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[ In Nomine Satanas ]

PostPosted: Wed Nov 15, 2006 1:21 pm


These are two sonnets, stuff I've never tried before!

Sonnet I: Moon, Why Art Thou So Blue?

O' moon, why art thou so blue this evening?
An unrequited love perhaps tonight?
Does the bard now refuse you whilst he sings?
Are men not inspired at but one sight
Of your beauty and divine grace although
You are the essence of love and of lust?
Why is it that you are so full of woe?
Are men the object of your now lost trust?
Cheer up o' celestial love goddess
Thy doleful and weary spirit divine
Hath sadden all men, now full of distress
Smile, and let your love come down and shine
For tears will spill if so sad you do stay,
Never 'fore have men wished for light and day!


Sonnet II: My Life, a Soliloquy

This love I have never spoke of before
A moment fleeting, it has passed me by
Life is a soliloquy, evermore
With a heavy heart and a heavy sigh
Death was but an alluring thought 'til now
A guilt ridden last chance escape method
A way for me to skip the why and how
To end all pain from a wound that has bled
The sadness from my heart and from my soul
I have shared my thoughts and feelings alone
Surrounded by people, not in the whole
The flame from my life's candle has been blown
Life for me has been a soliloquy
In this darkness I am finally free
PostPosted: Wed Nov 15, 2006 2:34 pm


[ In Nomine Satanas ]
Does the bard no refuse you whilst he sings?


Very beautiful, and you say its your first time! I appluad. By the way, this is my first constructive criticisms so if I'm doing something wrong let me know. sweatdrop

The part I quoted, to me it seems like the 'no' is out of place. Just the way it reads/ my point of veiw.

AkinaTerta


[ In Nomine Satanas ]

PostPosted: Wed Nov 15, 2006 2:46 pm


... It's a typo, supposed to be 'now'

Now I must go fix that.
PostPosted: Wed Nov 15, 2006 3:35 pm


gorgeous prose!

>>
<<

HAPPY TIME!

what's a soliloquy?

It's a shakespeare word, isn't it?

Speaking of Shakespeare, the 1968 version of Romeo and Juliet is SOO AWESOME!

namely, because romeo is.....so, so hot.

But anyway.

WOOT

KirbyVictorious


[ In Nomine Satanas ]

PostPosted: Wed Nov 15, 2006 5:25 pm


KirbyVictorious
gorgeous prose!

>>
<<

HAPPY TIME!

what's a soliloquy?

It's a shakespeare word, isn't it?

Speaking of Shakespeare, the 1968 version of Romeo and Juliet is SOO AWESOME!

namely, because romeo is.....so, so hot.

But anyway.

WOOT


A soliloquy is a theatre term. It is when a character makes a speech revealing his or her inner thoughts and feelings, it is done wither alone or unaware of the other characters being present.

Since you like Shakespeare I will you that as an example, in Romeo And Juliet during the balcony scene when Juliet says, "Romeo Romeo, Wherefore art thou Romeo?" That whole speech is a soliloquy.
PostPosted: Wed Nov 15, 2006 9:18 pm


hehehe.

Romeo and Juliet...

Romeo is sooooo cute...^^

OKay, I learned something today. woot. Now, to sleep.

KirbyVictorious


[ In Nomine Satanas ]

PostPosted: Thu Nov 16, 2006 1:54 pm


KirbyVictorious
hehehe.

Romeo and Juliet...

Romeo is sooooo cute...^^

OKay, I learned something today. woot. Now, to sleep.


I'm always willing to be a Maestro! I've got a few more wrote, and I'll post them later.
PostPosted: Thu Nov 16, 2006 2:32 pm


Love how people comment on their wn stuff, but not anyone elses.

Not you. well, not JUST you.

I'm in a bad mood,

because I lent someone my story,

and they lost it.

ON a frickin' bus

free for anyone to put on the internet

great

KirbyVictorious


[ In Nomine Satanas ]

PostPosted: Sat Nov 18, 2006 4:18 pm


KirbyVictorious
Love how people comment on their wn stuff, but not anyone elses.

Not you. well, not JUST you.

I'm in a bad mood,

because I lent someone my story,

and they lost it.

ON a frickin' bus

free for anyone to put on the internet

great


Well people are naturally going to comment on their own work more, hoping to get constructive criticisms and ego boosting compliments.
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