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Sushi~X

PostPosted: Tue Jan 01, 2008 6:52 pm


Yeah...first battle, in LG at least. Anyway 5 bars...and thats it. Probably drop tommorow so yeah...really want a nother crew member to battle but whatever. Gonna sray some lines in honor to Saltee Nutz duke
PostPosted: Wed Jan 02, 2008 8:28 am


I can't battle you right now, 'cuz i got a party to go to and a lot of s**t to do. But i do wish you luck on your first battle in LG.

iSupa Soak Dat


Sushi~X

PostPosted: Wed Jan 02, 2008 8:31 am


iSupa Soak Dat
I can't battle you right now, 'cuz i got a party to go to and a lot of s**t to do. But i do wish you luck on your first battle in LG.


Thats coo, anybody??
PostPosted: Wed Jan 02, 2008 4:04 pm


I accept.

Overlord Makairo


Sushi~X

PostPosted: Wed Jan 02, 2008 4:11 pm


Overlord Makairo
I accept.


oh s**t, heavy on the first. okay ima drop first
PostPosted: Wed Jan 02, 2008 4:47 pm


What Mak came back to prove his lyrics are in tact
Well after raping this cat with bars Ill catch aids hes that wack
Level over 9000 Convert it to celsius
Youre the negative answer to can I bus
With more personas than what I can loan ya
Dont got to get you on the run that jobs Despoenas
Battlin a kid from fosters is seriously what COT has on its roster
Well rip it up cause the Nutz see through this lyrical imposter
I mirrored your skit but nothing appeared
So unless your a vampire its nothing to be feared

Sushi~X


Sushi~X

PostPosted: Wed Jan 02, 2008 4:51 pm


Typin on my psp...so yeah takes a while...those lines were meh
Oh and Despoenas = mod so yeah to anyone who didnt know
PostPosted: Thu Jan 03, 2008 12:34 pm


This is really unfair, but I'll drop later.

Overlord Makairo


Overlord Makairo

PostPosted: Thu Jan 03, 2008 5:54 pm


Sushi~X
What Mak came back to prove his lyrics are in tact
Well after raping this cat with bars Ill catch aids hes that wack
Level over 9000 Convert it to celsius
Youre the negative answer to can I bus
With more personas than what I can loan ya
Dont got to get you on the run that jobs Despoenas
Battlin a kid from fosters is seriously what COT has on its roster
Well rip it up cause the Nutz see through this lyrical imposter
I mirrored your skit but nothing appeared
So unless your a vampire its nothing to be feared


Jealousy runs about as deep as the roots of your own tone,
if a black disease is what my raps tend to catch, believe that
my illness is enough to infest your limp attempt at maintaining a bone.

This f*****t's been slappin' his sack while bumpin' tracks from the Mak,
his nymphomaniac acts serve to prove the acne scarred crack head*
can lyrically trap and in fact Rip the hairy palmed Jacker when on mode to relax.

A pictures worth a thousand words, to Hip-Hop you're a pseudo-fan,
Trying to avoid social castration by your black friends while hiding your
passion for wearing costumes and giggling with your Naruto clan.**

*People from this guild apparently diss me with this kind of stuff and I lol whenever i see it in my profile comments. So I'll slap LG in the face with it for fun.
**
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 04, 2008 7:16 pm


vote now...tho the outcome is known

Sushi~X


Phoenix Fist

PostPosted: Fri Jan 04, 2008 8:17 pm


read both twice. both have ups and downs, but i'll look it over again soon to see what else i can find. gotta do something real quick.
PostPosted: Fri Jan 04, 2008 9:03 pm


alright, been through them a 3rd time.

Sushi's was more boring than December 25th is for Jehovah's Witness children. sorry to say... but that's how i feel. you first and last bar are your best ones, but even they were meh. no real flare to them. try a little excitement. saying things that'll give people amusing visuals also work well. work on hard punches.

Mak's verse implies that he's not much of a fan of punchlines or letting the reader catch on to his rhyme-scheme until they're half-way through his verse. confused your last bar was your best, but because the structure is so ******** up, you ruined the flow. you could've said:

A picture's worth a thousand words. To Hip-Hop you're a pseudo-fan
trying to keep Black friends from knowing he owns costumes from a Naruto clan.


try not to drag things out. get to the point, and make it strong.

that last verse could've taken the whole battle by itself, since your opponent came weak, but you executed it wrong.

i'll have to give it to Sushi. :- for structure, mainly. i don't think i've even gave someone a vote based on structure before... so this battle wasn't really that great, imo. sad

Phoenix Fist


Sushi~X

PostPosted: Sat Jan 05, 2008 5:30 am


Yeah I thought the same things with my lines. Coulda been waaay better...I even told Mak he'd probably win cause his was more lyrically sound

Sushi -1
Makairo -0
PostPosted: Sat Jan 05, 2008 7:19 am


rofl Nothing is wrong with my structure. You're too ignorant to read and comprehend it. Structure doesn't win battles, content does.

That vote is really bull s**t in my opinion. LG won't vote for me regardless since I basically ******** them before. Not worth wasting my time here.

Overlord Makairo


Mageda

PostPosted: Sat Jan 05, 2008 7:49 am


Overlord Makairo
rofl Nothing is wrong with my structure. You're too ignorant to read and comprehend it. Structure doesn't win battles, content does.

That vote is really bull s**t in my opinion. LG won't vote for me regardless since I basically ******** them before. Not worth wasting my time here.

Lolz that has been proven wrong here. Uh... Not sure who to vote for. Phoenix made some good points but lyrically I dunno... I'll think on it.
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