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 Posted: Tue Jun 17, 2008 1:44 pm
Months pass by as if a millenium,
The rise and fall of a luminous sun
Radiates as a night fills with dreams,
Visions on end, cutting open the seams
That I've so carefully sown together;
The wounds never to heal any better.
As the little things remind me of your family,
Could we have truly ended forever happily?
I know it would only be for them,
For I could never love you again.
Pictures hang vacant upon the wall,
You truly did watch me stumble and fall.
SIDE NOTE: This is another attempt of mine to rhyme.
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Posted: Fri Jun 20, 2008 9:39 pm
I think it rhymes just fine. Something about it is bumpy though. The first six lines seem to kindof slide downwards, while the second six evenly bounce back and forth. Thats the only way I can think to describe it. I liked it though ^.^
P.S. Been trying to comment on this for days but hasn't been letting me post x.x
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