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 Posted: Tue Jul 03, 2007 2:39 pm
I haven't read through everything, only skimped, so I'm just going to point out a few crits I see at this stage.
Seed of life is pretty interesting, although you should try to work it into the backstory of Kyou's breedable world more. On the first page of the lab thread you can read it. I'm not sure what tree of life you're referring to is, but in Kyou's setting the world originally had the Yggdrasil or World Tree that is very similar in nature to a tree of life, and it is Mother Nature, a personified being, that created the first life. How do you plan on reconciling these facts? Having a tree of life in addition to the Yggdrasil tree could be potentially awkward. I also would like to see an explanation of how the seed's power (revivnig the dead) affects the Raevan's power. So far most of your Raevan's powers have to do with the soul, not the fel essence, and it's usually the fel essence that controls what kind of power a Raevan has.
I did like your shards of moonlight idea and am sad to see it go. The idea of breaking a source of light into peices and materializing those peices is very interesting to me.
Otherwise I do like the idea of a petrified fairy wing and would love to see you develop that idea more.
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Posted: Mon Jul 16, 2007 10:41 am
To Ebony: Thank you for comment ^^
To Shuu: You're right. After reading over my concept, I noticed they were a few...holes. I promise to fix it up, after some good researching. I'm glad you liked the shards, I'm a bit sad to part with it. And the petrified fairy wing...it actually sounds managable. *ideas ideas* Thank you so much for your comment and critique.
Maybe the Seed of Life needs to be replaced...*ponders ponders*
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Posted: Tue Jul 17, 2007 12:49 pm
*peeks* Well seeds are seen as a type of life, aren't they? Making new ones, at any rate. Maybe change what it represents to go against the normal idea of a seed.
Best of luck. smile
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Posted: Sat Mar 01, 2008 6:37 pm
After countless months of being on hiatus, I'm back - and ready to really work on this quest.
...Um, not that I wasn't working on it BEFORE now. ^^;;
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Posted: Mon Mar 03, 2008 7:08 pm
Okay, I think I've tweaked the first concept as best as I can, for the time being.
Now it's time to work on the fairy essence. @_@
(And this concept will be a female. I think I lost some brain cells trying to decide the gender for the first concept. xD)
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Posted: Tue Apr 01, 2008 7:41 am
I think the rock/bone concept is a bit better than the spider/seed. It didn't take me a lot of time to think about the concept itself. And I think I'll stick this one as a permanent concept.
So yay on saving brain cells! 8D
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Posted: Thu Apr 24, 2008 6:40 pm
*such a dork* I noticed someone else had 'Living Bone' as an essence. Therefore, I scratched my bone idea out.
And instead replaced it with Electric Flame. Ahaha. I really need to stop listening to 'Push Push Lady Lightning', 'cause that's where I got my idea from. xD
Also, I've decided on Attilyn's (concept #2) diet: laughter. I got the idea from reading a fairy story by Gail Carson Levine. 8D Yay inspirations!
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