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 Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 9:56 pm
On a night so dark
that I could barely see
the creature right in front of me
the creature was dark
the creature was cruel
the creature was I
I, the fool
I love this poem
and i just thought
of it randomly
one day
So what do you think?
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Posted: Fri Dec 28, 2007 4:58 pm
Not bad....
Mind if I scrawl one out on the same grounds?
With malice and hate
The creature waits
and I debate my next move
As the inevitable come near
Its the mirror I fear here
So I silently steer clear
of my reflection as to avoid detection.
To see is is to hate me
To hate me is to be me
bury this burden I beg you
Just run, leave me.
Close the latch
Turn the key
Say goodbye
Forget the beast..
End...
What do you think?
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Posted: Fri Dec 28, 2007 5:54 pm
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Posted: Fri Dec 28, 2007 6:56 pm
Lol thanks... I thought mind sucked... Yours is pretty cool though.... I just couldn't get the feeling I was aiming for lol....
You know you can make your own collection of your poems in the poetry and art subforum...
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devilisnotagoodlookingman
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Posted: Tue Jan 08, 2008 12:01 am
umm not to be an a** or anythign but WRONG FORUM go to poetry andd art and put this in after deleting this forum please (wishing my account didn't get hacked and still had vise captin powers)
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Posted: Tue Jan 08, 2008 9:47 am
Lol I'll move it for you zein....
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