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 Posted: Sun Apr 16, 2006 4:02 pm
sorry it's so long... i forgot about this till like today
can any of u read it and tell me what u think
or any grammer stuff that is mussed up
i tried to do it in first person, but dunno if i forgot to change some of it or not
*orginally it was 3 different poems, that were together in some ways... but alil different the one was than the others...*
THANKIES
i'll start it on the next post
EDIT: I FORGOT I DIDN'T HAVE SCHOOL TOMORROW
SO LUCKLY I HAVE AN EXTRA DAY FOR THIS...
WAitin' for my nazi freind to get on... lol
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Posted: Sun Apr 16, 2006 4:07 pm
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Posted: Sun Apr 16, 2006 4:50 pm
That is so cool! heart I'm too tired to be any good with suggestions right now, but I really like it. ^_^;;
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Posted: Sun Apr 16, 2006 7:43 pm
WOW!!! *CLAPS hundreds of times* That was.....awesome! Have you ever considered getting your poems published!? I absoultely loved that! I don;t know why, but I just loved it! Awesome job Blue!
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Posted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 3:45 am
that poem was awsome but *dress up like Deno* There's oh wait a minute *sprays root beer on herself* NOW I'm Deno. -^.^- you keep using threw. That's the threw you use for a baseball. you want through. as in over the river and through the woods. Now I have to go and wash of the root beer.
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Posted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 12:22 pm
TJ_Jaganshi that poem was awsome but *dress up like Deno* There's oh wait a minute *sprays root beer on herself* NOW I'm Deno. -^.^- you keep using threw. That's the threw you use for a baseball. you want through. as in over the river and through the woods. Now I have to go and wash of the root beer. well since your being such a pick of is also used as as off is to wash OFF the root beer. that was a good poem though.
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Posted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 5:04 pm
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Posted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 6:08 pm
*Sprays Deno with root beer*
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Posted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 6:31 pm
Great Prince Laharl *Sprays Deno with root beer* i've taught well smile
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Posted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 7:00 pm
Great Prince Laharl WOW!!! *CLAPS hundreds of times* That was.....awesome! Have you ever considered getting your poems published!? I absoultely loved that! I don;t know why, but I just loved it! Awesome job Blue! YAY! *blushes* i've actully had one of my poems 'Cholcolate *spelled right for oncelol* Covered Strawberrys' in a book, pupblished by poetry.com, i hate that site thou u'll alwasy get stuff sayin' they want u'r poem in a book and the books are like 40$$$ only really kool thing about that was that my poem was the first one in the book on PAGE ONE!!! YEPPERS!
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Posted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 7:41 pm
BlueCowGirl Great Prince Laharl WOW!!! *CLAPS hundreds of times* That was.....awesome! Have you ever considered getting your poems published!? I absoultely loved that! I don;t know why, but I just loved it! Awesome job Blue! YAY! *blushes* i've actully had one of my poems 'Cholcolate *spelled right for oncelol* Covered Strawberrys' in a book, pupblished by poetry.com, i hate that site thou u'll alwasy get stuff sayin' they want u'r poem in a book and the books are like 40$$$ only really kool thing about that was that my poem was the first one in the book on PAGE ONE!!! YEPPERS! Chocolate is misspelled here. xp And so is strawberries. First page? Spiffy.
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Posted: Mon Apr 17, 2006 9:58 pm
Its cool, pity i suck at english so i cant really help with spelling, though i can point out americans use z's in places where we use s's
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Posted: Tue Apr 18, 2006 7:36 am
Sagebomb Its cool, pity i suck at english so i cant really help with spelling, though i can point out americans use z's in places where we use s's i just about never use z's... so dunno except confuzzled thanks for your comments on my poem, i changed a few things on it when i was refixin' the stuff Deno told me about it's three pages , two collums it looks good now, and my 'Goodbye, my Love.' is at the top of the collum so it sets that part off on the 'when i said those last three words'[ but i think the womans name Raskia is the name in Forest Of THe Nights, dunno for sure, or one of that ladys books of a woman name
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Posted: Tue Apr 18, 2006 7:50 am
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