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 Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 1:51 pm
Hey, everybody! I was wondering if you could look at this story for me and tell me what you think. If you want, I'll post the rest of the series here as well. Thanks!
Plot: Taylor Andel was betrayed by someone close to him, thus destroying him. For six months he pretends his is not hurting for the sake of his younger sister, June, but he's not alright. Finally the pain becomes to much for him and he succumbs to his wish of death. He jumps off of his betrayer's office, thus ending his life but not his stay on earth. He is forced to walk the earth as a Dark Winged Angel until his completes his destiny: to stop the man who destroyed his life from destroying anyone else's.
Dark Wing Story 1: Darkest Night
Title:Darkest Night
’Verse/characters: Dark Wing (Taylor)
Prompt: 074 Dark
Word Count: 460
Rating: PG-13 for character death…why do I always kill my characters?
Notes: This is the first story in my Dark Wing series. All the stories are inspired by a song: this one's song is "Getting Out Alive" by Three Days Grace. Oh, and don’t get used to first person…I think…
If your curious, the guy’s name is Taylor. Enjoy!
If I stay it won't be long
Till I'm burning on the inside
If I go I can only hope
That I make it to the other side
If you want to get out alive
Run for your life
If you want to get out alive
Hold on for [your life]
~ “Get Out Alive” by Three Days Grace
Although it’s nearing 5 ‘o clock in the evening, it’s as dark as night; the darkness fits my dark mood. The rain pounds the ground below my feet like drumsticks hitting a concrete drum. People rush by me; fearing the rain. It’s a stupid thing to fear, really. Your getting wet, so what? I gave up on understanding people long ago.
My legs are moving of their own accord; taking me to a familiar office building. Though I know he’s not there, I thought it would be a fitting place to do this. His betrayal is still fresh in my mind, though it’s been six months. As I enter the intimidating, gray building through a revolving glass door, my mind wanders from subject to subject. June always said I was easily distracted.
June…my sister; the only person, friend and family, that stayed with me after he destroyed my life. She was there for me when I woke from nightmares of him; she was there when I finally admitted what he had done. She told me repeatedly that it would all get better.
But it hasn’t, and I’m done waiting. I was never a very patient person. That is why I’m here, and that is why she is probably at home right now reading the letter I wrote for her. The last thing I will ever write for her.
Quietly, I head up one flight of stairs at a time; I’m heading for my own demise. I meet no one as my journey leads me to the top of the building; my leg muscles burn with pain, but I revel in it. It’ll be the last bit of pain I’ll feel. I hope. A lone, cold, steel door stands between my end and me now. I slowly push open the surprisingly heavy door and step out into the roof. The storm has picked up and it’s gotten even darker, something I didn’t think was possible. Lightning flashes against the black sky and thunder cuts through the urban noise from below. I walk towards the edge like a man heading to his own execution. Looking over the edge at the asphalt river below I idly wonder if death hurts. I realize I don’t really care.
As I step onto the edge I think about June and her reaction to this. I also let a spiteful thought enter my mind, directed at my destroyer.
“I hope you're happy now.”
My body leans forward and, as if in slow motion, I start to fall. I feel as if I’m flying and it’s a freeing sensation. I know I’ll be free soon. Darkness has always been my friend and, as I hit the ground, I know it hasn’t failed me on this night…my darkest night.
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 1:53 pm
Ur story's are allways great
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 1:54 pm
*grins* Thanks! Though I think you're a bit biased, bro! lol
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 1:58 pm
Waaaaaaiit... you guys are brother and sister irl? eek
And the story is awesome!
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 2:00 pm
nope i just have 2 sis on gaia u and her
u know why
coz u guyz love me
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 2:00 pm
On Gaia we are, Song, but not in rl. smile
And thanks!
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 2:02 pm
dont deny it arti u'd love to have me for a brother in rl
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 2:02 pm
Ah ok, cool. But Im the EVIL sister. twisted
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 2:05 pm
Of course I would, Adean! Who wouldn't?
Okay, Song, you can be the EVILEST one, but I'm still evil twisted
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 2:07 pm
OMG why do i get the evil sisters?
but u both love me
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 2:08 pm
As long as you serve my every need, yes
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 2:11 pm
*agrees with Song*
And hide my dead Gaia dealers... twisted
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 2:20 pm
i'll do anything for my sisters theyre allways there for me
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 2:20 pm
I like it so far! Feel free to post the rest here too!
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Night Of The Shadowraven Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Sep 06, 2007 2:20 pm
Oh yeah, failed to mention that ninja
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