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 Posted: Sun May 18, 2008 6:01 pm
Read my poems in my journal and tell me what think! xd Any comments are appreciated, good or bad! If you think it's bad, please tell me why. biggrin Thanks! wink
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Posted: Sun May 18, 2008 8:16 pm
We all make mistakes sometimes but...
Uhhh.... it's friends only.... sweatdrop
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Posted: Mon May 19, 2008 3:40 pm
I didn't know that! Sorry! I'll fix that.
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Posted: Mon May 19, 2008 3:45 pm
Ha ha. sweatdrop Sorry about the inconvenience. It's now public! biggrin
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Posted: Sun May 25, 2008 8:51 am
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Posted: Mon May 26, 2008 2:49 am
Not saying that I am some huge super poem know it all BUT it seems like the words you are using don't really fit sometimes, not that they aren't the right word but that you could have easily used a simpler form of the word. I also think that they need to be stripped to the bone more.
This isn't saying that they aren't good, I do like them, but that is my opinion. Nice job!
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Posted: Mon May 26, 2008 11:38 am
I use words that catch my eye (or something like that). Thanks for the comment!
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Posted: Wed May 28, 2008 3:11 pm
New poem added to my journal!
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Posted: Thu May 29, 2008 11:06 pm
Its good but not that good..
Ive got poem in my journal too.. please look
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Posted: Fri May 30, 2008 7:53 am
I prefer constructive feedback not just yes or no. Please explain why. stare
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Posted: Fri May 30, 2008 9:55 am
if u read mine then ill tell u what i really feel
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Posted: Fri May 30, 2008 8:40 pm
I read Actor (hope that's the title). It's seems confusing. Maybe punctuation? Otherwise good. It tells a good story.
I really like the Puppet. But needs some punctuation.
I agree about a Women's Beauty is about how she acts. I like this one, too.
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Posted: Fri May 30, 2008 10:36 pm
I like the Evilness of ur Poems... They Psyche me up rofl rofl
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Posted: Sat May 31, 2008 10:18 am
twisted
But not all my poems are evil, just most of them.
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Posted: Sun Jun 01, 2008 3:14 pm
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