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  No*kills me*
  How dare you kill Kakashi*slowly kills me*
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Koyashu Ookami

PostPosted: Thu Sep 13, 2007 5:18 pm


Fallen Hero

Iruka held his love close to his chest
He knew what the wound in his love’s chest meant
He had felt his love taking their last, shaky breathe
Tears fell freely in little streams from his eyes
The war raged on around him but he did not care
Iruka told his love one last goodbye before laying him back down
He then got up and killed the ninja who took his love
After the war his love was buried
The tombstone held only the name and two words
Kakashi Hatake
Fallen Hero


I did this for my writing class. Please tell me what you think.
PostPosted: Tue Sep 18, 2007 4:17 pm


Interesting free style. This poem looks more like you should have the adiance think a little more. But rather nice.
Unfortunaitly these kind of poems make me smile and laugh. Not because I'm mean, but because I roll like that. I like it thoug. Just need to rewrite and change some words. It has alot of potential.

Dork_Iruka_Ninja


Ryu Earth

PostPosted: Wed Apr 09, 2008 9:39 pm


i like the flow, but it's sad, and i am not one for character deaths neutral
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