent, from now on i will be know as Vexahat the Great god!!!!! bwahahahaha!!!- said the new "god" Vexahat

END OF CHAPTER ONE



to be continued on CHAPTER 2 "The rise of the empire"

i will start it tomorrow mrgreen

i would love that is just i dont know a lot how to re-write it in english feel free to fix my grammar mrgreen , but dont do it with the names even if they are to weird

been reading a little bit.
good so far.

keep up the good work!

ok here it is plz mods if you see any mistake fix it plz

PAGE1 OF CHAPTER 2 "the rise of the empire"

Alberden and Rodlerin had fall, Vexahat had two of the three most powerfuls kindoms of all the world, but he wanted more...

He took all the soldiers of his two kindoms, and head to the closest kindom, Santhon when they got there Vexahat rised his hads and all the bricks of the wall of the kindom started to come to him, after he had all the north part of the wall he shotted all the bricks into the kindom as a rain of pain, all the villagers that where there died and all the houses where destroyed, the army started to run into them.

it was easy to see at least 400 men running to Vexahat and his little army, Vexahat´s eyes started to glow taking an orange tone like fire, they where on fire the first of the army of Santhon suddenly stopped, he saw the eyes of Vexahat and started to run away from him, he didnt knew what was happening, but he didnt care at all, he ran away without looking back trying to get to the palace and advise the king, his army saw him turning back, some followed him without thinking, some stayed, Vexahat rised his hands and a wall of fire apeared in front of him, burning some soldiers, then he extended his hands to his front like pushing the wall of fire and it moved until it burned all the soldiers that where there, the screams of pain could be heard in all the kindom, the king woke up by the screams of almost all his army, then the general came in his room

-king! what we will do? he is killing everyone here- said the general
-i dont know, didnt you meant "them"?- said the king
-no! he killed almost all the army by himself!!-said th general
-then what is he??- said the king shoked

In that moment the door falled, and Vexahat was at the other side

-i am just a man, with a lot much power than you- saying this Vexahat burned the king until he died then he turned his eyes to the general
-wait!!! pleas dont kill be i can be useful to you!!-said the general
-hmmm... useful in what way?- said Vexahat
-i can be your general and control your army when you control the kindom, and i can rise it with the soldiers that are hidden here- said the general scared
-very well, i think is not a bad deal, but if i feel that you are useless i will kill you, do you understand?- said Vexahat
-of curse sir, my name is Danharok, and you?- said Danharok
-you can call me Vexahat-said Vexahat
-very well, soldiers!!! this is our new king, Vexahat!-said Danharok
a few soldiers came out and followed his general, just one tried to attack Vexahat but it was useless everyone in that room would be against the rebels, so Vexahat and his new army went to the closest kindom, Eranzik

page 1 of chapter 3 "A little hope?"


-the time passed, the kingdoms fell, Vexahat burnt them to the ground or kept them as a trophy, 3 years of horror, destruction and sadness was what Vexahat created, but one day he suddenly stopped... at this time nobody knows why, he just stopped leaving 6 kingdoms intact, in 2 years of fear a little prophecy came out of the ignorant people of the kingdoms that wasn't destroyed, basically it was that someone could stop Vexahat and leave the world in peace, someone with the same or more powers than him, but since it came from the down towns nobody believes it- said Argalath
-but you believe it right?- said his little brother
-i dont think so... i have seen the things he can do, no one can stop him, all his power makes you feel useless, butter against a knife, its just impossible that someone can even touch him, how anyone can defeat him?
-maybe with a meteor like him- said the little boy
-well there is no time to fight about this i have to go to practice outside with the soldiers
-ok i will se you in the dinner- said his brother with a big smile in his face

Outside the kingdom the soldiers where about to start training, a big boom surrounded the place, it was the kingdom, an explosion was destroying all the kingdom, the soldiers ran to the forest so they couldnt got hit by the huge rocks flying, just 3/$ of the soldiers survived, after the disaster they ran into the kingdom, Argalath ran as fast as he could to the castle, his brother was down of a pillar almost pulverised, anyway he couldnt get of it because he was injured too, next to the destroyed pillars there was a meteor, a blue glowing meteor, but Argalath ran to his brother as fast as he could

-After you went to the practice.... i saw a beautiful blue light, but it came closer and closer, i was scared so i crouched behind the pillar but.... im sorry brother i couldnt make it... to the... dinner...- after saying this he died in the hands of Argalath
-no... no... NO!!!...- thats all he could said after going to the meteor, he closed his fist with all his strenght and punched the meteor as hard as he could, but when he touched it he started to been electrificated, just like Vexahat, and just like him he fainted, some hours later he woke up surrounded by the soldiers of the kingdom

-are you all right sir?- said the general
-yes... but... what you did to me?!?! i feel... strange...- said Argalath
-we just brought you here- said one soldier
-my brother, tell me that i was dreaming that...- said Argalath
-sorry sir... but no... he is dead...- the general said closing his eyes
-DAMN!!!- screamed Argalath punching the grass, it burn as son as he touched it
-what is this!!!?!? my hand!!?!??!................ wait... it doesnt hurt... but, its on fire!!!- said Argalath
-Sir!! i think that...- said the general being interrupted
- powers??- said Argalth
-like Vexahat?- said the general
-no... yes??- said Argalath
-why dont give it a shot?- said the general

Argalath pointed to the sky, he thinked of fire, or a comet and from his finger a ball of fire came out and exploded in the sky

-i promisse brother i will use my powers well- said Argalath- to have the world we both dreamed... to have the world that everyone dream... a world of PEACE!!- screamed Argalath
-Yes!!- said all the soldiers

now the story is getting interesting isnt it?? xp