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 Posted: Wed Oct 10, 2007 1:10 am
The Prologue
It was a rainy night, the rain was pouring heavily. "Get her!" One of the swordsmen shouted. They were all in silver armors, in each arm was a mythril sword and a silver diamond shield.
'I didn't do anything! I didn't do anything!' Her head kept screaming over and over again. Her short brown hair was already wet and the tears from her sad brown eyes were already mixed with the rain.
Fortunately, she is a good runner somehow. She ran as fast as she could, not knowing where her feet would take her. Her heavy panting could be heard.
Finally...she saw a big white manor nearby. She didn't have any other choice, and she immediately ran and entered the abandoned mansion. She ran though the marble staircase, almost breathless. She rached a corridor, the marble floor was covered with soft red carpet. She ran to the big door at the end of the corridor and quickly entered. The knob was broken, she couldn't lock the door.
The floor was covered with royal blue carpet, there was a big steel bed on the center of the right side of the room, on the other side was a white wooden door that obviously leads to the bathroom, a white painted wooden cabinet with golden linings on the edges just beside the bed, beside it was a beautiful desk with a matching mirror.
She walked towards it and saw her sad and wet self on the mirror..As she examined the desk, she saw a picture, on the picture was a woman with navy blue curly short hair with jewels and pearls on it. Her azure eyes looked happy. She was wearing a white beautiful wedding dress.
As the girl saw this, she couldn't help to cry as she remembered someone very dear to her... "Search the whole mansion! Her majesty wants her captured...dead or...alive." She heard this and panicked, she immediately ran and hid under the bed, her heart was pounding. She looked at the necklace she was wearing, engraved it was a name...Aki...then suddenly, she heard someone entered the room, a pair of heavy footsteps...
*Well...this is the new version...what do you people think? sweatdrop
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Posted: Wed Oct 10, 2007 3:54 am
Thats actually pretty good I like how you got the Body of the writing going.. Very good visulation on the story, confuce did it had a begenning..
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Posted: Wed Oct 10, 2007 4:28 am
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Posted: Thu Oct 11, 2007 3:10 am
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Posted: Fri Oct 12, 2007 12:49 am
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Posted: Sat Oct 13, 2007 8:17 am
Hehe! Yep, you got me.... mrgreen
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Posted: Tue Oct 16, 2007 7:56 am
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Posted: Wed Oct 17, 2007 12:34 am
is a nice story, but when I read it I feel I'm reading a script... rolleyes but otherwise is fine... smile good luck...
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Posted: Fri Oct 19, 2007 7:09 pm
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Posted: Sat Oct 20, 2007 9:43 am
Actually....well....ummmm.....I'm currently rewriting my story...you know final touches etc... So please wait for the longer version and more improved version...heehee...Oh and I'm going to change the title to Scarlet Rose ,but the plot is still the same. The chapters are longer and such...I hope this story can be a success biggrin biggrin
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Posted: Sat Oct 20, 2007 9:44 am
akira190 Actually....well....ummmm.....I'm currently rewriting my story...you know final touches etc... So please wait for the longer version and more improved version...heehee...Oh and I'm going to change the title to Scarlet Rose ,but the plot is still the same. The chapters are longer and such...I hope this story can be a success biggrin biggrin
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Posted: Sat Nov 24, 2007 1:15 am
Pretty cool. I like it. 3nodding
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Posted: Tue Nov 27, 2007 4:36 am
Sorry...please wait for the first Chapter....Secret Lovers
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