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 Posted: Wed Nov 05, 2014 6:05 pm
xx S H I N I G A M I ҉ P R O F I L E __________________________________________________________ .. " Well, hello there, sweetheart!" ╔═══════ x ═══════╗ -- Mai Kimura -- ╚═══════ x ═══════╝ 
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Posted: Wed Nov 05, 2014 6:27 pm
xx MAI KIMURA
Never take your work
too seriously, hun.
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Basic Criteria
Name | Mai Kimura
Alias| Kimura-san, sometimes referred to as "My Lady"
Gender | Female
Race | Shinigami
Affiliations | Gotei 13: Eighth Division
Rank Held | Seated Officer; Captain.
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Numerical Files
Birth Date | August 18th
Astronomical Sign | Leo
Age | 487 years; appears to be 24
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Physical Attributes
Blood Type O |
Height 5'5"|
Weight | 59 kg (130.1 lbs.)
Ethnicity | Japanese
Eye Color | Yellow-Orange
Physical Description| Mai has a curvy figure, though her waist isn't so 'pinched' sized like the hourglass figure. She's a chesty woman, a C-Cup size. Her skin is lightly tanned. Some of her hair is held out of her face, besides her short bangs on the right side of her face, which is pulled back of head into a bun with black chopsticks.
Wardrobe | Mai presently wears the standard Shinigami uniform, although has made some alterations to it. The sleeves are cut short, and her top half has been altered to be off the shoulder. Though she felt uncomfortable showing off skin at first, it gave her a self-esteem boost.
Captain Haori style » Sleeves cut off
Haori Underside Color » Starch White
Lieutenant Badge Location »
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Personal Attributes
Quirks
House Wife Material: Besides her having Spiritual Power..She can cook, she really hasn't gone to much reading and studying into cooking so she's not a professional, but she is able to make a good homemade meal. She has learned how to sew and clean when she would help around the house growing up with a family of seven and her parents were mostly busy with work.
Busy-body: Mai also tends to work a lot, if she finishes paperwork she will look or make other work to keep herself busy. She gets to the points to where she overworks herself and when this happens, she becomes a mean and sarcastic woman from being stressed out!...But then apologizes for saying any cruel things the next day.
Humble Soul: Mai used to get nervous when complimented, involved in any kind of flirting made her uncomfortable and would immediately blush due to embarrassment. She has always been that way, with people noticing her responsibilities. She may have adapted her step father's pushover genes, but takes pride in her duties, never failing to properly execute them.
Favors |
Receiving letters
Reading love novels
Being a neat freak
Disdains |
Dishes in the mess hall sink
sPiDeRS
Sleeping in past 9 AM
Preference of Food |
Mai does her best to keep her life style a healthy one when it comes to food, junk food is not acceptable to her. Though, she tends to cheat that sometimes.
Tangerines
Nikujaga
Chanpurū
Tsukemono with a side of rice
Disliked Foods |
Umeboshi
Katsuo no Tataki
Mai tends to dislike very spicy foods, and thinks Mackerel is too bland.
Preference of Drink |
Mai actually loves to drink, she takes a large liking to alcoholic beverages.
Shōchū
Nigori
Awamori
Herbals Teas
Milkshakes? (World of Living drink...)
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Something Unknown |
Mai's entire family is adopted. She has six other siblings, and is the third to oldest sister.
Fears |
Losing more than everything she should have
Being rejected by a long awaited goal
Breaking a bone in her body
Aspirations |
To finally find her biological family
Make the best onigiri in Seireitei
CHEESEY: To find true love
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Posted: Wed Nov 05, 2014 6:30 pm
xxSUCH PRETTY EYES YOU HAVE...
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What kind of childhood is this...? Chapter One: Biting at The Cold
Time Frame? 423 years ago
"And so it begins... Abandoned"
Location: West Rukongai; District 1, Junrinan.
A pair of bruised, battered feet dip into a small riverside pond and a small whimper escapes the chapped lips of a young girl. "...O-ouch..." Mai cries, descending into the water. Raising her beige kimono above her knees, she sighed, noticing another rip by her left hip. She could fit her entire fist through it, and she didn't have any supplies to mend it. Being an orphan never guaranteed the life of prosperity. Mai never wanted to be an orphan in the first place, but she had no choice. The day she found out, she had woken up in a bed of leaves with the absence of her parents. After waiting 2 days, Mai began to look for them instead. Thus she had been venturing out in West Rukongai for the next three days.
Having no shoes on, Mai made her inquisitive journey over the sharp rocks and riverbeds around the mountains. She had a knack for instinct and was able to copy animalistic gestures by seeing what berries they ate, and grabbed bushels of them quietly, slinking away. A day later, Mai came across a small village, and a shack that smelled of freshly smoked fish. Her hunger was on the brink of insanity. Following the aroma to the porch of the shack, her golden eyes landed on a plate perched outside for cooling. A salivation began to form in her mouth, and she could feel her feet move slowly towards the platter. Mai had stared at it for quite a while, and her patience betrayed her, as she went for the large fish with both hands and took a gruesome bite. Although it burned her tongue, she had savagely devoured the piece of fish and quickly spit out the bones that scraped the roof of her mouth for another taste. Her eyes widened to see a cup filled to the brim of liquid right beside the plate and swiftly drank all that was left in it. It had a burning sensation, but her thirst was quenched, and Mai sighed loudly, setting the cup down.
"My my... said a masculine voice. Mai looked up to find a large man staring back down at her with squinty eyes and long dark hair. Mai gasped and started to make her way back into the brush of the forest when she had tripped over a stone, causing her to scrape her knees and create another hole in her raggedy robe. She looked back to find the man walking towards her slowly, and Mai began to squirm away when he towered over her. "Hey now...I'm not mad you finished my lunch." he chuckled, scooping her up in his arms and causing her to gasp again. "Such pretty eyes you have... Where are your parents?" Mai had already succumbed to the man's strength and looked down to avoid his gaze, shaking her head. The man's eyes never opened, but they deemed an observing look. He then looked at her clothes and her mused hair from dust and dirt and brought her inside. "Well," he said, with a small smile. "We'd love to have you stay a while. My name's Sho. And you are?"
xxLITTLE RAY OF SUNSHINE
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"Rain, rain, go away... Come again another day..." Chapter Two: Clouds Be Gone
Time Frame? 320 years ago
"A flame was kindled..."
It had been about 100 years since Mai had been accepted into the Kimura household. Along with her, 5 others were also taken in by Sho and Rei Kimura. At the time, it was apparent that Mai would harbor her self-confidence and spoke little to the other village children. She kept her golden eyes down low, looking at her feet as she walked past the others and rushed back home after running errands, solely because they made her look like a feline animal. "Look! It's the cat demon girl!" a boy snickered, pointing out a finger as she scurried by. A crowd of boys and girls shrewdly picked up pebbles and began to throw them at her. "H-hey...! she stammered. "C-cut it out!!"
With snickering in her ears, Mai quickly bolted to the Kimura household, and tripped on her newly salmon colored dress. As a result, the other children laughed loudly at her, as she frantically picked up market supplies. "Go on back to your shack! We know your parents never wanted you anyways!" one of them bellowed. It was then, that one of Mai's nerves had been broken. A heat broke loose in her body, and a blindness took over her as she felt her fist hit the boy who had made the remark. The others had slowly backed away and bolted for their homes. A broken bottle of pickled vegetable laid by her doorstep as her adoptive older brother, Michi stepped outside to see what the screaming was all about. Mai towered over the boy, shaggy-haired and tattered from hitting the ground. He whimpered, staring at her menacing glare and quickly apologized. Before Mai could respond, Michi walked over and put a hand on her shoulder. He could see she was shaking with both anger and guilt. He motioned with his eyes for the boy to go, and he did so, with his hand on his cheek. "Heh...that's going to leave quite a mark." he whispered to Mai quietly. He knew the poor girl didn't have it in her to hurt someone, but he didn't blame her for her action either. Michi felt a pair of arms clutch his waist and warm tears soak his kimono. He sighed and picked her up over his shoulder, even if she was getting to be a bit bigger. "Hey now," Michi said, softly. "It's fine, Okaasan won't be mad. And I hate pickled vegetables anyway."
xxFUTURE OF THE PHOENIX
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"As if a madness had taken over me..." Chapter One Waves Of Heat
Time Frame? 167 years ago.
"Chained to a burning desire..."
Had the heat flashes been stoic, Mai would consider herself normal. But she, and the rest of her family knew she was anything but that. During the hours of the night, Mai would feel a heat in her abdomen that would soon engulf her head in a excruciating and hot pain. As a result, Mai would clutch herself and scream out in pain. Sho, the stressed adopted father, and wife Rei were worried that they were fevers occurring from Mai overworking herself. Instead of sending her on errands, she would relax at home under the care of Rei. She wasn't really the soft-hearted mother that anyone expected. She would smoke tobacco from her long pipe all day and cook often with pickled vegetables. Harsh words always left her mouth like, "Tell your old-farted father to piss off!" or A sumo wrestler would look more decent in that as opposed to you." Nevertheless, she had a soft spot for her children, and that was what others hadn't seen. Sho was practically a full-time pushover when it came to making decisions, so Rei would act as the harsh filter. Falling sick had only made Rei and Sho more colorful in character, as Rei would cook some of Mai's favorite foods and make Michi, Koji, Jun, Maria, and Liliana run the errands. Sho would take Mai swimming to cool her off, and only temporarily would it work. Favoring his eldest adopted daughter, Sho would put Maria and Koji in time out for teasing her only to let them out in a matter of minutes.
But Mai's condition was critical, and didn't seem to get any better. She enjoyed the care she was receiving, though everything that was tried to make her feel even the slightest bit normal, had no affect. It was the worst when she was alone, the heat would begin to affect the room itself, and she'd resort to staying outside for a while in desperation for a breeze. On one of those nights, she had taken a carving knife and a block of wood to keep herself busy. When shaving off small strokes, the wings of a bird began to form as the scent of smokey wood arose from the small sculpture. As she finished the details of the feathers and the beak, she looked at it in weary admiration. Setting it down had suddenly summoned a blazing flame and a wide golden eyes from Mai. She began to panic, trying to douse the flame with a heavy cloth, and yet, that had caught aflame as well.
Shielding herself, Mai looked to find a large phoenix bird, with glorious red feathers and radiant eyes. Expecting it to caw loudly, it had spoken to her instead. "You will come to know my name, Mai Kimura." it said. And with its disappearance, a bouquet of lilies lay wrapped in the cloth used to shoo the fire away.
A painful confusion lingered with Mai as she had told her second eldest brother Koji. "Heh...I knew you were weird!" he laughed jokingly. But his face turned sullen afterward. "You know what it means though...don't you?" Mai had a blank face and shook her head. Koji laughed again. "Well, you'll figure it out eventually." he said.
After telling her father, Sho had come the conclusion of helping Mai out. "Mai-chan, those lilies are beautiful. They are delicate treasures this time of year." he said softly, as he left. Mai stared at the abnormally small flowers for the rest of the day and became full of anger at night, causing another heat flash. What was the damn bird's name...?! The pain was excruciating enough for her to realize when she ran outside in the middle of the night. "...S-Sayuri... Your name is Sayuri hi Yuri...!" she exclaimed in a sweat, grasping the little lilies to her chest.
A cool wind swept Mai to the ground in exhaustion as a flame appeared in front of her. A figure stepped out of the heat and slowly crept up to Mai. Surprisingly it was not the phoenix, but a woman with crimson eyes and hair approached her with one of the little lilies in her hand. Sayuri smiled as she held a hand out to Mai and helped her up. Astonished by the air of familiarity between them, she smiled back. "Took you long enough..." she said.
The next morning, Mai had found herself training with the spirit granted to her, with the blade that Sho had crafted for her to use. A secret hidden from the rest of the family, Sho had been a retired blacksmith, and was able to make Asauchi in the back shed by the house. It was a quite a long blade for Mai to handle at first, but the hilt was so finely made, with a sheath being a deep red. She figured it seemed very fit for Sayuri, the fire bird.
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Posted: Wed Nov 05, 2014 6:37 pm
xxSAYURI HI YURI
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"Come dance with me in the summer meadows."
Zanpakutō Name | Sayuri Hi Yuri
English Translation | Fire Lily
Zanpakutō Element | Fire
Zanpakutō Spirit | Fire Phoenix
Zanpakutō Inner World | Embers Mountaineer
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Spirit Files
Zanpakutō Blade Type | Normal Red Katana
Zanpakutō Accessories | N/A
Zanpakutō Sealed Appearance | Sayuri Hi Yuri
Blade Color » Stainless Steel
Sheath Color » Crimson Red
Hilt Color » Gold
Tsuba Shape » See Zanpakutō Sealed Appearance
Length » 39 inches in total.
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Shikai Files
Zanpakutō Activation Statement | "Sukōchi (Scorch), Sayuri hi Yuri!"
Zanpakutō Blade Changes | Shikai When released, the sword turns into an almost trident-like weapon. The pole around five feet in length, the blades adding another foot-and-a-half in length. The blunt end has a few chain links, and attached, a small gold ribbon. There are two main blades on the sides of the pole. The blades turn downward, then curve upward, and right after the curve, the blades split, creating four blades in total. At the center of the blades rest a gold ring with a large spike protruding out of the pole and blades. The center spike is slightly longer than the four blades. When the weapon is swung around during battle, it naturally releases flames from the blades.
Shikai Abilities
Ability One: フェニックスの羽のラッシュ"Fenikkusu no hane no rasshu" (Lash of Phoenix Feathers)
Mai can summon three large golden feathers that levitate around Mai. The feathers will lash out at the opponent while she is fighting causing decent physical damage. These feathers though, can be broken by the opponent with a couple good hits (3-4 hits if it were at the power magnitude of a kido spell at level 32; 1 hit if it were a the the power magnitude of a Gray Rey Cero; takes a 7 post cool down ).
Ability Two: 羽の火の踊り"Hane no hi no odori" (Feather Fire Dance)
A defensive and offensive ability where Mai spins her weapon above her head, creating a whirlwind of fire that shoots out sharp feathers engulfed in flame. They reach a distance of about 14 feet, and coming in contact with the feathers causes them to self-destruct. It is usually used when the opponent is too close (Lasts for 8 posts and needs 8 posts to regenerate).
Ability Three: 激怒したタグ除名: "Gekido shita tagu jomei" (Fire Tag Expulsion)
A dual offensive and defensive ability, allowing Mai to utilize the one flaming tag at the end of her staff. By focusing her spiritual pressure, she is able to distribute amounts of it to the tags at the end of her staff; Mai can physically rip off the tag herself and attach it to an enemy through close combat, a more brisk and hidden way, or swing around her staff and have the tags explode on command. (Lasts for 2 posts; regenerates in 2 posts.)
Shikai Control Level | Expert Shikai Wielder: Achieved.
Shikai Duration | Unlimited
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Bankai Files
Zanpakutō Name | 炎の強風: "Honō no kyōfū"
English Translation | Gale of Flames
Bankai Appearance | Sayuri: Bankai Released
Mai's three pronged spear transforms into a four pronged trident that is on both sides. Similar to shikai, it is a length of the same 5 feet, but far passing in strength and offense, the Gale of flames naturally swings with flames when Mai swings it around.
Bankai Limitations |
Contact with water/ice.
Bankai Strengths |
Contact with wind/lightning/earth.
Bankai Abilities
Ability One: 救済の涙 "Kyūsai no namida" (Tears of Remediation)
As legend tells, Sayuri is that of a Fire Phoenix, thus rendering to the mythical agent of healing tears. However this ability is utilized only in dire situations, in the results of fatal wounds inflicted upon Mai or a comrade in the near distance. by summoning Sayuri herself in phoenix form, the tears must be in sympathetic harmonization with the wielder in order to grant remediation. Tears must be directly placed on wounds and will heal within 3 posts.(This ability last for 3 Posts; takes 11 posts to cool down.)
Ability Two: 伝道者の炎 "Dendō-sha no honō" (Flames of the Evangelist)
By performing a verbal incantation: "Seinaru honō o shōji" (Arise, holy flames), the natural colors of the fire around her transform into a white flame. With this, she has the ability to execute evil beings such as hollows, unlawful spirits, demons that still wander about the world, causing havoc; anything that threatens her being and angelic figures if seen to appropriate fit. When shooting a flame by the whisk of her trident at an opponent mid-range, Mai can choose to immobilize, rather than outright kill them, surrounding them in a ring of fire. The flames rise and lower at Mai's command as well. Though this move is extremely powerful, it creates an extreme risk to Mai's spiritual depletion in strength afterward. (Lasts 5 posts; takes 10 posts to cool down; 2 posts for summoning)
Ability Three:引火性大虐殺 "Inka-sei dai gyakusatsu" (Flamable Carnage)
Mai's top offensive and defensive combo attack; Flamable Carnage is by far, one of Mai's most efficient moves in a battle. Using the lot of her spiritual reiatsu, an armor of flames, burning at about 650 celsius, begins to cover her body as she is in combat. Her speed, strength, defense, as well a fire resistance are all up to high quality, making her a very powerful opponent. In addition to the fire armor wrapped around her, she can quickly launch flames from her person with a whisk of her double horned trident. In addition, the atmosphere does become parched, due to the flames' heat. The fairest weakness to this ability is dissipation of enough amounts of water. (Lasts for 8 posts; takes 11 posts to cool down)
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Posted: Thu Nov 06, 2014 7:02 pm
xxREAPER TALENTS
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"We work for the greater good."
Kido Background Knowledge | She isn't seen using kido as much, though she has well enough knowledge of spells she would mostly use it for defense.
Kido Expertise | Kidō Master Practitioner
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Kido Known
Bakudō Known |
Spell Name: Sai (塞, Restrain)
Number: 01
Incantation: Unknown
Description: The practitioner, pointing his/her index and middle fingers at the intended target(s), causes the target's arms to lock behind their back. The spell is usable on a single target or a significantly large group of people.
Spell Name: Hainawa (這縄, Crawling Rope)
Number: 04
Incantation: Unknown
Description: Binds enemies with a Reishi rope to stop their movement. The practitioner generates a crackling yellow energy rope within his/her hand(s) and throws it toward the opponent. The energy entangles itself around the opponent's arms and body, immobilizing them.
Spell Name: Seki (斥, Repulse)
Number: 08
Incantation: Unknown
Description: The practitioner generates an orb of light blue energy, which not only blocks attacks, but repels whatever strikes it.
Spell Name: Geki (撃, Strike)
Number: 09
Incantation: "Disintegrate, you black dog of Rondanini!! Look upon yourself with horror and then claw out your own throat!"
Description: The practitioner, drawing the symbols of the spell in the air, causes his/her entire body to permeate a red energy. The same red energy, engulfing the body of the target, causes complete paralysis.
Spell Name: Hōrin (崩輪, Disintegrating Circle)
Number: 09
Incantation: "Disintegrate, you black dog of Rondanini!! Look upon yourself with horror and tear out your own throat!"
Description: The practitioner, using the index and middle fingers, generates an orange hued tendril with spiraling yellow patterns which, ensnaring the opponent as the tendril wraps around their body, immobilizes them. The end of it remains in the hands of the user, allowing them to control the path of the tendril before and after capture. The Kidō can connect with another one of itself, if both have captured a target, and bind them together.
Spell Name: Amekaze (雨風, Driving Rain)
Number: 14
Incantation: Unknown
Description: Creates a large rain cloud that the caster can move over a target, then disperse it to release a torrent of rain over a limited area for several minutes (3 posts). This makes seeing difficult, and is often useful for water and electric types while hindering fire and earth types.
Hadō Known |
Spell Name: Shō (衝, Thrust)
Number: 01
Incantation: Unknown
Description: The practitioner points at his/her target with his/her index finger, a small amount of energy is dispelled from the tip of the index fighter with enough force to thrust a considerable amount of kinetic force at a target causing the target to be pushed back a few feet from the caster.
Spell Name: Byakurai (白雷, Pale Lightning)
Number: 04
Incantation: Unknown
Description: The practitioner gathers high-density spiritual energy, which they discharge from both hands.Alternatively, the practitioner, pointing at the intended target with their index finger, can generate a concentrated bolt of lighting to use against the target.
Spell Name: Tsuzuri Raiden (綴雷電, Bound Lightning)
Number: 11
Incantation: Unknown
Description: The practitioner generates an electric current through any object they touch, which damages anything or anyone which is in contact with the object the current runs through.
Spell Name: Fushibi (伏火, Ambush Flare)
Number: 12
Incantation: Unknown
Description: The practitioner channels volatile reiryoku through an object that they touch, causing to to ignite along its surface and create a large explosion just after.
Spell Name: Gō Ken (鋼拳, Hard Fist)
Number: 15
Incantation: Unknown
Description: A relatively simple Hadō that covers the caster's fist in Reiryoku, allowing for added force behind a punch. Relatively speaking, it can allow a Shinigami with human-level strength to dent iron and makes their fist feel like an iron mass. Like other Hadō, it does not last long, only hardening the fist to give enough time to punch.
Spell Name: Gurenbachi (紅蓮蜂, Crimson Bees)
Number: 23
Incantation: "Gather, spirits of flame. Ride the westward wind, show them your fury."
Description: The user flings their hand, summoning forth a surge of fire that splits into a dozen wasp-like projectiles that detonate, causing explosions large enough to engulf a person.
Kaidō Known | N/A
Forbidden Spells Known | N/A
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Shinigami Abilities
Speicalization | Close-combat to mid-range fighting; taijutsu.
Qualification | Hakuda: elite taijutsu practitioner. Zanjutsu: elite swordsmanship.
Hohō | Shunpo Master Practioner; Mai is currently expanding her agility skills.
Durability | Mai's strong will keeps her on the battlefield for a very long period of time, though she can crumble at times, and keeps herself hidden while regaining her energy to fight another round.
Reiryoku | High Spiritual Energy
Hakuda Known |
-Combo Kick (コンボキック, Konbokikku)
The practitioner aims a kick at her opponent. They then follow this up with multiple immediate kicks to multiple targets.
Sandbag Beat (サンドバッグ・ビート, Sandobaggu Bīto)
The practitioner performs multiple extremely fast strikes, causing aggravated damage to a target.
-Takigoi (滝鯉, Waterfall Carp)
The practitioner utilizes this technique to create an opening in their opponents defense. When the target kicks out, the user blocks the attack with their forearm. When the foe moves to kick them with their other foot, the practitioner grabs the blocked foot with their free hand while simultaneously blocking the second attack with their legs. The user subsequently traps the opponents second foot between their legs. With both legs trapped, the target is now open to attack and the user takes advantage of the situation to attack with their free hand, dealing much more damage than the norm. It can be used to land a devastating Kido spell as well.
-Oni Dekopin (鬼デコピン, Oni Headpoke)
Pulling a finger back against their thumb, the practitioner flicks it at an opponent. The blow carries enough physical force to send the opponent flying a considerable distance away and crashing through multiple physical constructs with the sheet air that was displaced.Zanjutsu Known | -Hōzuri (頬摺, Cheek Stroke) Blade
A simple but precise slash technique which lightly grazes the target, causing superficial wounds.
-Shitonegaeshi (褥返し, Cushion Return) Narrow, blunt weapon
Aims to subdue an opponent and immobilize them on the ground using coercion alone. The practitioner first gives the target a light jab with a blunt weapon, aiming to hit nerve clusters to stun them and push them down. He or she then suspends the tip of his or her weapon millimeters from his opponent's face once they have been struck down.
-Suikawari (西瓜割, Watermelon Splitting) Blade
A two-handed, overhead slash which cleanly and precisely cleaves an opponent's head in twain. Instantly deals an additional damage of [3] HP to NPC.
-Agitowari (顎割, Chin/Jaw Splitting) Blade
The practitioner bisects an opponent from the jaw down the length of the body with a single sword strike.Hohō Known |-Shunpo (瞬歩, Flash Steps)
A high-speed movement technique that allows the user to move faster than the eye can follow. As speed is the main point of the technique the method is best characterized by how fast one can get from point A to point B in the least amount of steps. The user blurs out of sight of a brief moment then reappears wherever it is that they wanted to move. It should be noted that the user of this technique CANNOT pass through matter or high concentrations of spiritual energy.
-Idou Senkou - Shunpo required
This technique is actually quite simple for those who have conditioned their body for high-speed combat movements and have a decent level of control over their reiryoku. Idou Senkou is a technique that can be used by channeling your reiryoku through a specific part of the body to increase the muscular reaction impulses so that the user may move that part of the body at speeds that rival Shunpo (Flash Step). This technique can be very tiring to the user because constantly increasing your muscle reactions strains those muscles. Even for those who are used to high speed movement find that this technique should only be used if they are having issues landing a hit on their opponent(s)
-Air Skate - Shunpo required
Essentially, this technique is a combination of Air Walk and Shunpo. The user applies air walk to hover over a surface then performs Shunpo. This technique is advanced in comparison to a normal shunpo because unlike shunpo it does not require any steps; therefore, there is no friction in the movement. So Air Skate is actually faster than Shunpo
-Senka (閃花, Flash Blossom) - Shunpo Required
While performing a high-speed movement similar to Shunpo, the user slashes at their target. Essentially the attack happens with the unseen movement so it almost always guarantees a hit unless the opponent can avoid the attack by using another appropriate Hoho technique in response.
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Posted: Fri Nov 07, 2014 1:08 pm
Ready to be reviewed! Revisions and suggestions are welcomed.
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Posted: Fri Nov 07, 2014 2:01 pm
Age
-We are not longer accepting old characters. At most, your character could be a little younger than 500 and have spent the first few decades of their life completely isolated from Seireitei and the Gotei 13.
Biography
-Are the sections not in chronological order? The time frame went from 320 years ago to 423 years?
-The wording makes it appear as though the bouquet of flower was your character's sealed zanpakuto. It would sort of go against the concept of Asauchi blades given to Shinigami to become zanpakutos >< Please find a way to connect that.
Shikai
-Blade Changes: Fire creation and manipulation would be considered an extra ability for a total of 4 abilities. I'm fine with that since it's sort of like the foundations of your zanpakuto, but could you remove it from the Blade Changes section and include it in your 2nd ability? Also. I may be a good idea to mention that she gets some increase in fire resistance? (especially considering what her 3rd bankai ability is...)
-Ability One: 5-7 hits is a hard reference point because a small Kido spell from and unseated Shinigami and a Gran Rey Cero are 2 hits, but of different power levels. Are the hits Shikai-level attacks? Shikai from captain-level Shinigami?
-Ability Three: How many tags does she have? And how does she generate/regenerate them? Are the 5 cooldown posts the time needed for another tag to form?
-Duration: If you have Bankai, you have mastered Shikai already so you can bump this up to unlimited
Bankai
-Appearance: Is the trident the same length as in Shikai? The pic makes it look a bit shorter so I just want to confirm that.
-Ability One: Healing near-fatal wounds with such a low cooldown is a bit too much. (Your character isn't part of division 4 so that makes it even weirder). I would say that the cooldown needs to be bumped to 10+ posts or the healing efficiency would need to be reduced to only minor wounds. Also, does your character actually need to cry over the wounds and have the tears remain on the wound during all 3 posts for it to take effect?
-Ability Two: Does she summon angelic figures? Or are the angelic figures what can be executed along with evil beings? I will need a definition or some sort of guideline indicating what could be considered an 'evil being'. What exactly is being "shot" at enemies?
-Ability Three: The only problem I have with this is the temperature. That's around the temperature of the sun (I'm assuming that you are using Fahrenheit?). Lower it to around 650 Celsius.
-Ability Four: Limit of 3 ability for Bankai and Shikai so you will have plenty of time to think of a 4th.
-Duration: We don't really limit Bankai durations in this guild so this isn't a section I would usually poke, but your character can stay in Bankai longer than in Shikai which is sort of odd.
Zanjutsu/Hoho/Hakuda
I would suggest you take a look at what techniques this guild has and add a few in here because this section implies that your character doesn't know how to use Airwalk.
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Posted: Fri Nov 07, 2014 2:05 pm
Haven't checked the whole thing yet but for the first section
500 is the age cut off now
And check the 3rd division captain on who is the seireitei flirt lol
But seriously looking good I'll checkthe rest soon
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Posted: Fri Nov 07, 2014 3:51 pm
Feiyimei Age-We are not longer accepting old characters. At most, your character could be a little younger than 500 and have spent the first few decades of their life completely isolated from Seireitei and the Gotei 13. Biography-Are the sections not in chronological order? The time frame went from 320 years ago to 423 years? -The wording makes it appear as though the bouquet of flower was your character's sealed zanpakuto. It would sort of go against the concept of Asauchi blades given to Shinigami to become zanpakutos >< Please find a way to connect that. Shikai-Blade Changes: Fire creation and manipulation would be considered an extra ability for a total of 4 abilities. I'm fine with that since it's sort of like the foundations of your zanpakuto, but could you remove it from the Blade Changes section and include it in your 2nd ability? Also. I may be a good idea to mention that she gets some increase in fire resistance? (especially considering what her 3rd bankai ability is...) -Ability One: 5-7 hits is a hard reference point because a small Kido spell from and unseated Shinigami and a Gran Rey Cero are 2 hits, but of different power levels. Are the hits Shikai-level attacks? Shikai from captain-level Shinigami? -Ability Three: How many tags does she have? And how does she generate/regenerate them? Are the 5 cooldown posts the time needed for another tag to form? -Duration: If you have Bankai, you have mastered Shikai already so you can bump this up to unlimited Bankai-Appearance: Is the trident the same length as in Shikai? The pic makes it look a bit shorter so I just want to confirm that. -Ability One: Healing near-fatal wounds with such a low cooldown is a bit too much. (Your character isn't part of division 4 so that makes it even weirder). I would say that the cooldown needs to be bumped to 10+ posts or the healing efficiency would need to be reduced to only minor wounds. Also, does your character actually need to cry over the wounds and have the tears remain on the wound during all 3 posts for it to take effect? -Ability Two: Does she summon angelic figures? Or are the angelic figures what can be executed along with evil beings? I will need a definition or some sort of guideline indicating what could be considered an 'evil being'. What exactly is being "shot" at enemies? -Ability Three: The only problem I have with this is the temperature. That's around the temperature of the sun (I'm assuming that you are using Fahrenheit?). Lower it to around 650 Celsius. -Ability Four: Limit of 3 ability for Bankai and Shikai so you will have plenty of time to think of a 4th. -Duration: We don't really limit Bankai durations in this guild so this isn't a section I would usually poke, but your character can stay in Bankai longer than in Shikai which is sort of odd. Zanjutsu/Hoho/HakudaI would suggest you take a look at what techniques this guild has and add a few in here because this section implies that your character doesn't know how to use Airwalk. I have made changes to which you have asked me!
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Posted: Fri Nov 07, 2014 4:51 pm
Age
-We are not longer accepting old characters. At most, your character could be a little younger than 500 and have spent the first few decades of their life completely isolated from Seireitei and the Gotei 13. DoneBiography-Are the sections not in chronological order? The time frame went from 320 years ago to 423 years? Done-The wording makes it appear as though the bouquet of flower was your character's sealed zanpakuto. It would sort of go against the concept of Asauchi blades given to Shinigami to become zanpakutos >< Please find a way to connect that. You may want to add that the Kimura were somehow linked to Asauchi making then because that knowledge would usually stay in the Gotei 13 so it would be a bit odd if a random family knew how to make a blank sword that could turn into a zanpakuto. Shikai-Blade Changes: Fire creation and manipulation would be considered an extra ability for a total of 4 abilities. I'm fine with that since it's sort of like the foundations of your zanpakuto, but could you remove it from the Blade Changes section and include it in your 2nd ability? Removed the manipulation part. Also. It may be a good idea to mention that she gets some increase in fire resistance? (especially considering what her 3rd bankai ability is...) [If you do not want to add this in any of your abilities, it's fine, but your character would sort of be killing herself by activating the 3rd Bankai ability...]-Ability One: 5-7 hits is a hard reference point because a small Kido spell from and unseated Shinigami and a Gran Rey Cero are 2 hits, but of different power levels. Are the hits Shikai-level attacks? Shikai from captain-level Shinigami? [What I needed here was a point of reference for those 5-7 hits because a hit from a Sho isn't the same as a hit from a Gray Rey Cero. Please describe what the power level is for the people dealing those hits]-Ability Three: How many tags does she have? And how does she generate/regenerate them? Are the 5 cooldown posts the time needed for another tag to form? Done-Duration: If you have Bankai, you have mastered Shikai already so you can bump this up to unlimited DoneBankai-Appearance: Is the trident the same length as in Shikai? The pic makes it look a bit shorter so I just want to confirm that. Done-Ability One: Healing near-fatal wounds with such a low cooldown is a bit too much. (Your character isn't part of division 4 so that makes it even weirder). I would say that the cooldown needs to be bumped to 10+ posts or the healing efficiency would need to be reduced to only minor wounds. Chose a longer cooldown. Also, does your character actually need to cry over the wounds and have the tears remain on the wound during all 3 posts for it to take effect? Done-Ability Two: Does she summon angelic figures? Or are the angelic figures what can be executed along with evil beings? I will need a definition or some sort of guideline indicating what could be considered an 'evil being'. What exactly is being "shot" at enemies? [Okaaaay, so, it's not really a 'summoning' ceremony, but a ceremony that would change the properties of her flames? How would the flames immobilize the enemies? Because a 'fireproof' opponent can just pass through the flames. Also, you still haven't defined what "evil beings" are. "Evil" can be the subject of a whole philosophy class so I would suggest you tread carefully on that subject. -Ability Three: The only problem I have with this is the temperature. That's around the temperature of the sun (I'm assuming that you are using Fahrenheit?). Lower it to around 650 Celsius. -Ability Four: Limit of 3 ability for Bankai and Shikai so you will have plenty of time to think of a 4th.
-Duration: We don't really limit Bankai durations in this guild so this isn't a section I would usually poke, but your character can stay in Bankai longer than in Shikai which is sort of odd.
Section removed.Zanjutsu/Hoho/HakudaI would suggest you take a look at what techniques this guild has and add a few in here because this section implies that your character doesn't know how to use Airwalk. In this guild, Hakuda is the term used for Shinigami hand-to-hand combat so there's no "General Hakuda" (or "General Zanjutsu" and "General Hoho"). Though the lists are really really reaaaaaaaaally short right now, we do plan on expanding bit by bit so listing "all" in one discipline (let alone 2) is simply a no go. You will need to list the techniques your character knows because listing "all" would also imply that your character automatically knows any new techniques added to the list. Pick one discipline that she excels in and you can have the majority of the techniques there. She would need to be only fairly good at the rest, implying that she can't hall all the techniques but some of them. ] And I forgot to mention that you are missing 2 important sections for your character growth:
qualification
specialization
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Posted: Mon Nov 10, 2014 3:58 pm
Very good. I have altered what was asked of! (:
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Posted: Mon Nov 10, 2014 7:23 pm
Shikai Ability one: The main problem I have with what you've edited in is that a Gran Rey Cero is a loooooooot stronger than a Sho, yet you make it look perhaps twice as strong only. Sho is the weakest Kido spell while Gran Rey Cero is an Espada-level blast of energy >< Maybe bump it to 1 Gran Rey Cero and 3-4 Shakkaho (Level 33ish Kido spell) spells? Specialization and QualificationYou need these 2 sections. Read [ This] for more information
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Posted: Wed Nov 12, 2014 4:37 pm
Approved
The subforum is yours.
Also, PM me or jight if you have a role in mind for Division 8 and we'll add it to your subforum name.
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