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This is a poem I wrote a while ago please dont critique harshly I am not a very good writer yet.

The voice.

I sit in my room embracing the silence.
I pray in my room that this voice will be absent.
But it cuts through the wind and awaken's my mind.
I hope to god I dont loose my mind.
I hear it, it's deep it talks to me in my room.
Caught by the silence and alll of its glum.
The voice runs slowly much like time.
But the the outside is silent like a mime.
Maybe this voice is just made up.
Telling me things like I screw up.
But its true I do.
But I am only human.
But it is so often.
That voice in my mind,
The way it says I will be fine.
Unsecure in my room.
The voice tells me things to do.
He makes me screw up not me...
Or maybe it was me all along.
Stop the thinking stop it before it lasts.
the voice becomes louder and then it suddenly stops.
But so does my mind I look at the wall and here nothing complete silence.
And I fall a sleep forever in silence and thats the end.


okay what did you think?

I like it but I think you could make it flow better. All and all, probally a 7. I like it!