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I think people need to take criticism to get better! x3. Those who can't accept it may not be able to accept their flaws in their character. Or so I think. xD.

Thank you for saying it's pretty. I think it is too! -luffs on it-

Yes, I'll check out your concept. I doubt I'll find anything wrong with it.

Yes, perhaps.

The IotS quest forums are not the fastest in the guild. XD But, hmm, let's see...

Not a lot of info on Rae! This is probably because you're still redoing it though (you might consider not asking for critiques until you have all the new info up, because it's hard to critique something that isn't there!) Personality section could be fleshed out a LOT, I have a really, really basic idea of her character but it's a really shallow understanding. How is she self-centered? How does she know how to fight if she's not-violent (I mean, was she trained? Did something specifically happen that made her learn how to fight defensively?) What prompts her to say harsh or cruel things?

...I dunno if it was different before, but I don't think you need the "OK THIS IS MY CONCEPT CHILD" notice there, because the banner and the "Spirit info" kind of gives it away. XD ..Oh, wait, though the banner for the two sections -- guardian and spirit -- are the same.. hm. :C You might consider switching the two posts, putting the spirit up first and the guardian below, as I'm presuming you want the spirit child to be the focal point of the quest, yes?

Ok. Interesting name! One of my favorites, actually. Why was it given to her, though? Also, do the chains on her wrists, ankles, and waist wrap around like bracelets/anklets/...waistlets? or as one continuous chain that wraps around her body?

Like you already noted, you should add more in-depth info on her personality... How is it that her sassiness is a facade? A facade for WHAT? What kind of questions does she not want to discuss? How is she bewitching and persuasive -- as in, what exactly does she do that would make someone go "Oh, she's bewitching and persuasive"? You tell more than you show.

Hunh. The "breaking things BUT NOT MAJOR EVENTS" sounds interesting, though I have no idea what she could break because you haven't filled that in yet.

Oh, and the backstory... I think perhaps you should get clarification from Esprit on this, because I was always under the impression that Spirits were NOT reincarnations of human souls but actual natural spirits that would normally not manifest into a physical form. There're a lot of shops that have to do with reincarnation, and I'm not sure it'd fit in this shop. And.. again.. more details you haven't filled in... I don't know, I'm not entirely buying this, to be honest. Circe dies from a lack of the will to live -- um, what gives her the drive to reincarnate? What kind of illness did she die of, anyway?

The art is pretty though!

I don't know, if I had seen that you were still filling in a lot of stuff, I don't think I would've done this critique at all XD; Like I've said repeatedly, you shouldn't ask for critique when you're still redoing stuff.

Where does it say reincarnation anyways? I thought I took all that out..? xD.