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 Posted: Thu Nov 08, 2007 3:37 pm
Well, in the coming weekends, I'm going to try to post up the story behind my future Flash animation.
I'm not much of an expert in creative writing, so don't expect some Pulitzer Prize writing. In fact, the entire story I'll be posting is just a synopsis. A long... long... synopsis. But I'll try to explain everything as the story progresses.
My only question is, would you be interested in such a story?
Honestly, the only reason I'm typing the story is because... I need to tell it or my head'll explode into a billion kajillion pieces.
Also, I need some really good ideas for enemies based on some philosophies and theories of government. For example, one of the enemies is a leader of a huge religion that he uses to exploit the city. He's become arrogant, thus fancies himself a god. Obviously the hero comes in and saves the day.
Another enemy I've came up with is based on anarchaic thinking. She believes that everyone is out by themselves and helps no one but herself. due to this, she lives in a futuristic city (like New York) and fends for herself, usually hanging around bars. She also has a knack for psychics, so she carries around a crystal ball. The hero finishes her off in a way I really, really like. twisted *non-perverted*
But that's how far I've gotten for enemies. In exception of the main leader, these two enemies, and another random enemy, that's all I can think about. So that's why I'll be needing your help.
Will you help me and allow to tell the story?
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Posted: Fri Nov 09, 2007 6:45 am
Sure, go for it, BeanDip! I'm here often enough, I'll try to help.
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Posted: Fri Nov 09, 2007 12:24 pm
DeeFarnham Sure, go for it, BeanDip! I'm here often enough, I'll try to help. Alrighty then smile K, so let me just save up a couple of posts for later entry, and then I'll begin.
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Posted: Fri Nov 09, 2007 12:25 pm
PART I: EXPLANATIONS
ENVIROMENT
The world is a desert. Canyons as far as the eye can see, ominous white sand and dirt with tall pillars of rocks as high as the heavens, plains so large that travelers get lost easily, and a ball of vibrant orange fire layed up on the sky. Various locations around the world are covered by either small oasis, where cities thrive, or with what the people call "The Wasteland."
Within these multiple oasises(sp?), many cities thrive, majority of them city-states. Some are medieval, with knights in clad armor. Some are futuristic, where at night travelers may think there still daylight due to the city's lights. Some cities are beautiful, as if they were carved by the gods themselves. However... some cities shouldn't have been carved at all.
These cities each have their own form of government, be it monarchy, democracy, theocracy, or no government at all. But there's only one that's so powerful, its miniscule whim is everyone's law.
This is "The Kingdom." Ruled by a just monarchy for ages. It's kings and queens have all been no less than fair to all their citizens. Its criminals are given a punishment equal to their crime. Its army powerful enough to span the kingdom's empire throughout the world. Its sciences have spanned into bio-alchemy, where basic soldiers become powerful enough to manifest objects with sheer body energy alone. Nothing can stop this kingdom from a mass invasion if it wanted.
The Kingdom originally was believed to be the creation of "The Ancients," ancestors of man-kind who spread their wisdom through dusty tomes and scrolls of parchment.
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BIO-ALCHEMY
Bio-alchemy is the study of biology and chemistry to form powerful biosoldiers.
With bio-alchemy, soldiers are able to manifest weapons by quickly pressuring their body energy to form mass, thus creating any kind of element they so desire. Gold, Uranium, and Lead are just some elements they can create.
Beginning as multiple experiments, it's soldiers reproduced enough so that future soldiers would pass along this power through heredity.
However, they are limited. Due to heredity, certain soldiers were only able to do certain things, which were indicated on their "tattoos," markings of energy ranging in three colors: Red, Blue, and Green.
Reds focused on melee combat. Able to create swords, spears, shields in just a matter of minutes, they are the most common soldier and are put in the front lines on the battle field. Training extensively, they could change the style of their weaponry on the fly.
Blues focus on ranged combat. Capable of creating any sort of gun, most of them end up as either soldiers or scientists, who experiment on the different types of long-range weaponry (among other things) Reds would be able to use. Blues are about as common as Reds, but do not train as extensively.
Greens, however, are vastly different from both Reds and Blues. They are the rarest out of the three, with a ratio of 4,000,000:1. They are able to create any sort of object they chose. They also harbor great amounts of energy within themselves, which allow them to create anything they desire for a long period of time. Much like how the Marines are to the U.S., Greens are the elites in The Kingdom. Currently, there are only 12 Greens, with one on the way...
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END OF "PART ONE: EXPLANATIONS"
"PART TWO: BEGINNINGS" COMING SOON.
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Posted: Fri Nov 09, 2007 12:25 pm
PART II: BEGINNINGS
(This is going to be a short explanation due to time constraints, but will be edited later)
A meteor hit long go at around out time. The meteor was radioactive with some sort of unknown chemical, which affected the life around it's crater and several miles past that. For hundreds of years after, humanity was barely hanging by a thread, and thus had to rebuild their civilization. Lucky for us, we had technology that held some of our previous knowledge. However, people would try to steal info from one another. These people are called "the corrupted." The leaders of several bands got together to stop these corrupted, and hid all the known information in a secret location. The problem was solved since then.
Later on, city-states started to emerge. To expand their economies and power, the states would hold contests on how much valuable information a scientist can find. Many states prospered, but nothing like the Kingdom, which held basically the best tournament with the biggest purse.
A lone scientist ventured off into the wilderness. Predictably, he finds the meteor, which is still active. He does research on the meteor, and now he's able to come up with vast amounts of energy out of his body. However, do to the impurity of the chemicals he's created from the meteor, he dies shortly after.
This led to the study of bio-alchemy.
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THE ALCOLYTES
Not much is known about this group, except for the fact that they are deadly and want to bestow "divine justice" upon the world. This is the main antagonist throughout the story.
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THE ANCIENTS
These are what the people around the new world call the western philosophers from before the 1800's, like Aristotle and John Rawls. This plays a huge part later on in the story.
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THE HERO
Only called "The Gunslinger" for now, he is the 13th green soldier born into the Kingdom. However, his father was a notorious thief who committed many crimes, however small. When he was captured, he was tried justfully by the King and was sent to prison for X amount of years. However, the Alcolytes somehow corrupted the King and instead of serving his just punishment, his new punishment was that he would see his only son become a demon-child (in which the mother would die from giving birth to), see is entire family but the boy killed infront of him, and to see his entire kingdom burned to ashes. The father pleads to the Alcolytes not to hurt his wife and child, but he goes unconcious from a blunt hit to the head.
With the kingdom in ruins, the Alcolytes steal the child and take him under their wing, teaching him the ways of the Kingdom's sciences and their "demonized" ways.
(Demonizing is not actually becoming a demon. It's basically what midichlorians are to the Jedi, nothing more than bacteria that extend his primal rages and occasionally mutates him on the fly. The same happens for all demonized people, like the Alcolytes. Demonized people are usually sent to death, with some exceptions.)
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Posted: Fri Nov 09, 2007 12:26 pm
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In media res Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Nov 14, 2007 6:46 pm
Reminds me much of Resident Evil. A futuristic Spartan-like polis?
The explanation of the different States is kinda like a dystopia.
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Posted: Wed Nov 14, 2007 6:51 pm
Ariadnae Reminds me much of Resident Evil. A futuristic Spartan-like polis? The explanation of the different States is kinda like a dystopia. Brave New World / Fallout - ish. Add a dash of I, Robot and we might have a borrowed storyline from every major SciFi contrivance since 1929! Don't forget a Death Star. Someone is going to get dipped in the Vats for this one.
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Posted: Wed Nov 14, 2007 7:02 pm
Kirk Douglas Ariadnae Reminds me much of Resident Evil. A futuristic Spartan-like polis? The explanation of the different States is kinda like a dystopia. Brave New World / Fallout - ish. Add a dash of I, Robot and we might have a borrowed storyline from every major SciFi contrivance since 1929!Don't forget a Death Star. Someone is going to get dipped in the Vats for this one. And that's what makes it so original :3 HA! But seriously, the story isn't very sci-fi. The only sci-fi in the story is just the bio-alchemy and another later scene which deals with human cloning. The story is more like a mix between Saving the princess / Trigun / The Dark Tower series by Steven King / Devil May Cry (action-wise) / Philosophy, the majority of it being Devil May Cry action and Philosophy. Here's a drawing I did on the computer about how the main character may look. It isn't in color, but whatever... Picture of main characterThe drawing sucks, so don't expect anything much from it. BTW, anyones view on the story is very much appreciated. Any changes you may like to add to it is acknowledged greatly and will be considered greatly.
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Posted: Wed Nov 14, 2007 7:15 pm
Ariadnae Reminds me much of Resident Evil. A futuristic Spartan-like polis? The explanation of the different States is kinda like a dystopia. Yes actually, I was trying to go for a dystopia. Ironically, later in the story, the hero finds out that the entire continent centuries back was actually called "Utopia."
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Posted: Wed Dec 05, 2007 5:34 pm
Alrighty I put in PART II: BEGINNINGS.
I didnt put in much feeling into it like I did in part I due to time constraints. I actually tried to type this before with the "finesse" I had back in part I, but for some reason it wouldn't go through, and I lost all my data.
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