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So the prologue is about the malefic leech, Vipamor, going through war with his brother, his brother who is leader in a Carabian-like (however you write that) country with far better war ships and beastly minions. The war between him and his brother begun when Vipamor's brother, an almost immortal being (due to voodoo spells and similar necromancia failed by his brother) wants the reign over the undead. Vipamor is then forced to find more minions elsewhere. His first choice is the people of Hurior. Vipamor had once had an alliance with the people of Hurior and they had gone to war together. Vipamor kept the reason of the war to himself for he knew the people of Hurior trusted him. When it turns out the war was to eliminate vainly the race of angels the people of Hurior were furious and broke their alliance with Vipamor. Vipamor failed to destroy the superior race and went back to his country. Now the people of Hurior don't know why Vipamor is trying to claim all their people, and when Mallisa learns why at the end, she blasts at him, and even tells him "If you would have asked for help we would have." although this isn't true, it sure would have helped out But all of Hurior believes Vipamor has to deal with his own problems.

My story is so developed but in chunks. I'm one of them people who plans everything before hand, not on purpose but my brain just hinks everything in advance, ii've got a million of notes all around.

3nodding i've tried the other way, but ideas still run into thought