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Posted: Tue Sep 11, 2007 12:28 pm
Usual day would be talking, having fun and doing things. me? I'm half Vampire. I slay vampires as well. Now, I sit in the grasp of evil himself!Dracula! How? I'll tell. A normal night, as usual, when I herd an unusual noise From inside of an allyway, there was a couple, But the boy had his teeth in the woman's neck! "I have to save her!" I thought to myself. but he noticed me! I pulled out my silver spike preparing for battle.... Then he vanished... As if nobody was there. Then the girl colasped on the ground. She was in shock and growing demon fangs. I gave her a vaccine to prevent full blood vampirism and took her to her house, layed her in her bed, and ran out the door in search for lead vampire. "I searched the whole city!" I said in frustration. "no luck?" I heard something in the shadows in unison, and out from the shadows were three oddly familaliar ladies. I thought (Were have I seen these ladies?) And remebered they were the vanhelson sisters! I cautiously backed and drew my silver dagger, and they ran. I was enraged by there atempt to try to kill me before and without thinking stumbled to a group of vampires. They ambushed me and I was knocked out. I woke up in a strange place. I was chained to the seat, and before I knew it, I was surrounded by vampire menaces, all of which had altered suits that allowed them to walk in daylight. The spoke in a language I could't understand, and I oddly, fell into slumber. I woke up with a bite on my neck and in a room with no sign of the three sisters. I injected myself with the vampire vaccine. I was lucky I wasn't a full blooded vampire. "I'm a half breed now" I said in dismay. I gained amazing strength, due to vampirerism.("This is not how I want to live!") I thought to myself an realized that there was some sort of pendant! THE VANHELSON SISTERS! They were here! Anyone foolish enough to were this pendent is like swaring a oath to dracula himself! I smashed it. They wanted me to put it on. I notice a crack in the wall and broke through as if it were a board! There were a team of vampires on the other side. "Oh, man!" I muttered. I killed two and ran in sonic speed(vampirism). as I got to the exit, I looked evil in the eye! Dracula. He came up to me and exclaimed "You! You were the one playing games with my army!" And then grasped my rist. "You will join me or parrish!" He said in evil tone. "No! The only thing I want to do is portect human from you monsters! I would become what I swore to distroy!" I said in in anger. "You fool! PARRISH!" He exclaimed and titend his grasp. I remembered a vacine that Mixes with vampire blood and bloats them to the point of explosion. This was a failed experiment that me and Vannhlesing made that failed. It was expose to be a longer lasting, more efective vampirerism vacine, and they didn't confiscate them. So I drew one and stuck it in his chest. He bloated. He was still alive! He threw me to the edge of the cliff, and I jumped up, Grabed my silver sword and started fighting. "Vanhelsing!!!" "What seems to be the problem?" He asked. "I'm not a ware wolf." I pointed to Dracula. "OH!" He looked at his watch. It was 11:50. He would need to be in a full state of Ware Wolf to fend off dracula. I Slashed him in the neck, doing all I could to keep Dracula busy while Vanhelsing was morphing into ware wolf state. "11:55!" He exclaimed. "OK!" I Cut Dracula's chest. "Raaagh!" He Screamed. Then as I made on last blow, Vanhelsing Lunged at him. "Thats vanhalsing.." I said in a calm tone. He Cut draculas chest open. THIS IS'NT THE END!" Dracula yelled as he vanished. I looked down at my shoes. "Raaagh!" "OUCH!" I yelled. Vanhelsing bit me. HE BIT ME! I became a half ware wolf, half vampire! I guess he knew I wanted to be the Hero. "Only ware wolves can kill dracula." I said to myself. "Dracula." I muttered "Hmm...HE CALLED THE ATTACK ON ME!" I exclaimed. He wanted to make me his pawn! I thought. "I will get my vengence!" I Yelled.
The end- Ritten by catman1010101 SEQAULL COMING OUT SOON!
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Posted: Tue Sep 11, 2007 4:22 pm
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Posted: Wed Sep 12, 2007 3:23 pm
5-Major points off for grammer
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Posted: Fri Sep 14, 2007 1:29 pm
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Posted: Sun Sep 16, 2007 4:37 pm
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Posted: Sun Sep 16, 2007 7:32 pm
I got confused many times in the story. though I think it's a great story line, and you should continue with it, might I suggest editing it? Or having someone edit it for you? I would be happy to edit it for you if you like. And I have a question, how did you know where the girl's house was?
And a vampire/werewolf? Aren't they mortal enemies? No, seriously, are they? I know they are in Twilight...but are they?
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Posted: Fri Sep 21, 2007 5:02 pm
Yes, They are mortal enemies... Vanhelsing purposely got bit by a ware wolf so he could kill dracula. Ware wolves are the only creatures that can kill dracula. Is that a good explanation? mrgreen biggrin smile question And the girl thing.... She's my Friend, Nari-The vampress.... Thats how she became a imortal vampire, She let power over come her..... She wanted vampire powers.
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