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 Posted: Sat Oct 27, 2007 11:21 pm
gimme critiscism ! xd not finished [should be holding a bow..] 
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Posted: Sun Oct 28, 2007 10:06 am
The upper part is really good... something like above her chest..but the rest doesnt seem to be proportional to the upper part.
your line art is clean.. ^^ and the concept looks good too
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Posted: Sun Oct 28, 2007 12:15 pm
Like what he said. The proportions are off a bit. Also your mouth is a little low on the face.
Here are some proportional tips:
Your foot is the same size as the inside of your forearm.
The legs take up half of the body.
The bottom of the ears line up with the mouth
The top of the ears line up with your eyebrows
The eyes of a person are one eye width apart
yeah that's all the proportional stuff i've learned and can remeber at the moment.
hope it can help and good luck!
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Posted: Sun Oct 28, 2007 5:30 pm
yeah what he said is true, also the body has a rhythm which your not holding up in the joints of the fingers and and legs and arms. For example the knee cap, and i mean its kind of hard to describe with words its much easier to draw it out. Btw the problem isn't that the mouth is high the problem is that the eyes should be at the center of the face. Also i would have to see the bow to really critique the pose itself.
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Posted: Sun Oct 28, 2007 7:23 pm
thanks heaps
im gonna fix it and add a bow for ya
oh and any instructions on how to colour it would be much appreciated biggrin
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Posted: Sun Oct 28, 2007 9:20 pm
her bottom part seems much too small and honestly.....it looks like shes ready to have a d***o stuck up her dress....
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Posted: Mon Oct 29, 2007 11:14 am
{♠} [I skimmed the comments, I don't think this was here.]
Her stomach, is just way too skinny, or should I say, her torso is too skinny. Your shoulders, are wider then your stomach (Althought it's a commen then to make them closer to the same size in anime, if that's what you're going for), so the shoulders should probably be a bit larger, so the rib cage and hips can be wider. {♠}
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Posted: Mon Oct 29, 2007 11:47 pm
DemonHalfBlood Like what he said. The proportions are off a bit. Also your mouth is a little low on the face. Here are some proportional tips: Your foot is the same size as the inside of your forearm. The legs take up half of the body. The bottom of the ears line up with the mouthThe top of the ears line up with your eyebrows The eyes of a person are one eye width apart yeah that's all the proportional stuff i've learned and can remeber at the moment. hope it can help and good luck! Sage advice, except for what's in bold. Don't you mean that the bottom of the ears should line up with the nose? No offense or anything, I've made typos similar, but I just wanted to clarify that fact. As for my own critique: The face is strange in how the lips, nose, and eyes are placed. It's as people before me have said, moving either the eyes or the mouth/nose will help your drawing look more balanced, but if you move the lower parts instead of the eyes, you may have to redraw the chin to compensate for the new empty space there. That minor gripe aside, the face doesn't look so bad. Her hips, on the other hand, are kind of small for the rest of her body, and it throws her figure off balance. Making her butt jut out more after the belt would probably help, but nothing will make her legs look better at this point except a full redraw. : I don't mean to be mean, but that's probably the area where you need to practice most. I'd suggest looking up some references and doing to quick sketches until you got a better understanding of how legs work. Remember, google is your best friend at times like this. I'd actually suggest working from life for this, looking up girls in bikinis or something similar will give you an idea for how the musculature attaches in places, but if you'd rather look up some anime references, that's your choice. The key is learning how thick to make the hips and legs compared to the rest of the body. That should be your biggest concern at the moment, as the rest of the drawing is pretty nice. ^_^
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Posted: Sat Nov 03, 2007 6:54 pm
Well,the body is alright.The face has some problems.The eyes are too far up and the nose is mis-shaped and in the wrong place.The mouth is too far down as well.Usually the gap between the mouth and nose is smaller than the gap between the mouth and the chin. I hope this helps^^
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Posted: Sat Nov 03, 2007 10:19 pm
Okay first off I think the anatomy of the face is fine, if thats your style, I have seen quite a few artists use a style similar and I think it looks nice. The legs although are too thin, and I think her feet look too small, and the angle seems off. Perhaps close her legs some, straighten the feet? I still think your line art is way better than mine is at this point though lol.
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Posted: Sun Nov 04, 2007 9:22 am
I would say that the character feels abit stiff...although Im sure this has been said before...the feet bug me the most....characters need solid feet to stand on.....I would do some resaerch on anatomy and pull from that quite a bit....there is a line that travels the length of the body...line of action I think...it might help with your character feeling so stifff...try drawng what might represent the spine in some more fluid poses and build from there...take pictures of your friends and pull from that as well....other than that I thnk its a good start....and by bow...you mean the long stick?...correct?...
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Posted: Sat Jan 19, 2008 5:34 pm
Alright...*sighs* Here are some things to fix:
1. The legs, I would make them thicker, they look very thin right now.
And the bandage? on her leg should be draw in a way that makes it look like it's wrapped on there.
2. The feet, they should be closer together, and bigger, they look small.
3. The waist and hips should be larger, it doesn't look proportional compared to the top half of the body.
4. The hands. Okay, the right hand should look as if it is gripping the top of the bow, so turn her hand when you draw it. Remember that the front part of the bow is vertical, so her grip should be adjusted. The left hand should be gripping something that is ALSO vertical, which would be the string.
5. The arms. The arms should be longer. For the right arm, I would make the lower part of the arm (the part of the arm that is lower than the elbow) longer, and for the left arm, the top part of the arm. I would also remove the bracelets from her arm, they could be damaged in archery. That's why she would most likely be wearing a brace on her left arm, instead of bracelets.
6. The face. Everybody else has covered what I would say about the face, so I won't make you read the same stuff.
Good work, but work on the things that I've suggested.
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Posted: Tue Jan 29, 2008 9:49 am
You might want to work on your figure drawing. Get a sketchbook you can carry with you and draw from life every day.
Good start!
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