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((A poem I wrote for a Pern community that I roleplay in, submitted as a candidate essay by my character Ricani))

The Day I Impressed

Golden sand beneath my feet,
A fiery sun that warmed it.
Here where man and dragon meet,
Oh what a joy to behold it.

While she hummed the hatchlings broke
Free from their egg-shaped prison.

And with a wobble she came to me,
My lovely golden lifemate.

Golden sand beneath my feet,
A fiery sun that warmed it.
Here where man and dragon meet,
Oh what a joy to behold it.

We'd fed the little hatchlings;
I fed her till she was full.

And after that I cleaned her,
And oiled her like I should.

Golden sand beneath my feet,
A fiery sun that warmed it.
Here where man and dragon meet,
Oh what a joy to behold it.

Feasted all day and feasted all night,
All came to join the party.

Then we weyrlings were led off to bed,
Where we slept until the morning.

Golden sand beneath my feet,
A fiery sun that warmed it.
Here where man and dragon meet,
Oh what a joy to behold it.

Me thinks someone likes The Dragonriders of Pern much. Eh? ^_^

The chorus is repeated a little much for my tastes but otherwise its good. ^_^

I agree with Hemata.

The chorus was repeated a little too much and little too often. If it was spaced a bit more it would be perfect.

otherwise, a beautiful piece.