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STARTING STAGE : Outsider

DESIRED JOB LOCATION: Mistletoe Inn

JOB TYPE: Waitress

As a waitress she will be responsible for taking orders from the customers and bringing it back to the kitchen. During the process of the cooking she will ask the customers if they need anything while they wait for their meal. After the meal is cooked she will bring the customer's order back to their table and will tell them to enjoy their meal and will check in on them every now and then.

With more training and skills she can become a cook and will be able to cook the meals to the customer's liking. As well as learn valuable skills that will help her with her country life. Where she will use it at home and when she has a family of her own.

BRIEF HISTORY: She has moved to Sunny Haven because she would like a change in her lifestyle and escape from the big city. As well as gaining knowledge that she doesn't have. As well as skills and knowledge for life.

PERSONALITY: THE VIRTUES :
Positive:
Social butterfly- She is a very outgoing person, she is a team player and she loves socializing and loves making some new friends. She likes going on adventures to explore new things and discover more about herself. Through socializing with new people in Sunny Haven, it will help her find herself and will help her get to know the citizens of Sunny Haven and provide assistance when they ask her for a favor.

Pursuer- Destiny is a girl who is determined in her new abilities that she discovers and is determined to finish off something that she starts. She is also confident in anything she does in her life time. She shows her confidence when she socializes with new people she has just met, with a smile and friendly wave. When it comes to her determination she will let nothing stop her from achieving her full potential.

She shows this by doing all her schoolwork to get good grades and is determined to be a good friend. She is determined to be a good girlfriend if she ever becomes one.For example if she goes head first to a relationship she knows that she would get hurt and it would effect her in time. This trait can cause her to be stubborn because she is not fully aware of the after effects.Due to the trait she would reject any counter arguments to stop her from going head first.She may be able to recognize consequences that may result in the future from her actions, she is of the mind that it is better to reach for the successes of goals rather than to be consumed by bad outcomes that might unfold and avoid trying all together.


Loyal- She is very loyal to anyone she is friends with and any relationships she is in. She is a very loyal best friend as well as a daughter to her parents. She respects them and tends to listen to them and she values her parents very much and gives them aid when she is asked.

There is one thing that has influenced her to be loyal and that is the rewards that come with it. Her loyalty is different from the typical loyalty because she knows that throughout her life she will be thanked for her loyalty and she believes in "good things will come to those who wait". By believing this she knows that something good will eventually happen to her.

PERSONALITY: THE FLAW :
Negative:
Overthinker- Being a over thinker is a trait that you will notice in her course work. She tends to over think the course material and ends up getting frustrated from it. This flaw reflects greatly on her coursework. It is also reflected in her daily life, when she encounters a problem in her work, she will take it personally, it is used as a defense mechanism and she sill take time to figure out a solution.While from her experiences she's not considered a geek because of this trait, she does think that doing puzzles will keep her brain active after she finishes her school work and according to this she is a logic based person. However, this trait has resulted in her having a troubling reputation during the school year because there may be students who would prefer a simple answer and not a explanation and this could detract from her friendships.

-salutes- yes Ma'am! I shall go fix that now

History

The history looks okay to me except for this one part.

From working in the big city to working in the countryside and running her own farm

The problem with this is that she's planning to work as a waitress in the inn for her job, so why does she want to run her own farm? Those conflict with each other.

Personality

In social butterfly, there's a few things that conflict with each other. Such as with this part: There are times when she would prefer not to be social and would like some time to herself to escape the trial and tribulations of high school. Why would she prefer to not be social whenever that's part of her virtue?

For determined and confident, theres a few suggestions that I have. Whenever you wrote Just like she was when she first started gymnastics at the age of 7. what do you mean by that? Perhaps an example of how it showed her confidence would be good. She shows this by doing all her schoolwork to get good grades and is determined to be a good friend to her friends she has made and probably have determination to be a good girlfriend if she ever becomes one this is a run on sentence. Perhaps make it into two different sentences. Also, with this whole part try to focus on the good things. There's a few times that you go negative in it, such letting down her parents and teachers and how she rejects counter arguments. That shows more flaw than goodness.

For Loyal, there's a lot of the negative in it. Try to focus on just why it's a good thing, not how easily she can lose her friendship with others and such.

Flaws

First off, i'll go over what I saw in overthinker. One of her basic personality traits that you will notice when she is doing her course work. Maybe re-write that part, to add that over-thinker, one of her common traits, reflects greatly in her course work or something like that. For it, you may want to add how it reflects more to every day life, other than battle or assignments.

I noticed you start off each one with "Another basic personality trait....", I would suggest you change it to something else. Maybe write which one it is talking about, other than just another basic personality trait.

For serious, I would suggest adding more detail. Some of the parts seem very short and harsh, like they were cut off before more detail was added.

Fears and Weaknesses

and frantically try to get rid of it herself, if that doesn't work she will go search for someone. that part was a repeat, since you already mentioned those things. What would happen to her if it was on her, if she got bit, or saw one outside? does she always freak out as intensely even around others.

For fears, I don't really understand that fear. She's not wanting to be a farmer, since she's going for a waitress path. Also the grammar there needs a little help, such as She will not succeed as a farmer. If she has someone dear to her, she constantly fears that she will lose them to anything that is negative.

Well, there you go! :3

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Hi!
c': Your improvement on your quest profile is admirable, Angelics.

I'm also seeking improvement in developing my critiquing to be more helpful. I hope this critique of mine reflects some gradual improvement at offering constructiveness in my input-giving. x'3;

I find that in writing about flaws and strengths, this reminder contributes in reducing confusion of possible contradictions: Though small mentions of the flip side of an either negatively-focused or positively-focused trait may be inserted, utilizing words such as: "though," "however," and so on can move the highlight less on the reasonable inclusions to shine more on the purpose of the description in supporting either the negativeness or positiveness intended for the category the trait has been placed in. It may also be considered to minimize use of words and phrases such as "help" and other similar words that imply benefit when writing about a flaw's description. Similarly, it may be considered to minimally use words and phrases that give strong negative impressions when writing a strength's description. After writing a trait's description to include what is desired to share, reorganizing parts can make shifts in effects of information so as to maximize the support of the description for the type of trait it is placed under.

I'd like to address these two traits:

Determined and Confident: Perhaps "Pursuer" or something similar could be a possible alternative title? It may be found contradicting that she is confident and then mentioning that she foresees getting hurt by a decision. So, perhaps you can add a sentence that ties your description together further, like along the lines of that though she may be able to recognize consequences that may result in the future from her actions, she is of the mind that it is better to reach for the successes of goals rather than to be consumed by bad outcomes that might unfold and avoid trying all together.

Overthinker: "This flaw reflects greatly on her coursework." This sentence could be mixed with the earlier, similar sentence that occurs at a point before it or removed since the idea is being repeated. Also I'd like to suggest the points of the aforementioned reminder may be applied to this description: "This trait does help her build a reputation during the school year because there may be students who would prefer a simple answer and not a explanation and this could effect her friendships. She is not concerned a geek because of this trait, but she does think that doing logic puzzles will keep her brain active after she finishes her school work, through this trait you can learn that she is a logic based person." This info can be edited and reorganized to zone into more support of how overthinker can fit as a flaw, such as perhaps: While from her experiences she's not considered a geek because of this trait, she does think that doing puzzles will keep her brain active after she finishes her school work and according to this she is a logic based person. However, this trait has resulted in her having a troubling reputation during the school year because there may be students who would prefer a simple answer and not a explanation and this could detract from her friendships.

Your quest for Destiny is flowing more smoothly~ ^u^

Oh no, Angelics, when I scrolled to your fourth post of Destiny's profile, I saw a bit of the overthinker trait cut out before the edit and also the rest of the fourth post is now missing. D: