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Posted: Fri Oct 12, 2007 11:47 am
Yesterday on the stairs I met a man who wasn't there Saw him again in the hall, Standing against the wall. I blinked and he was gone Really he wasn't there at all
I won't see this man again I never asked this man his name Tommrow he won't be by the door Like he was the day before
I didn't see this man today Can't hear the word's he doesn't say I may be by myself But I wish he'd go away...
I haven't seen this man, whos name I do not know I haven't seen him for a while, I think he died some time ago
Oh no, not he He's never lost control I'm face to face With The Man Who Owns The World.
Yesterday I was there Waiting by the stairs For the man who always looked at me But claimed he couldn't see
So I stopped him in the hall Blocked him next to a wall He insisted he was alone So I left this mans home
I was there by the door I saw him stare striahgt through me But he was sure, he wouldn't see, something as make believe as me
Today I whispered in his ear I know he'd wish I'd disappear But he'll never be alone I'll never leave him on his own...
The Damage has been done, my name he does not know The Damage has been done, he thinks I died some time ago,
Who knows, Of me? I never lost control You're face to face With the Man who Owns The World
Who knows, of me? I never lost control You're face to face With The Man Who Owns The World.
That's a song I wrote, inspired from David Bowie's - The Man Who Sold The World. And the poem that that was inspiried from.
It makes a lot more sense if you understand it, but I'm not sure if it's good so some constructive criticism would be nice.
But yeah, basically it's about the fears we face in life. It's a metaphor for like a multiple personality disorder. The first verse is a view from the sufferer and the second is about the actual second personality taking effect. It also goes a little deeper and can be a metaphor for the devil, steering us wrong, telling us what we can't do etc. I don't think I explained it that well but hopefully you get the jist. Tell me what you think please.
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Posted: Thu Nov 08, 2007 2:49 pm
I applaud. Good rhymes. But hellish rhyme schemes, it would have been better if there was a solid structure.
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Posted: Fri Jan 18, 2008 3:43 pm
It got spooky when you switched views I liked it
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Posted: Sat Apr 12, 2008 11:24 am
I love it. It's creative; screw the fact that it might not have a solid structure, it's current format works perfectly in my point of view.
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