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Username: stevesteve
RP Name: Daniel Zher
RP Age: 15
RP Gender: Male
Sexuality: Straight
Bio: Dan is half demon. He is not like most Demons as he does not kill everything he sees. He is not "evil". He is also half human so he can have feelings and emotions. Being half demon he has incredible strength and speed. He also studied alot of human fighting styles and ways to use/control the elements and magic. When he is angry he is diffrent than before and alot stronger. He can use dark magic when he is in "demon form".
Personality: Strong, Silent, Mysterious, and Deadly.
Appearance:

Other: Parents are dead and has a half brother.

I happen to agree with this lovely dear above, but I also suggest putting in a lot more detail than you have. You state all that he is with nothing that really grabs the attention of anyone who reads this. You also repeat yourself many times, and I mean it's good to restate yourself once in a while to remind the reader and what not, but when you keep restating what you have already said many times before you loose the interest of those who read this. The six words that help me out when creating a character:

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