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 Posted: Wed Aug 18, 2010 5:28 pm
I admit it! I have serious problems doing this.
It rarely sounds natural. I'm trying to make descriptions not sound shoved in for no reason.
Part of this is that I like sentences with action, so I can't simply describe the way something looks. I'd have to do something like "The sunlight glinted off of the carved wood box." or something.
But I rarely remember to desribe things, so they end sounding liek I wanted to describe something, which isn't my intent. It seems amatuerish to me. How do people write good visuals?
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Posted: Wed Aug 18, 2010 7:55 pm
Well, if the story is in first-person narration, describe things like the character would, not like you would. If your character is a middle school student, don't use a ton of fancy vocabulary. If a story isn't narrated by a character, make sure your writing level is even throughout the writing. You can't write like Hemingway one chapter, and then slip into Beverly Cleary or something. It's all about consistency. Also, don't devote entire sentences to description. Meld it in with actions and plot.
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Posted: Mon Oct 25, 2010 2:57 pm
I have the same problem I even with things that I can see I'm pacticeing with small storys in my note book but I just seem to get worst
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Posted: Mon Oct 25, 2010 3:22 pm
What you'll want to do is to use descriptions to control the pace of your story. When you're trying to convey a laboriously slow event, load down your story with descriptions of things that people wouldn't normally take notice of, but be careful not to overload your reader. Give enough detail to force the person to slow down while reading.
When trying to convey a fast storyline, use concise details. Alusions and loaded words help greatly when trying to achieve this. You can almost even use poetic diction (way of speaking) to keep it as short as possible, but have far more meaning than what is written.
Go ahead and give it a try now. Write at least two paragraphs for a short storyline. One paragraph will be slowly paced, and the other quickly paced. Once you've written them, share them here so we can comment on how your descriptions effected your pieces.
I'll personally keep an eye on this thread for awhile if anyone else would like to try it as well. I'll offer my comments and suggestions as best I can.
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