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Gerard Way003 InThe Flesh
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 Posted: Thu Sep 20, 2007 7:03 pm
rated for violence & in future chapters swearing
I'll post the 1st chapter once I'm done
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Posted: Thu Sep 20, 2007 8:24 pm
comment to keep the story going
Chapter 1
Once upon a time in the underwater city of atlantis lived five siblings. The youngest is a young female girl named Sarah. Sarah is a young meramaid who is desprate to know about the life above in the surface world. Second is her brother Frank. Frank is a really crazy & fun merman. Third is his other brother Ray. Ray is the serious one who always has an opinion. Fourth is the smart brother Bob. Bob is the one who really likes cats...Last but not least Mikey. Mikey is the vunerable one who also is curious about the surface world &...likes to stick forks into toasters...
One day the five siblings had a recital. They all could play instruments. Sarah sings,Bob plays drums,Frank plays guitar,Ray plays lead guitar, & Mikey plays base. Sarah & Mikey are really mischivous merpeople. Before the recital Sarah & Mikey decided to go on a little scavenger hunt. They both share a collection of items from the surface world. They usually search for things in the surface world. but the time they went was a horrible time. It was a horrible thunderstorm. "I think I'll just go back down & get ready for the recital." says Mikey about the storm."Oh yeah just to be safe I think you should too." Mikey adds
I just told Mikey that it'll only take a min. while Mikey swims back down I observe the humans struggling with the intense weather conditions. I look closely at the ship & see a handsome man with black short hair, a little chubby, & really buff.It was love at first sight.But Mikey just had to come back up. "Sarah they canceled the recital. It's going to be to-" Mikey says but becomes cut off by being distracted by the woman assisting the man. By the look in his eyes it looked like he was in love.
Suddenly the ship springs a leak! Mikey & I look at each other thinking that we just have to save them! They fall over board & are floating in the water. we scramble to find them. We find them & bring them back to shore. They both awaken the next day on shore & the first thing they see is us. "Oh what happend last night?wait....WHERE AM I?" the man says when he awakens. Mikey just chats with the woman while I talk with the man. "My name is Sarah. Last night your ship sunk & I saved you & my brother saved your crewmate." I say with a smile. "Thank you.My name is Gerard. Your brother saved my sister." Gerard says. "SARAH!THE RECITAL!" Mikey screams suprisingly. "I'M SORRY I HAVE TO GO!I'LL MEET YOU LATER AT SUNDOWN!!!" I scream while making my way back into the ocean.
Mikey & I swim rapidly toward the stadium where were playing. "Where the hell is Mikey & Sarah?" Bob says impatiently. "We can't start without them." Frank follows up.Mikey & Sarah don't make it in time & encounter a shark.
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Gerard Way003 InThe Flesh
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Posted: Fri Sep 21, 2007 1:01 pm
I can totally see frank as a merperson. It'd funny actually... =D
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Posted: Fri Sep 21, 2007 4:41 pm
Hardcore Mosher I can totally see frank as a merperson. It'd funny actually... =D lol me too
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Gerard Way003 InThe Flesh
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Posted: Fri Sep 21, 2007 4:52 pm
Hardcore Mosher I can totally see frank as a merperson. It'd funny actually... =D I see why
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Posted: Fri Sep 21, 2007 7:24 pm
i love you mcr Hardcore Mosher I can totally see frank as a merperson. It'd funny actually... =D I see why He's just got that merman feel to him. I dunno. LOL.
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Gerard Way003 InThe Flesh
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Posted: Sat Sep 22, 2007 12:40 am
Chapter 2
"Oh no." Mikey says with fear. Then randomly out of nowhere another shark comes out & attack the shark that was attacking us."Come on Sarah let's go!" Mikey says in a rush. I take a look at the shark that saved us. He really looked familiar.
~*~*~*~*~~*MY FLASHBACK!~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~
Mikey:promise we'll be friends forever?
Sarah & Joshua razz romise!
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"Joshua!We'll meet you tomorrrow at sundown!Same place!" I yell at Joshua swiming off. We make it in time like 5 mins. "Where the hell have you two been?" Ray asks us."Just for a swim outside." Mikey lies. "Ok then get ready!"Ray responds. We get ready just in time. In abut three seconds we get out into the spotlight then in three mins we get out. They all leave us alone.Just me & Mikey. "It's close to sundown.wanna go now?" Mikey asks. "Sure" I respond with a smile on my face. "So what's the name of the lovely lady you met?" I ask. "Belldandy.How bout the handsome man you met.?" Mikey responds.
"His name is Gerard." I respond
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~MIKEY'S FLASHBACK!~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
Mikey:*when he was about 8 & Gerard was about 11* What is it Gerard?Are you chicken to go in the wench's haunted cave? Bwuk Bwuk Bwuk.
Gerard:No I'm going in!*swims inside cave*
*bright flashing lights & Gerard's screaming*
*everyone else swims away*
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"Uh....Mikey?are you all right?" I ask. Mikey wasn't really paying attention to a word I was saying."Huh? oh yeah I'm okay." Mikey responds. We just keep swiming until we meet the shore, Gerard, & Belldandy. But little did we know that Frank was tagging along with another human that was drowning. We help Frank before we go talk to Gerard & Belldandy. While Frank explains everything to the drowning human we talk talk to Gerard & Belldandy. "Hi." I say to greet Gerard.
"Hello Sarah. Can I talk to you in private for a moment?" Gerard asks quietly. "Sure." I respond back. Gerard carries me to some rocks like is some romantic soap opera. "I think I 've met you & Mikey before." Gerard says calmly. "what?" I ask. "Ever since I was little boy I had a dream I was a merman. I was playing with another merman named Mikey & I had a sister like you. In the dream Mikey dared me to go inside an evil wench's cave. I was being tortured so much & when I woke up I was on the sea shore." Gerard responds
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Posted: Sat Sep 22, 2007 9:42 am
DUN DUN DUN!!!!!!!!!!
When will the next chapter be out?????? =D
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Gerard Way003 InThe Flesh
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Posted: Sat Sep 22, 2007 4:10 pm
Hardcore Mosher DUN DUN DUN!!!!!!!!!! When will the next chapter be out?????? =D by Monday.Sorry for the wait
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Posted: Sat Sep 22, 2007 5:12 pm
gerardway003intheflesh Hardcore Mosher DUN DUN DUN!!!!!!!!!! When will the next chapter be out?????? =D by Monday.Sorry for the wait NUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU!!!!!!!!! I want a new chapter now!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Gerard Way003 InThe Flesh
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Posted: Wed Sep 26, 2007 8:51 pm
Chapter 3
"Then what happend?" I asked. "Then a couple found me & adopted me as their own." Gerard finishes. "Wow that sounds sad." I say sympatheticaly. "It is & now I don't know what my ethnicity is where I come from & who my parents are." Gerard says with frustration. "Come on it's ok to cry. Hey I got it! I know someone that could hook you up with a pair of gill or a potion of something we could bring you with us & show you around!" I say with confidence.
"OH THANK YOU SO MUCH!" Gerard says hugging & kissing me. "It's getting dark I'll be back tomorrow same time to tell you what I came up with." I say with a smile. "OH THANK YOU SO MUCH!!" Gerard says cheerfully & over joyed.
"ok I'll came back the day after tomorrow to tell you what I came up with." I say with pride. "It's getting dark I think you should go now." says Gerard. "Okay bye gerard!" I say waving off to him. Mikey, Frank, & I all make it to the ocean. We swim deep down till I realize that we were supposed to meet Joshua today!
"Mikey we were supposed to meet Joshua today!" I outburst. "Okay still want to go?" asks MIkey. "sure" I respond. We make our way to the abandoned ship where were supposed to meet Joshua. We finnaly get into the area where we can actually see the ship we see what I think is Joshua & one of his friends.
We finnaly get there. "Hi Joshua. What's-" I say to greet him but get cut off. His "friend" roars at me & attacks me....
TO BE CONTINUED
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Posted: Wed Sep 26, 2007 8:53 pm
Love it!
Just a suggestion though, can
you double space after each sentence
because it looks like a couple
of sentences joined together or
make significant paragraphs?
Not a flame, just a suggestion.
I really like your story though.
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Posted: Thu Sep 27, 2007 11:06 am
An update! Yay!
But I hate cliffies... Except for when it's my story and I make others suffer! MWHAHAHA!!!!
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Posted: Thu Sep 27, 2007 9:27 pm
Why? why???
Why do you like to make us suffer with your
cliffies oh great god?
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Posted: Fri Sep 28, 2007 12:59 pm
I am actually the goddess of Moshing.
As my sig says "And the Hardcore Mosher said 'Screw You Teenies'". Ima change that to something new soon. =D
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