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 Posted: Fri Jun 27, 2008 10:01 pm
This is a story that hasent been written yet. On a war that is to come. This story takes place in southern frace where The newly formed America alience known as the Patriots has massed a attack on The United Allied nations known as the Allies. The reason for this war is unclear and the means of war changed No longer is the tank the heavest unit on the feild. The newly developed Mecha units known as Armored strikes are now the bulk of any milatary contrey. This means any contry with out any armored strikes can be concured with ease. Now thats enough for entroduceing you to the story. Heres a time line.
2010: Dr. Ken Hido, a japanese robotics engnnier has develpoed the first armored strike called the A.S Mark. 1
2015: The Patriots set up the Internatiol Sactions act
2016: Communications between the UN and the Patriots break down
2019: Britain and the Patriot nations both make the first bulk supply of armors known as the AS Mark III.
2021: The Patriots attack the British Isles and thuse starts WW3 (AKA the first Strike war.)
2021: Japan annouces that it is neutral in the war
2022:Newly developed Patriot unit known as, The Beast unit makes first apperance
2022: Newly develpoed Allies unit known as,The Beauty unit develpoed to counter the Beast unit.
2025: Dr. Kigeo Armay Is hired and develpos the very first organic Armored strike known as the Zero unit
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Posted: Sat Jul 05, 2008 9:58 am
(Heres the first chapter.)
Ch.1 battle with the short beauty
David sat in his chair typeing things into his computre.
Subject: United states of America.
searching......
United States were origanly extablished as 13 colonies in N. America. Origanly under the control of Great Britain until the American Revloultion in 1775to 1783 where the colonies won their independance from Britain. After that the US started captureing land and fought Mexico to capture sevral peices of land. After that the US fought in WW1 and WW2 and the Vitenam war. Then events in 9-11-2001 Terrorist highjacked sevral jumbo jets and attacked the Twin Towers in New York. This lead to the war in Iraq, Iran, and later Syira. Then in 2010 The US meraged with Mexico and Canada to form The United States of the Patriots.
David ended the search when The voice of his superior officer shouted at him. "Captian David stard!! What are you doing?! Arn't you supose to be operating your armor. Or should I call you by your first name Renten?"
"Well General no disrespect but, 1 we are in an urban area with no action and There have been no enemies for quite a while." Renten said as he sat back in his chair. "Thats no exsuce!"Shouted the General."Give me one reason why I shouldent demote you!" "Well ill give you 3 words. Shadow Fox Project."
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Posted: Fri Jul 11, 2008 4:38 pm
I'm sorry. Real sorry, but i dont approve. It reminds me too much of Metal Gear Solid. Why? The Patriots is a group from Metal Gear Solid. Beauty and Beast Unit... Already the names of the new enemies in MGS4. UN...already exists. United Nations. its an orginization, but still...
Aliied nations? Thats the name of US, Britain, Russia, and others against Germany and Japan.
And David is Metal Gear Solid's Solid Snake's real name(well i think so, it was shown on X-play)
The WW3 idea is good, but it sounds like a cliche to me. I dont want to be the bad guy here, but many of the terms you have are done. Could you re do some of the terms? mybe it would be different instead of using the same terms in different ways. Ask Dragontamer, she may like it, and is the one most advanced around here.
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Posted: Fri Aug 08, 2008 10:56 am
I should probably clear thingd up. well shortly after the war in Iraq and Iran. a war broke out in Syria where the Us was involved. shortly after those events athe world econamy started to shift from Mexico, to Canada, Then to China. The last shift was to Japan. Where the contrey became a super power for their advanced robotics and other techs. That put the U.S in a crises. So the U.S with its failing economy signed the alience with Canada and Mexico to help boost its economy. The Us wasent the only contrey that had a failing economy the brithish and other european contries were also in crises so they signed trade and other treaties with each other. Soon the economy healed and it turned alittle crazy between both aliences it was now about who had power the Americas or U.N.S.A
or the U.N both sides started to buy armors frim the black market to make their own armored strike devisons. With that started a new cold war. but it ended when Japan came out with its newer armors. and its first naval fortress called the Yamato. the fortress could easaly sink a whole fleet of carriers and battle ships. So japan showed its superiorty by placeing its two new Yamato class Navel fortressess between the U.N.S.A and the U.N But tensions still grew between the two nations
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Posted: Fri Aug 08, 2008 11:09 am
Quote: The Beast Unitthe Beast Unit is a refrence to the names of the armor strike they are named after mythical beast. The Armors belong to tech companies that have singed contracts with the U.N.S.A to enter the war to see what company is the best. some of the companies are called. Cimera Tech. Fenrier global, and Hydra Cinc. The most popular is Draco Tech. FenrierFenrier is a armor that can run on all fours. it is armed with twin blaster cannons in its mouth. Not only that but its teeth are equped with theremite blades leting it bite through solid metal with ease. its claws have a gas power ejection system. leting it extend its claws to hold it down when fireing its mouth cannons, Or it can us that system as a weapon to drive its sharp claws into a enemy. Fenrier is huge compared to other units and is extreamly fast it has a system called shift step. This lets it blast its way past enemies. Cimera Cimera is a bipedel unit that has a ram head on its left hand that can be used as a weapon. its head is a lion desgin. it can breath fire letting it burn enemies to a crisp. it has a snake tail that can wrap around an enemy and crush it. the ram head also is equiped with a cannon This is a group of specail black op style Armor strikes. They are called the beauty unit because the way they fight, Its like a dance. but also because the way they die. They for some unknown way and reason when they die they crystalize both armor and pilot. Both turn to solid crystal . The Beauty unit is a diverse core it has members from all over the allied states.
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Posted: Fri Aug 08, 2008 5:19 pm
Ah. So they are uit CLASSES... i didnt get that. Good work on the explination of the beast unit.
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Posted: Sat Aug 09, 2008 8:19 am
thanks ill post info on the U.N.S.A and the U.N Quote: U.N.S.A(United nationlized states of America) Origanly started as a way to keep the U.S, Mexico, and Canada from falling to complete anarchy and revolution. U.N.S.A is a series of around 231 states that spread from the artic down to brazil. Its central govern ment is located in California or as known at that time Zone 13. rather then name all the staes by a name they call states by numbers of the rank they entered the contrey. like the first state would be called Zone 1. Although they dont have a natural name other then humans as you call evrey one on this world. In the war they call them selves Patriots in order to show that they are the "Good Guys".
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