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 Posted: Fri Nov 13, 2009 3:24 pm
would u dare to dream a dream that takes u to the sky?
hold your breath and not regret the things that come to mind.
love the one who loves you back theres nothin more to life then that.
In the end the life uyou mend will be the one that you defend.
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Posted: Fri Nov 13, 2009 8:48 pm
Hmmmm....not bad, although (in my opinon) I find the last line to be a tad sketchy. I know the rhyme scheme you're going for but...xD
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Posted: Thu Dec 10, 2009 4:20 pm
that's really good, I love it although I doubt many people in this world care for others. Oh and, I think you should maybe write a little more. That's just my opinion.
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Posted: Fri Apr 02, 2010 11:41 am
I Like it biggrin
It sounds like something in a poetry reciting contest
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