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 Posted: Sat Feb 25, 2006 3:10 pm
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Posted: Mon Mar 06, 2006 10:43 am
All in all, the poem was superb. Though at times it lost a little flow but it picked up and it remained on track. I'm sorry for the critisisim but keep up the good work. 4laugh
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Posted: Thu Mar 09, 2006 5:01 am
DeathScythe-Vincent this is a poem i wrote about Aeris death.... i don't think it's good enough any suggestions?
I'm falling and i can not awake as i drift to the bottom of this lake
my life worn thin my memory's fade all thats left is the path I made
the path of hope that shine's so bright is still posesed by the dark of night
the evil shadow that's gone insane upon hearing Jenova's name
he shall now answer meters call to summon forth and destroy us all
but fear not upon my plight he shall feel are holy might
these last words are all i can give to stop the one thats tanted by sin
use them wisly and here my call for upon these words sephiroth shall fall dont think its good?? well your mistaken!! i think its cool. and sweet, i like the ending very much... blaugh
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Posted: Thu Mar 09, 2006 5:43 am
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Posted: Thu Mar 09, 2006 12:25 pm
thats a really good poem ^_^ heart
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Posted: Thu Mar 09, 2006 1:02 pm
amzing.....verry nice...^.^
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Posted: Thu Mar 09, 2006 2:18 pm
It's really good and it made sense too. your a good writer xd
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Posted: Fri Mar 10, 2006 8:39 am
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Posted: Tue Mar 28, 2006 9:54 pm
That is a cool Poem, its very nice I love it its soo awsome
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Posted: Thu Mar 30, 2006 11:42 am
"I think that Aeris she is the best person I had on my team Better then cloud I might say"
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