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Holholchan

PostPosted: Mon Dec 10, 2007 3:36 pm


So I'm starting on the outline for my English term paper (I'm a Junior -- be gentle) and wondering if someone could pass me on some constructive criticism? At least proofread it or something?
The thing is, I just kinda dove right into this so I'm sure it is really crappy neutral I'm supposed to be writing this as though the audience has not read the books, and so this might be a challenge for some... it's a challenge enough for me! 'cause I'm reading back over it and definitely having second thoughts.
For the time being I only have the introduction done, and any help at all would be appreciated!

Characterizing Harry Potter

It could be said that out of the hundred or so main characters in J.K. Rowling’s Harry Potter series, a few seem particularly more developed than others.
I. Although the author uses special references for the tiniest of details in most, if not all, characters in her seven popular works, it is certain that some were given a substantial amount more of attention. It could be concluded, rather, that J.K. Rowling used characterization to its highest potential and in many different ways. What is characterization, exactly? It is merely the creation and development of a character in a literary work. While all forms of prose use this tool, one would be surprised as to just how much a novel series uses it, and even more so to consider how the Harry Potter series does. Following an adolescent and his friends from a boarding school environment and throughout more of the book's enchanting world is almost harrowing work!
II. [insert more that i don't have written yet but will probably add later]
PostPosted: Mon Dec 10, 2007 3:46 pm




I Beta all the time and I love Harry Potter, so I went over your intro but you can feel free to ignore me as you like. smile Here is my "rewritten", I guess you'd say, version:

Although J.K. Rowling does use references for even the tiniest amount of details in most, if not all of, her characters during her seven books, it is clear that some characters were given a substantially greater amount of attention than others. It could thus be concluded that the author used characterization to both its highest potential and in several different ways. However, what is characterization? By definition, it is the creation and development of a character in a literary work. While all forms of prose use this tool, one may be surprised as to just how much a novelling series would use it, and even more so to realize how much the Harry Potter series does. After all, following an adolescent and his friends through not only a boarding school environment, but also through the book's more enchanting avenues, is harrowing work.


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Holholchan

PostPosted: Mon Dec 10, 2007 3:57 pm


Might I say: dang son.

xD

I do have my reasons for many er.. mistakes.. in there, but yeah. Your version is much clearer. I'll have to work on that surprised

Thank you, editor temp!
PostPosted: Mon Dec 10, 2007 4:58 pm


Holholchan
Might I say: dang son.

xD

I do have my reasons for many er.. mistakes.. in there, but yeah. Your version is much clearer. I'll have to work on that surprised

Thank you, editor temp!




xD You're welcome. I hope it was something along what you were looking for!



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