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 Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2014 8:39 am
x-Aaron McLain-x I edited his power-ups to just reiatsu only. If I get Noire to train a few zanjutsu techniques and improve his proficiency, I might even make some custom skills to accommodate for his scythe and sickles. Alright, that's my concerns answered.
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2014 9:19 am
I may just use Noire's books to troll the human world. hur hur hur.
In addition to what Ubi pointed out:
History:
I was wonder if you could add a little explanation behind your character's name. It doesn't sounds too oriental, yet both of his parents are Japanese in an era where Japan did not have much contact (if any) with the west. The same goes for his son's name, Octavian. Kubo never really mentioned if there was a Soul Society for the west so we can always assume that all souls are directed to the Rukon we know so maybe there was a mix of culture?
Your character also bought a toy train for his child on the day his family died, the trains that we know of didn't appear until mid 16th century in the form of tramways. A pellet drum may be more fitting since it's a really old toy that is known across Asia.
The knowledge of the Senkaimon was actually given to the Shinigami by the Royal Guards after they realized that the Soul King sort of just ditched his duty of overlooking the passing of souls into Soul Society. The Shinigamis were the alternative the Royal Guards came up with since they had the numbers necessary to cover much ground even if they lacked strength in comparison to them and the Soul King.
I find that his bio doesn't really show an escalation of Noire's...cray cray. :T It talks about how he trained to master his Vizard powers, but there were little information about his psychological evolution.
Shikai
Black Well: Is the depth of the well the depth of the hole Noire's created? Or does the liquid have the ability to be much deeper to Noire and the spheres so that Noire can literally take a dip in it and be completely submerged while anyone else would be met with the resistance of the ground below the liquid?
Bankai
Darkness Inquisition: Like Ubi mentioned, does it act like a Danku and provide a physical wall to block attacks while draining Reiatsu? Would Reiryoku-based attacks be able to pierce through it or will they be completely absorbed
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2014 9:55 am
Well, that's something I neglected to mention. His family was very fond of this man who joined their clan named Noire. While he was a Western outsider, he was welcome into the family and so they named Noire a Western name.
>.> You really are nitpicking about a toy train? Really? But, yeah, historical sense, I'll change it.
Where is this stated? I tried finding information on this Senkaimon in the guild, but I didn't see it. If it's not in the guild, my RPC's interpretation of its purpose is valid, don't you think? This bio is what he thinks, perhaps not exactly what it is, but nonetheless, it's his story told his way.
Let's see... Entire clan wiped out by raiders. Mom dies from not wanting to be a burden. Dad commits suicide. Wife and child are brutally murdered by hollows since Shinigami can't do their job. Hates hollows. Becomes hollow due to Soul Society's warmongering. I suppose I can elaborate in the time frame from when he leaves Soul Society, to where he watches them. I stated he notices the hypocrisy in the way Soul Society acts as though it can determine where souls go. I was honestly, hoping to get away with just revealing why he hates Soul Society so much through the RP...
Edit: Forgot to explain the well. The well is only enter-able by Noire and the spheres. It's like jumping into the ground if other people try it.
It's like danku. It blocks everything. The point is that its a shield fed by the victim's reiryoku that negates outside reiryoku.
Edit: Added a few paragraphs to the BIO towards the bottom to explain Noire's motivation and "evolution" of "cray cray".
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2014 11:11 am
x-Aaron McLain-x Well, that's something I neglected to mention. His family was very fond of this man who joined their clan named Noire. While he was a Western outsider, he was welcome into the family and so they named Noire a Western name.
>.> You really are nitpicking about a toy train? Really? But, yeah, historical sense, I'll change it.
Where is this stated? I tried finding information on this Senkaimon in the guild, but I didn't see it. If it's not in the guild, my RPC's interpretation of its purpose is valid, don't you think? This bio is what he thinks, perhaps not exactly what it is, but nonetheless, it's his story told his way.
Let's see... Entire clan wiped out by raiders. Mom dies from not wanting to be a burden. Dad commits suicide. Wife and child are brutally murdered by hollows since Shinigami can't do their job. Hates hollows. Becomes hollow due to Soul Society's warmongering. I suppose I can elaborate in the time frame from when he leaves Soul Society, to where he watches them. I stated he notices the hypocrisy in the way Soul Society acts as though it can determine where souls go. I was honestly, hoping to get away with just revealing why he hates Soul Society so much through the RP...
Edit: Forgot to explain the well. The well is only enter-able by Noire and the spheres. It's like jumping into the ground if other people try it.
It's like danku. It blocks everything. The point is that its a shield fed by the victim's reiryoku that negates outside reiryoku.
Edit: Added a few paragraphs to the BIO towards the bottom to explain Noire's motivation and "evolution" of "cray cray". You asked for me -insert evil cackle- I'm a sucker for immersion ninja The Senkaimon was mentioned in the faction but only briefly. The timeline reflect the main events in really short summary but some of them are retold in the texts. I should probably rework that thread =w=; cuz I only mentioned some stuff in either the timeline or in the text. I can also edit it to sort of better fit your character's bio. Quote: Though peace had settled upon Soul Society, the same could not be said of the Soul King's realm. The Royal Guards would notice upon their return that their King had started losing interest in its task of maintaining the balance between worlds. Slowly, it would distance itself from the happenings of both the Human Realm and Soul Society and, though the Royal Guards did their best to carry on their King's duties, they were no transcendent beings. The delicate equilibrium of Souls would soon be shattered, Soul Society threatening to spill into the Human Realm. The Royal Guards had no choice, but to appear before the Gotei once more. These warriors they had united, it was perhaps time to give them a bigger purpose. This time, the Royal Guards came with the gift of knowledge, the knowledge needed to travel between worlds, the knowledge to open Senkaimons that connected the Human Realm with Soul Society. In exchange, the Gotei 13 would take up their King's duty, they would travel between worlds so as to reap manage the passing of Souls. Crossing to the Human Realm was not a process without risks as the Dangai, the precipice between worlds, was full of dangers. Only the highest ranking officers had the speed and strength to travel back and forth between worlds, but they were numerous enough to restore the balance of both worlds. This new task assigned to them earned them the title of Shinigamis, Reapers of Souls. If your'e gonna elaborate on his hatred towards SS through RP, then it's fine. I just want to avoid another case of people pulling things out of their arse without proper explanation. I'm paranoid that way. I'm fine with this profile now =w=
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2014 11:20 am
So, with that said, profile is cool/accepted?
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2014 11:23 am
x-Aaron McLain-x So, with that said, profile is cool/accepted? I say yes.
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2014 11:24 am
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2014 11:27 am
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2014 11:39 am
Is it bad that I imagined you drumming your fingers together and cackling madly after saying that?
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Posted: Mon Jul 28, 2014 11:45 am
Ubiquitouch Is it bad that I imagined you drumming your fingers together and cackling madly after saying that?
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