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Alright, well I wasn't expecting to do this so soon, but considering that I want to make my RP successful, I should present this now so then maybe it might bring more motivation for people and give them something to look forward to. This is an all time special story experiment that I've been working on. Please take your time and enjoy reading the summary.

Gensia: Rise of the Shinigami
Long ago, before Gensia left earth, there was once a great Gensian, born of the Yavon clan family. He was known as the atificial soul scientist. His name...was Zaranos. A man of great knowledge, who had many other loyal assistances who supported his work. Unfortunately, most of the elders and the Gensian race did not approve of his motives. Gensia lived to honor their law. That law was to never become subdued of evolving to more modern life. They believed it would bring hunger for more power and choas. In spite of it all, Zaranos did not want to give up his dreams, yet, he wanted to still have faith in Gensia and their beliefs. After many years of researching, secretively, and studying the essense of the human soul, he had finally completed his work. After waiting for the right time, he confessed to the elders of the Yavon clan and presented the ultimate object that would keep the peace between humans and Gensians. The Orb of Submition. This orb has inhiabited a new world of its own. A world of judgement between the soul's life. In other words, those who have lived a life of great sin, shall be left in the deubts of the dark realm of the after-life, within the orb of its world, forever to suffer their own sins. Those who have lived a good life, without sin, shall have their souls converted and reborn as a Gensian.

This was a great success for Zaranos. Even the elders were most impressed of his work, dispite their neglections, during the times, towards his past projects. Zaranos pleaded the elders to use it to experiment on the humans. The elders finally granted his wish, on a whim, for only one deminstration. Though they still wondered how Zaranos made such a powerful item (even to this day it was still left as a mystery). When the time came, he finally used it on two different souls. One who has lived a life of great sin, and the other who has lived a life of pure. During the experiment, it was successful so far, as the edlers layed witness to his work, onto a huge screen, showing the other side of the orb that contained the other world. The corrupted soul had been pulled into the orb's world and forever fell into the abyss of its own suffering. As for the pure soul, it was about to do the same and be converted into a new life of a Gensian. Suddenly, a malfuction occured.

The orb became unstable and the corrupted soul had turned into a beastly creature. The creature itself was undescibable beyond imagination and more hidious than anyone can lay eyes on. As the evil soul was reborn into a new being, the creature devoured the pure soul and became more powerful, thus, transforming itself into a more intelligent and powerful creature. The orb became more and more self aware and began to bring the creature onto the other side to break free. As it did, the elders vanquished it, thus, it subsided the power of the self aware orb. Without any souls to absorb, it had no life to control its own. When the elders were greatly angered by this, they declined Zaranos' life's work, thus, ordering him to disband his team of scientists and their projects on the orb. Zaranos felt so rejected to his hopes and dreams, never to accomplish them at all. And so, he drove himself to anger towards the elders and rebelled against them, working along side with his team of scientists, who were most loyal to him to the end. In spite of their efforts, it all ended in vein, and ultimately led them to their punishment. The elders banished Zaranos and his team into the very object he had created...The Orb of Submition. Instead of their souls, their entire bodies, along with it, became part of the orb and they were to forever live, caged inside the orb's world in slumber.

When the time of Gensia's departure, to forever leave mankind's foolish ways, came, they decided to first send the orb into it's own world, never to be found. And so, it was done, thus, the orb was sucked into itself and never to be used again. Unfortunately, when Gensia finally had left, Zaranos had already planned this ahead, if it were to ever happen. The orb may have been obsorbed by itself, but its power remained in the human world, and was scattered throught half of the earth (mainly around Asia). During the centuries of mankind's evolving life, the orb has been self aware again, as it absorbed many souls, judging them of their sins. This time, the orb had finally worked half successfuly as Zaranos had intended, but the soul never became reborn as a Gensian. Instead, it moved on into the other after-life. Unfortunately, Zaranos' grudge, against Gensia and the elders, had never left the core of his mind. What seemed to be the most failure of the orb was that the corrupted souls still turned into hideous creatures. Sometimes they have even tried to reach out into the human world and have been seen by many people, thus, the humans have invented the name and come to believe that they were called "Demons". Other times, these creatures, were also considered to be called "Shinigami" (God of Death). More and more, during the many centuries that have passed, the creatures have become more intelligent and even more powerful, the more souls they devour or bring into their world. Now, to this day, they become almost human-like forms. Some decide to keep their demon forms as monsters to be feared. Those who were human-like forms considered themselves as a higher rank and the real Gods of Death, thus, they decided to keep the name, Shinigami.

Now, since the years of Kianos' and Zalian's arrival, the presence of the Gensian blood and power, have awoken Zaranos from his eternal slumber of dispair, along with his companions that were sent with him. Unfortunately, the world of the Shinigami have changed them to neither Gensian nor human, but a more higher being than any other. They were now changed into Shinigami themselves, but with greater power than any other Shinigami in the world. Reason being is because of their own Gensian blood, fusing with the powers souls and powers of the Shinigami, thus, they now gained control over the many Shinigami that live amongst them. Fortunately for them, they are still able to maintain their normal form, avoiding them of turning into demon-like creatures. Some demonish-like parts have grown into them, but not completely.

Now that Zaranos has awakened, he has the power to freely travel from the Shinigami world to the human world, thus, he plans to punish mankind, and create a new paradise. A world of Shinigami to rule over earth. Now it is up to Zalian and his many friends, Zienkai heroes, to aid him in this epic battle to stop Zaranos and his loyal comrades. Even if it means he may have to join forces with Kianos and his comrades as well (For Kianos, does not want this to happen to earth). Join this epic tale, movie special, to stop Zaranos from his reign of chaos. Welcome...to "Gensia: Rise of the Shinigami" RP special event.

Coming soon to an RP near you....lol

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Now I accept any opinion that you guys post, but please reply to this and tell me what you think, if you plan on reading this. I want to hear your ideas on this new story and anything that you might think would fix any mistakes. Now this special event won't be happening for a very long time but this might as well bring good motivation to those who might be taking this RP lightly...lol. All in all, it most definitely needs enough members to bring the origenal Gensia story to get far. That way, we can have the chance to begin this great side story event. As for the rules of this new side story, for Gensia, I have not got them all planned out yet. When I do, I will be sure to post them here, so keep your eyes open for new posts on here. I must let you know, before hand, though... The rules that I will be posting will most DEFINITELY be strict and MUST be followed at all times. That way it'll follow perfectly, and also help the individual RPer to understand and enjoy the plot itself. Thank you for reading and again, hope to recieve some opinions. ^^

Well I most certainly appreciate your comment on this matter and your compliment on the story as well. =) As for the paragraph part, I knew that someone would obviously, and easily find this error as expected. ^^ Your talent for noticing these mistakes truelly estonishes me. Also, as I stated before in the sign-in post, I know I'll probably be making mistakes here and there. Some I'll probably won't even realize. To be quite honest, I'm poorly skilled at this kind of thing. I never really know when to make a separate paragraph, or when to truelly realize if I mispelled or not.

Sadly, I don't have a auto spell system that makes sure if I mispell or not, when I'm posting on here. I know from that point, the best sudgestion would be to type something like that all on Micosoft Word, which is the most reasonable and logical thing to do. ^^'; I just seem to have the habit of not using it at all, which is bad on my part. As for reading and re-reading it, that I do to make sure I don't make mistakes. Unfortunately, my efforts fail me, as I still rarely notice mistakes, such as you explained. So to give you a heads up, I'm sure to make many of these obvious mistakes, sadly, and I apologize in advance. All in all, I truelly thank you for your compliment on this side story! ^^ I hope to get it started soon. The sooner we get far in the story, the sooner we can have this movie on the go! ^^ hehe.

Also, you said it was a bit drawn out, right? =o Forgive me of my stupidity of asking, but how so is it drawn out, if I may ask? =) Just a bit curious. ^^'; I hope it isn't too bad or anything, you know? lol

I figured if I learn to critique others, I might be able to critique myself with greater accuracy. If you took up this policy, it could help you with your re-reading "problem".

On the topic of length, something like this little summary didn't have to explain all of the details. I think the paragraph tactic would have helped soften the blow of the length.

In other regards, I do find it a nice story idea, and I would most likely play in it, if you had a different concept of player freedom. This might be contrary to your main goal, but I find making the players walk a strict path can detach themselves from the story. The will be focused on doing the right thing for the story, and not have the ability to be engrossed in the story. I've been running games of Dungeons and Dragons, Rps here on Gaia, and other types for over 5 years. I did find that leading the players by the hand is a good way to lose players.

Just a few suggestions, keep up the original story ideas!

Thank you for the compliment, and for taking my suggestions in such a good light. This is the place I was looking for, a place where people can exchange ideas without getting flamed or yelled at. Mature rpers, I like it.

Now, it is good to have the basic rules for a game, and a little outline, but nothing too extensive. When I run games, I think of myself as the person who makes the cover and the spine of a book, while my players (with some guidance from me) create the pages in between. Sometimes they can pull the story away from where you originally planed it to go, but it also has the potential to take your game to heights you never thought imaginable.

That is the true joy I get out of running a game. Writing can be fulfilling in itself, but running a game is like writing a story with 4 or 5 other people. You create something with others, and isn't that what makes the best stories?

Psht you haven't been playing D&D long enough then. It's the DM's job to railroad the hell out of the players. Then it's the players to to DERAIL him lol. Almost 14 years of D&D and a few games DMed myself has taught me this lol.

Anyway, I agree with Nokari. Start putting breaks in paragraphs. It makes it a bit easier to read. The run on paragraphs hurt my eyes. Also, download Firefox as a broswser. It has a built in spell check.