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profitofrage

PostPosted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 12:21 am


ok i was wondering if i should start an RP on one of my sci fi books.

heres the basic story line and a VERY VERY VERY PLAIN LIMITED HISTORY
seriosly if u wanna know more bout the book pm me


her it is

History remember this is terribly basic but theres so much of it if i went into detail it would be 300 pages long LITERALLY

humanity explored space and met aliens
the aliens introduced humanity to the UA (universal alliance)
this was a massive unity of races
every known intelligent race was apart of it.
those that wernt were considered slaves.

humanity got into a war with ONE type of alien species.
humanity lost BIG TIME.
they used to live on 235 planets but were forced to live only on earth mars and a few others.

everyone who did not stay on these planets were turned into slaves.

humanity managed to create a massive and powerful army of cyborgs.
who were human sized machines made of mithrilium (its a new type of metal thats extremely durable NOT MAGIC)

cyborgs are ALL metal except for there brains.
which are not visable and are very limited.
they are treated like machines and have little to no real human qualitys.
these machines were permanently stripped of human like behavior.
anyway using this army humanity eventually took over the galaxy and wiped out EVERY intelligent form of life that may threaten them.

and now they live on and have colonized every planet within there reach. which is in the millions

just when humanity was at its peek
Terra (a mithrilium replacement for earth (earth was blown up))
separated itself from the UAH (United alliance of humans (all the aliens were killed)
there was no war but all the cyborgs and there powerful weaponry and technology left the UAH's army.
this ment the UAH recreated there army however there technology was limited.
the average soldier was brought back.
there weapons are still ballistic
(guns normal guns no lasers)
armor is various forms of Kevlar or plastic (kinda like bullet proof glass but bent into an armor and painted)

however more on the story.
soon a new alien species started attacking the outer planets of the UAH.
they are known as the cyrobreeds.
they are humanoid (two arms two legs one head)
there weapons are all biological. they are basically smaller gun shaped organisms that have the capabilities to shoot out spines filled with a mild acid.
(they are used like guns but are short range however they have a high rate of fire)

the aliens armor is a secondary skeleton that covers that covers the outside of there body. so yea they have an exoskeleton AND a normal one.
but there exoskeleton appears like armor.

anyway there armies are attacking.
they basically attack by launching large spires into a planet and then by collecting biological matter they give birth to more Cyrobreeds.
they come in several forms
the Cyrobreed Warrior which was described above.
the Cyrobreed spider
a small spider like creature that lunges at the face and attempts to send a spine directly into the brain killing instantly.
the Cryobreed lord a larger form of cyrobreed warrior but the lower half of there body is crab like. they carry much larger weapons and can easily punch through walls.


they are all extremely violent and do not seem to communicate to humans but do talk to each other with a system of yells grunts and barks.

FINALLY THE STORYLINE FOR MY PLANNED RP THANK GOD sorry for all that

anyway you are all on the planet Omega. this is a massive planet
i mean huge much bigger then most
anyway the cryobreeds have attacked your city and have destroyed pretty much all military forces.
however as in most cases small collections of surviving soldiers manage to save some civilians.
its a pretty classic story.
however rather then them being cut off from the rest of the world there simply left there.
they are givin orders to find as many survivors and try to live as long as they can.
the small collection of soldiers must survive on there own but are still givin objectives.
they dont have to folow orders and there main objective is simply to save civilians and survive.

anyway your in a major city that has been mainly destroyed.
some building remain in good shape
but most are not,
the cyrobreed army is in the thousands here in the city.
and there forces having already killed most of the people here simply send small forces of cryobreeds to mop up survivors.
these "packs" tend to be around 20 - 50 troops and should be avioded were possible.

anyway u can be a civilian or a soldier.
remember the only race u can be is human.
no inhuman abilities or appearances.
U are not superhuman in any respect so if u randomly jump out in the way of a bunch of aliens firing ur dead get over it.
there not retarded aliens either they do understand squad like tactics.


anyway what do u htink? would u jion
are there any comments on them
PostPosted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 7:28 pm


bump
aw come on someone at least read it

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 7:56 pm


I'm not much of a critic but it seems sorta..... bleh....
PostPosted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 7:59 pm


^^ lol please be more specific

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 9:26 pm


profitofrage
^^ lol please be more specific


Well, the plot is bland and heads off in several directions at once. One example is, what happened to the cyborgs? Did they regain their "humanity" and leave the humans, or come under the control of some greater power and it forced them to leave. Or were they simply destroyed? you can't just say that all weapons and cyborgs left the humans.

The "all aliens were killed" sort of blows too ((just thought i'd throw that out there )). Also it is sorta obscene to have humans populate that many planets... we're not rabbits y'know... >_>

The cyobreeds.... seem a tad bit limited as well. Though I like the idea of biological weapons, there should be different types of cyobreeds (( like a sniper, swordies, those big a** giants with a bazooka for an arm, etc. )), actually give the humans the full rape and wash treatment that a war would really bring.

And humans seem totally ******** against these things if they only have 20th century weapons >_>

(( i suck at describing things but I hope that layed it down abit for ya ))
PostPosted: Sun Aug 12, 2007 7:25 am


^^ ok here ill explain first about the cyborgs.
they are easily the most powerful weapons in the universe.
however they are all 100% loyal to Terra Solus and he decided to leave the UAH which is the human side.

now prior to that the cyborgs were the only weapons of the human race.

they left and so new weapons had to be made from nothing.
there not 20th centurie weapons DUH!! there like advanced versions of them.
wat i was tryng to say was that they still fire Bullets.
no lazers are used becuase lazers overheat and cannot be recharged easily
so in general combat they are pointless.
however large lasers are placed on tanks and such.
the fact is that we have found that general ballistic weaponry works better then laser technology.

the cyborgs are sometimes sent in to help humanity in times of need.
BUT its really rare and usually only ever one is sent to a single campaign.

ok next thing about the aliens.
its part of my book series
and in that the cyborgs and Terra solus totally cleasned the universe to protect humanity.
low intellegent creatures still exist but any form of life that could potentially produce weapons was killed.
(except the cryobreeds because they have just been discovered.

as for the how many planets we have.
they have had like 50000 years to expand space.
they have the technology to instantly travel from planet to planet.
i think that 50000 years is heap of times to colonize that many planets.
as for the cyrobreeds.
if u really want a full species list then fine here it is.


Cyrobreed warrior:
these are the most common breed.
they are strong and cunning.
they have a similar intellegence to humans but communicate only in grunts and barks.
they are very aggressive and totally self sacrificing they would gladly die to allow victory.
they can carry any number of weaponry.
there most common weapon is there Bio organic spine rifle.
a weapon that fires spines. these are filled with small amounts of acid that allow penetration through light armors.
they also carry several bone saws.
these are machete sized blades made of a dense strong and sharp bone like material.
some are outfitted with the dreaded acid spewer.
this is similar to the spine rifle.
however rather then firing spines it has large tubes that link to sacks on the creatures back.
these sacks are filled with a powerful acidic organism that eats through most organic material and heavy armors.
its range is low but deadly.

the cyrobreed lord is very dangerous.
they can carry spine launchers.
these are a large version of the spine rifle
it is basically there form of heavy machine gun.
however the spines can easily puncture through thin walls and light to medium armor.

they can also carry Breed launchers.
these are large sacks connected to there backs.
however they launch cryobreed spiders at incredible speeds with force.
if they miss there target the spider can usually land safly.
if it hits somehting the force is usually hard enough to punch through even heavy armor.
this is the anti tank unit of the cyrobreeds however they are powerful against infantry as well.

the lords have far thicker bone armor on and are usually immune to light fire.

ok u want to know what kind of weapons we have ok heres the list.

Light arms:
the MV2 pistol
this is very similar to a magnum of today but with a 25 clip magazine explosive rounds and an automatic option.
the MV4 machine gun:
this is a small automatic machine gun.
it has a 45 clip magazine is inaccurate at long range but in close to medium range it is effective.
designed for supressive fire.

the MV5 rifle
this is the standard weapon for the marines.
it has a 30 clip magazine.
light armor piercing explosive rounds light armor piercing..
fully automatic but can be set to burst or single fire.
it is good at long medium and even short ranges.
it can have an attached grenade launcher. and lazer sight.
of course all these weapons can be given heat sensing sights (capable of seeing through walls. (not firing through them unless its medium to high armor pearcing.

MV22 sniper rifle.
10 round clip.
manual pump reload.
high armor piercing explosive rounds.
2km sight that can account for wind resistance movement and other variables. simply any marine can pick these up and snap off a head shot from 500 metres away without any other formal training.
anyhting beyond that range needs training in order to be fully utilized.
can usually be used to fire through walls. is easily carried on a soldiers back

MV8 missile launcher
full heat, light and mass seeking capability's
ounce it is locked onto a target there is only a 10% chance of a miss.
its explosive yeild can be adjusted to suit area.
the smaller blast radius the higher penetrating ability.
has a 200 metre range. and is easily carryied on a soldiers back.

the standard Bull dog grenade:
similar to the frag grenade.
except the fragments are replaced with highly explosive miniature bullets.
this creates a initial explosion with a 5 meter radius. then shrapnel capable of blowing of limbs a further 10 meters in all directions.
so maximum range of grenade 10 meters.

^^ does that help.

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PostPosted: Sun Aug 12, 2007 8:25 am


if you do do this i got dibs on a squad leader position please?
PostPosted: Mon Aug 13, 2007 2:55 am


ok then u can be a Sargent.

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PostPosted: Mon Aug 13, 2007 3:24 am


great maybe you should add in a flamethrower unit for the marines so if they do encounter a large swarm they have a better chance of survivng because if that did happen in reality most of the unit would be killed.
PostPosted: Mon Aug 13, 2007 6:15 am


^^ lol

actually that wasnt the whole gun list

i just thought it was getting long
but they also have
shotguns
flamethrowers
various other types of grenades
mortars
specialist knives (there like mini chainsaws)
mini guns
tanks
jeeps
bikes
helicopters
hover vehicles
jets
anti air weapons
anti tank weapons
flak artilary
flak weaponry
and the list goes on lol ^^

but as requested heres the flame thrower stats

the Flame Thrower model 5
this is a small hand held version of the model 6
it can launch a small bout of flame up to 5 metres in range.
it is about the size of a pistol and the fuel tank can be carried on the back.
the amount of fuel is less then the model 6 but it protected by thicker armor preventing explosions.

the model 6 is the larger version with a range of about 10 meters
the fuel tank is much larger and must be carried on the back
it is usually prone to explosions when hit. almost always used as a support weapon.

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PostPosted: Mon Aug 13, 2007 9:16 am


bumpie
PostPosted: Mon Aug 13, 2007 6:46 pm


The way that you have the paragraphs is too broken up and hard to read.

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profitofrage

PostPosted: Tue Aug 14, 2007 5:22 am


yea im sorry about that ^^
but if u read it all then u sorta get the idea

the problem is that the story line is massive.
and this is a tiny tiny tiny part of the story.
my story is universe wide
these events happen on this one planet in fact in one city of the planet.
so im sorry but im trying to fit the general idea and setting of such a massive place into a single city.
im trying real hard to show the concept behind it all and make an rp out of it.
PostPosted: Tue Aug 14, 2007 5:48 am


This is a picture of the legendary Cyborg.

he is totally mechanic and made of dense near indestructible metals.

there minds are powerful supercomputers and can literally compute fast enough for them to calculate the trajectory of bullets mid flight.
they are the ultimate warriors.
however it is rare to see one these days.
it is a rare and awesome sight to see more then one sent to a planet.

http://tn3-2.deviantart.com/fs12/300W/i/2006/279/3/8/phucheristik_solja_by_zeo_x.jpg

profitofrage


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PostPosted: Tue Aug 14, 2007 6:12 am


I would gladly join as a sniper with formal military training and I think the story line is good but basing something on a books story line all the way leaves little possability for change
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