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 Posted: Mon Mar 22, 2010 9:45 pm
Well, I must admit I was going for as much of a horrible hell situation as I could get, so going over the lines was kind of the point but duly noted. I'll certainly work on realism.
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Posted: Mon Mar 22, 2010 10:31 pm
(I'm Zetsubou Darkness, just to keep from any confusion)
Well, I wanted a short story, and I made one. It seems as though I could have done better yes, I was going for an ordinary object being strange, like when there's something in your room that makes you feel unsettled, but you cant place it until someone mentions it. I guess I should have tacked on something about what transpired after, however I stick by what I wrote. If you don't like it, I don't mind. I don't even want the gold, I was just doing this for fun. (I make a lot more than 10k a day anyway ^^ )
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Posted: Wed Mar 24, 2010 11:35 pm
I'm not saying either is bad, but that both could use work. :3
I like all three, actually; I would probably never have thought of the scenarios. So props.
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Posted: Thu Mar 25, 2010 9:14 pm
I liked the other two as well, I didn't see if Boon put any of the others up but I wouldn't mind getting to see those as well.
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Posted: Thu Apr 01, 2010 3:54 pm
.{ Ah! Congratulations Zetsu! =] neh neh, = w = whats with argue? Authors need help, I agree but, do not expect William Shakespeare! Sure, you need good grammer, but really, it depends on the story. There's always time for editing, whether it be years to do so! }. 
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