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Guillotein

PostPosted: Wed Aug 10, 2005 6:31 pm


So, er.. I applied to join, but I'm pretty sure I won't be let in. Even so, I've been itching to get some decent feedback on this.
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Sorry if it's a bit big.
Obviously, it isn't anywhere near to being done. I still need to do the clothes and everything, but first thing's first.
Her arms-- Maybe a little too skinny? I think they might be, especially since her shoulders are on the broader side.
Boobage-- I'm not sure.. It's always been a weakness for me. I tried to make them look as real as possible.
Hands-- Her right one might be a little small, and I've left out the left one altogether, because I really don't know how to do it. She's supposed to be holding a cigarette, but I keep having to erase all my attempts because my mind's eye is not communicating with my hand very properly..

That's all I've spotted. Some of these things might be okay to leave, and others probably aren't. I just need a prod in the right direction.
PostPosted: Wed Aug 10, 2005 6:43 pm


The hand actually looks pretty good, besides being a little small. Her lower torso is also small, too.

Her head is kinda big too. And you should work on how to make her legs look more... joined to the rest of her?

Try checking out some online anatomy tuts. They should help. biggrin

Tawney


Guillotein

PostPosted: Wed Aug 10, 2005 6:43 pm


Tawney
The hand actually looks pretty good, besides being a little small. Her lower torso is also small, too.

Her head is kinda big too. And you should work on how to make her legs look more... joined to the rest of her?

Try checking out some online anatomy tuts. They should help. biggrin
Sure thing.
Thanks.
PostPosted: Wed Aug 10, 2005 7:02 pm


yeah, anatomy aid is going to be your best bet. it's not that the head is too large, it's that her lower half is too small- try widening and lengthening her rib cage a little bit, bring in her right shoulder a bit and lengthen the arms- or make it more obvious that the right arm is foreshortened. (foreshortening is a b***h harsh mistress.) the hand is quite nice, but yes, a bit too small, and her hips ought to be as wide as or a little less wide than her shoulders.

pictures of naked wimmin never hurt nobody, and you might do well with a few.
i like her knees and ankles, such as they are.

Plonky the Wondercat


Guillotein

PostPosted: Wed Aug 10, 2005 7:13 pm


Plonky the Wondercat
yeah, anatomy aid is going to be your best bet. it's not that the head is too large, it's that her lower half is too small- try widening and lengthening her rib cage a little bit, bring in her right shoulder a bit and lengthen the arms- or make it more obvious that the right arm is foreshortened. (foreshortening is a b***h harsh mistress.) the hand is quite nice, but yes, a bit too small, and her hips ought to be as wide as or a little less wide than her shoulders.

pictures of naked wimmin never hurt nobody, and you might do well with a few.
i like her knees and ankles, such as they are.
Fabulous.
I've been searching high and low for sites like those.. I can't get any decent pictures of naked gals without having to deal with porno as well.. confused Oh well. I'll find a good site soon enough.
PostPosted: Wed Aug 10, 2005 10:14 pm


A good rule of thumb for making a figure look womanly when freehanding is not to let the hips get much narrower than the shoulders.

Real woman of course vary in the this aspect, but you'll figure that out with experience in life drawing.

Page Boy

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