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 Posted: Sun Feb 09, 2014 6:57 pm
The only question I would have is what you mean by staggered when it comes to it in the shikai and bankai abilities.
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Posted: Sun Feb 09, 2014 10:00 pm
Not stunned completely but a bit off. I'm mostly leaving it up to interpretation in battle, but somewhere between being startled and being somewhat close to a small explosion (wobbly legs, that sort of thing).
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Posted: Sun Feb 09, 2014 10:05 pm
Rain Water Resonance Not stunned completely but a bit off. I'm mostly leaving it up to interpretation in battle, but somewhere between being startled and being somewhat close to a small explosion (wobbly legs, that sort of thing). Okay, well, I just don't wanna see people argue over it which is why I was curious what your version of it was. Then I'm good. Approved!
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Posted: Sat Feb 15, 2014 8:12 pm
 ✣✚╚═════════════════════════════════════════╝ ✚✣ Gaia Username: Darsenz Ryuuga ╔═════════════════════════════════════════╗ ✣ ══════════════════════[ Personal Information ]═══════════════════════ ✣
Name: Darsenz Ryuuga
Race: Shinigami
Gender: Male
Birth Date: January 31st
Age: 125
Blood Type: A+
✣ ══════════════════════[ Appearance ]═══════════════════════ ✣ 
Appearance:
Height: 6'5"
Weight: 195
Eye Color: Goldenrod
Hair Color: Black
Tattoos or Scars: A scar running from the bottom of his right eye down to the end of his cheek.
Anything Unusual: He has a curved golden star on his forehead. He wears a golden band on his left wrist.
✣ ══════════════════════[ Spiritual Connections ]═══════════════════════ ✣
Kido: Up to Hado #63, he can only use up to Bakudo #8
Shunpo Level: He is a Shunpo Practitioner, not terribly talented, but efficient in battle
Hakuda: He has a great deal of talent and ability in Hakuda, and Zanjutsu. He prides himself in his ability with the blade, and his bare fists, if he needs to use them.
Zanpakuto Name: Neru-Ryuu(Sleeping Dragon)
Zanpakuto Appearance: Zanpakutou Blade
✣ ══════════════════════[ Shikai {Optional} ]═══════════════════════ ✣
Shikai Incantation: Rise from your slumber, Neru-Ryuu
Shikai Appearance: A rotating golden crown of energy appears. His sandals disappear and a silouhete of energy shaped like claws appear on his feet. His Black Blade remains, and a glowing golden energy rod appears in his left hand. A golden tail of energy appears at his back-side.
Shikai Abilities:
1.) Roar: He exhales in a loud shout that echoes through the area that causes damage trough the ears and disorients those with low spiritual power in a 10 foot radius.
2.) Gold Spear: He can hurl his golden sword like a spear, and create a new one, to fight with.
3.) Dark Muscle Technique: He can raise his strength to about 1.5 his normal ability, and release his pain limiters for a short time, in order to fight a stronger opponent on more even ground, but he feels the pain of forcibly increasing his strength from Reiatsu. This technique is very strenuous and can kill him if he is not careful.
✣ ══════════════════════[ Bankai {Optional} ]═══════════════════════ ✣
Bankai Name: Kin-Ryuu-Kishin(Gold Dragon Fierce God)
Bankai Appearance: The swords fuse into his body, and he changes form. His eyes become dragonic The energy crown grows into horns, his feet become solid claws, and his hands become Dragon Claws. The tail of energy solidifies. His ears elongate into points, and the skin around his newly formed claws and ears become dark-grey, almost black, with streams of gold flowing throughout it. Wings grow out of his back, and he can move better with them. His energy increases exponentially.
Bankai Abilities:
1.) Improved Roar: His roar gains power and intensity, as well as causing those with weak wills to lose control of their limbs in a 20 foot radius.
2.) Dragon Speed: A technique similar to Shumpo. By flapping his wings he can gain temporary bursts of speed.
3.) Black Dragon technique: an improved version of Black Muscle Technique that doubles his strength but causes him more harm over time, and after using this he needs some time to recuperate. this version makes him endure more pain, but gives him a bigger strength boost.
4.) Golden Dragon Blast: A beam of golden light that shoots out of the star mark on his forehead.
5.) Golden Dragon Crush: He forms a small sphere of golden energy that he releases causing a huge explosion.
✣ ══════════════════════[ Background Information ]═══════════════════════ ✣
Personality: He is kind, but brutish at times. He likes getting drunk and challenging people to drinking games, hoping to win, and enjoy himself. He is very easily amused by things that are only slightly funny, and is often confused by some of the more complicated topics. He often asks impertinent questions when they pop into his head. He doesn't like insults and will react rather violently when he is dis-respected. He hates losing more than anything and will sulk for awhile when he looses to someone new, or when he looses repeatedly to the same person.
Personal Likes: He likes having fun, and goofing off. He enjoys brawling, and sparring. He loves food, and playing games like Shougi or Go, when he has the time.
Personal Dislikes: He does not like people who boast strength, but cannot back it up. He believes in proving you are fit for the job, and does not like people who think they can do something when they cannot. He hats losing, and is a very sore loser.
History:
Darsenz was originally a human from the Scottish highlands. He was born to an English mother, and a Scottish father, but took after his mother more. He was a competent soccer player, and enjoyed spending his high school days studying board games, and participating in the Soccer team. His death was, in fact seen as somewhat of a tragedy, since he was a model student, the vice-captain of his team, and a perspective for a transfer to a prestigious American University. It happened fast, and brutally, he was walking home from Soccer practice when he was run over by a semi that had gotten out of control.
H awoke in the soul society, bewildered and sore. He wandered around for a few day, not knowing where to go, or what to do. He began feeling hungry by the sixth day, but it was only a slight empty feeling in his stomach. He awoke in the morning feeling hungry and tired when he was abducted by a small rogue scientist group. His spiritual ability was experimented on and enhanced for the purpose of becoming the wielder of a new type of Zanpakutou. The group had made several spirits to house inside spirits with little spiritual energy. The Zanpakutous were made to appear as animals or mythic creatures, and to fuse with the wielder in the Bankai phase, to make the Shinigami almost like a beast. Darsenz was part of the third batch of experiments that was being being tested, and he was given the Dragon as his test material.
He led a pretty day by day life, waking up in the morning, being given some tests given meals and then returned to the dank cell that they called his quarters, until the time when he learned that they were going to be tossed to the side, once the testing trials were complete. He decided that the best course of action would be to escape for now. At this point he was able to access his Shikai, and he had been honing his skill. He learned that they were going to extract his Zanpakutou spirit within the next few days. He escaped that night, dispatching two of the top scientists on his way out.
The scientists were eventually going to kill the test subjects once they had worked out all the bugs in the spirits. They had extracted the basic soul of the Zanpakutous from the wandering spirits of animals, in order to create a more beastly Zanpakutou.
After Darsenz escaped his captivity he came to the one place he had heard of that offered shelter and teaching for those with the soul-cutting-swords, the Shinigami academy. He attended the academy for several years, learning the ins and outs of the Gotei system. He was accepted into an accelerated program, because he already could access his Shikai, and two of its abilities. He graduated with high marks in physical combat, Shunpo, and Zanjutsu, with decent marks in Hado.
He has been honing his skills ever since in the hopes of one day finding out the whole truth of the group that kidnapped him. He started working in the seventh squad working his way up the ranks to fifth seat, until he was transferred to the Thirteenth squad for his tour of duty in the human world. He went through the experience with very little incident, and was not noticed much by his peers, or by the other members of the Gotei. He keeps his Zanpakutou a secret from most, not knowing how many people are aware of the research going on in secret. After he was made 3rd seat he requested to be transferred to squad 10. He worked as the third seat for some five years, taking missions and completing his paper-work. He often helped with the squad members training, while he honed his own abilities in combat and through his own training. He was later promoted to Lieutenant for his dedication and excellent service. He has been working his hardest to find more out about the research project, but has not made much progress.
Family Line: His mother was english, and his father was scottish. His family line wasn't very prominent, but they were decended from a scottish clan leader, and an english noble.
Friends/Acquaintances: he does not have many friends
Rivals/Enemies: He sees Siras as a possible battle rival, like Kenpachi was to Byakuya.
Love Interest: He has no love interests that he knows of.
Affiliation: Gotei 14
Squad: 10
Rank: Lieutenant
~✣✚✣~
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Posted: Sat Feb 15, 2014 11:09 pm
I'm not a mod, but my character, Callahan, is currently the tenth division captain... sorry. If you want you could be my Lieutenant. We can PM to work out some details ^.^
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Posted: Sun Feb 16, 2014 2:48 am
Rain Water Resonance I'm not a mod, but my character, Callahan, is currently the tenth division captain... sorry. If you want you could be my Lieutenant. We can PM to work out some details ^.^ Sure, that would be fine, I just thought that it was vacant because it is not up on the board. I would welcome being your Lieutenant, Since I enjoy playing in Squad 10 the most. ^_^
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Posted: Sun Feb 16, 2014 10:07 am
Haha, I understand ^^ I was approved about a week ago, so I guess they just haven't gotten around to updating it. Always happy to have people in my squad, though =3
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Posted: Wed Feb 19, 2014 4:55 pm
Darsenz Ryuuga ✣✚╚═════════════════════════════════════════╝ ✚✣ Gaia Username: Darsenz Ryuuga ╔═════════════════════════════════════════╗ ✣ ══════════════════════[ Personal Information ]═══════════════════════ ✣
Name: Darsenz Ryuuga
Race: Shinigami
Gender: Male
Birth Date: January 31st
Age: 125
Blood Type: A+
Several problems here.
1: Please erase all the
Extra parentheses.
2: In regards to the
Shikai. The ability
"Roar" shouldn't
Immediately deafen
Or disorient anyone. Maybe
It would when they're within
A certain range, but not from
Any distance possible. K? And
The same goes for his Bankai
Ability of the same name. Because
Regardless of a ahinigami's power
level, weak or small, moves should
never automatically land hits like
That.
3: The whole "muscle strength"
Concept is pretty far fetched. If
He were to do so, I'd imagine it
Would cause horrible strain on
Himself. Otherwise, it's illogical to
Just boost one's own abilities like
That.
4: Golden Dragon Rage's description
Isn't exactly an actual ability. Anyone
Could easily lose control and lash out.
Either elaborate or remove it.
5: A LOT more elaboration is needed
on the personality. Usually we ask for
a detailed paragraph to cover all aspects
of their personal habits and style.
6: In regards to history. First, we need to
know what he was like when he was still
living. Well over 80% of Soul Society spirits
used to be living people at some point.
Otherwise, they were born into a family
that already resides in the Soul Society.
And when you say he lived a "day-to-day
life," wouldn't he have been isolated or
contained somewhere if he was being
experimented on? Because it sounds
more like he was free to roam around
the soul society as he pleased, which is,
by all means, incredibly stupid to let a
test subject go wherever he wanted.
7: You ended the history with a cliffhanger.
What happened after he made the request
To be transferred to Squad 10??? And since
the Captain position is already taken, we'd
need some elaboration on his time in the
squad up until now.
As such, this profile is rejected until the
necessary changes are made to it.
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Posted: Thu Feb 20, 2014 11:16 am
OriSODEhime
Several problems here.
1: Please erase all the
Extra parentheses.
2: In regards to the
Shikai. The ability
"Roar" shouldn't
Immediately deafen
Or disorient anyone. Maybe
It would when they're within
A certain range, but not from
Any distance possible. K? And
The same goes for his Bankai
Ability of the same name. Because
Regardless of a ahinigami's power
level, weak or small, moves should
never automatically land hits like
That.
3: The whole "muscle strength"
Concept is pretty far fetched. If
He were to do so, I'd imagine it
Would cause horrible strain on
Himself. Otherwise, it's illogical to
Just boost one's own abilities like
That.
4: Golden Dragon Rage's description
Isn't exactly an actual ability. Anyone
Could easily lose control and lash out.
Either elaborate or remove it.
5: A LOT more elaboration is needed
on the personality. Usually we ask for
a detailed paragraph to cover all aspects
of their personal habits and style.
6: In regards to history. First, we need to
know what he was like when he was still
living. Well over 80% of Soul Society spirits
used to be living people at some point.
Otherwise, they were born into a family
that already resides in the Soul Society.
And when you say he lived a "day-to-day
life," wouldn't he have been isolated or
contained somewhere if he was being
experimented on? Because it sounds
more like he was free to roam around
the soul society as he pleased, which is,
by all means, incredibly stupid to let a
test subject go wherever he wanted.
7: You ended the history with a cliffhanger.
What happened after he made the request
To be transferred to Squad 10??? And since
the Captain position is already taken, we'd
need some elaboration on his time in the
squad up until now.
As such, this profile is rejected until the
necessary changes are made to it.Okay, I edited and I hope they are to your standards, ^-^
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