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lookitsshawny

PostPosted: Mon Apr 14, 2008 10:06 pm


"A Lonely Footprint"

A solitary candle flickers uneasily in the wind,
A lonely light in a worried world that has no end.
Seen through tears, beams shine out like a brilliant burning star,
Touching every darkened corner far too near and near too far.
A lonesome love, a fading light, in a place with no one near,
A soft-spoken scream and vibrant beam too loud for one to hear.
Every dropped painful tear echoes through the desperate heart,
Like the candles dripping waxy tears, too much empty space, much too far apart.
A careful thought, a shrill whisper, a loving word, a vivid dream,
An open gashing tear, ripped upon its fragile seam.
A worn path through the darkness, to turn and go back home,
Without a spark, without a lover's kiss, I would rather stay here alone.

A simple gift, graced with care runs tears off a cheerless grin,
The words of love make it easier to cry the tears you knew I'd send.
Reading such precious calligraphy, means so much it brings tears back,
The smell and old images remind me, that it is only you that I lack.
A careful step back into the past, brings more promise for tomorrow,
But being able to cry happy tears is a relief, a refuge, more than you know.
Rain starts to leak from the dreary clouds above, descending to the muddy ground,
The world seems quiet, hushed into humbleness; no day like this could ever be found.
In the darkness a quiet candle still burns, lighting an unlit providence, with all it ever had,
You can see the single light from so far now, but the unsettled movement is still all too sad.
The truth is vicious, biting, tearing, pulling until a cure can be possessed,
But love always finds its way through the darkness, once it is confessed.

A cold "F-O-R-E-V-E-R" is written in a weather worn stone,
Both sides of the solid rock could never stand alone.
When one side crumbles the other falls too,
Comforting, cushioning, holding on tightly the entire way through.
An amazing bond and simple, solid beauty could only be found in this,
Perfection for a perfect cause, a radiant, reinforced promise.
Nothing special, nothing boastful, or broad and out of sight,
Plain, powerful yet peaceful, like the soothing candle light.
Though the stone stands at the base of the trail with a long way yet to climb,
But it strengthens only more and more with the progression of time.
A boulder and a candle, a note and a wish,
Days floating by, too many to miserably miss.

A gentle cloud of smoke drifts away, into the night sky it goes,
Carry on, float above, it must leave, it knows.
Three placid words whispered in the air, as if she could hear,
To renew their weakened strength, and give hope to all fear.
A thought of love held so tight with a beautiful memory,
Wishing: hold my hand, taste my kiss, merely comfort me.
Being dazed and helpless never felt so unforgiving,
Trapped in a daring daydream, sleeping awake, scarcely living.
Lost again in darkness without a light to see,
Back to wishing, hoping, dreaming, in a shallow, worried sleep.
To live for the bright horizon over the future's green countryside,
Gives hope and restoration for a lonesome, weary mind.
When you come to find me, I can tell you where to start,
Follow your steps right back to me, to your footprint in my heart

PEACE
Mao, 2008
PostPosted: Tue Apr 15, 2008 11:03 am


Very nice. I actually had to fight back emotion with this one.
If i could change anything it would have to do with these two lines.

"Though the stone stands at the base of the trail with a long way yet to climb,
But it strengthens only more and more with the progression of time."

I read it in context a couple of times, it seems like you dont need the "Though" in the first line. It gives a Though, But effect, kind of like a double negative. It may be just me being picky, but you had me caught up in your world until i hit that line, tripped me up some.

Over all I think its really wonderful work. Great job. biggrin

Edit: Actually taking out either one of them, the Though or the But would work.

Scazarith
Crew


lookitsshawny

PostPosted: Tue Apr 15, 2008 12:36 pm


Yeah. I can see what you are saying. Thanks for the feedback.
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