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 Posted: Sat Mar 13, 2010 3:48 pm
Siefren NEW RECRUIT, Brice York, FIRST POST New Recruit: Brice York
S.T.A.R.S.: Boot Camp
Location: Training Course.The ground was wet, damp, and unpleasant as Brice stood in the cool morning air, in his training shorts and shirt. "Darn it...Always has to be cold." Spoke Brice before he stood to attention as the captain directed the crew. There were six others that stood with Brice as the course was just starting, all of which would have to complete it to even become a hopeful for a seat with the S.T.A.R.S. Division of the R.P.D. As always Brice was never a fan of the rope climb, especially when he had to cross over a wall which stood in the way. Blisters still lined his hand when he took on the course just the other day, for the daily training, but this time, there was a deadline. A specific time he'd have to complete the course in order to not be forced to take on application for the department again; this was in fact his second time trying. The damp grass splashed cold dew on Brice's legs, sending chills up his body, he wasn't a fan of cold weather, and not of cold liquids either, he much preferred to take his sodas room temperature. 5 minutes 30 seconds was his time now. He had less than 3 minutes to complete the course in order to succeed this time around. Brice groaned and moaned as he gripped the final obstacles, the rope climb. After this it would just be a mad dash to the finish line. His blisters popped, exposing more of the fluids that laid dormant in the puffed skin, running down his hands and wrists as he continued to grip the rope. "Darn it Darn it Darn it!" You could hear him yell with each hand over hand movement he would take. 2 minutes 25 seconds left before time was out. " Not this Time!" Brice screamed to himself inside his head. Finally, Brice was over the wall, he wasn't gonna take his time to climb down it, He jumped from the tops of it, hitting the ground with a hard thump, as his knees bent in to absorb the shock. "This is it!" He let out of his breath as he rushed to the finish line. 2 minutes was all that was left on the clock, but it no longer mattered to him. Brice had made it to the finish line with time to spare. "Got'cha!" He said as he let out a sigh, laughing softly as he took in his breath, hunched over. There was nothing I could find that needs improvement. Only a suggestion: it's a custom to place your characters dialogue in another color to make it easier for the other cosplayers. Siefren HAS PASSED BOOT CAMP
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Posted: Sun Mar 14, 2010 5:17 pm
((Ah,ok, thanks for the tip. I just did it the way i did because that's how i've been doing it for years lol. I'll have the dialogue in bold in the rps on here from now on then. ^_^))
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Posted: Thu Apr 22, 2010 3:31 pm
NEW RECRUIT, Sofia Minne, FIRST POST!
Recruit Sofia Minnie
S.T.A.R.S Boot Camp
Boot Camp: Entrance
Stepping off the bus she smelled the new gas the bus driver had placed in the tank. Sofia glanced at her surroundings, the moon was fading and the sun was rising. Long red hair was tied in a bun stood from her snow white skin; the clothes she wore were clear hand me downs. Cameo pants, military boots and a army gray shirt. Dog tags were around her neck stating :Minnie/Helio/ Bloodtype:-0/last part was unreadable:.
"Well Sofia lets get ready for some yelling." she turned around to get her backpack with patches all over it. Putting it on she turned around and took a breath walking into the camp.
'One step for man, One giant leap for mankind.'
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Posted: Sat May 29, 2010 5:49 pm
New Recruit Kitoro Nazashi First Post
Recruit: Kitoro Nazashi
S.T.A.R.S Boot Camp
Boot Camp: Bus Drop Zone
Kitoro walked off of the bus with somewhat high hopes. Looking around he saw recruits doing their normal drills and the drill sergeants screaming at them. "Huh... This isn't what I expected" He said. Fixing the beanie he had on his head he wondered what kinds of rigorous training they would put him through. He glanced up at the sky, noting that the sun was close to setting. He looked around, hoping to find a place to sit.
He noticed a lonely grouping of trees near the side of the road and headed towards them. He laid his backpack on the ground and sat down. After going through the usual recruit thoughts of what was going to happen to him, and who his Drill Sergeant was going to be, he rummaged through his backpack. He pulled out a pair of headphones and an mp3 player. He plugged in the headphones, turned on the mp3 player, and lay against the tree, hoping that the challenge ahead of him would end quickly.
(Sorry if it doesn't sound good. I haven't rped in a long time)
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Posted: Sun May 30, 2010 7:33 pm
Ares Grim NEW RECRUIT, Sofia Minne, FIRST POST! Recruit Sofia Minnie
S.T.A.R.S Boot Camp
Boot Camp: Entrance Stepping off the bus she smelled the new gas the bus driver had placed in the tank. Sofia glanced at her surroundings, the moon was fading and the sun was rising. Long red hair was tied in a bun stood from her snow white skin; the clothes she wore were clear hand me downs. Cameo pants, military boots and a army gray shirt. Dog tags were around her neck stating :Minnie/Helio/ Bloodtype:-0/last part was unreadable:. "Well Sofia lets get ready for some yelling." she turned around to get her backpack with patches all over it. Putting it on she turned around and took a breath walking into the camp. 'One step for man, One giant leap for mankind.' I see nothing that truly needs repairing here. Only suggestion is I would have place what the dog tag said in caps lock. Sofia Minne HAS PASSED BOOT CAMP
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Posted: Sun May 30, 2010 7:46 pm
divinityboy1229 New Recruit Kitoro Nazashi First PostRecruit: Kitoro Nazashi S.T.A.R.S Boot Camp Boot Camp: Bus Drop Zone Kitoro walked off of the bus with somewhat high hopes. Looking around he saw recruits doing their normal drills and the drill sergeants screaming at them. "Huh... This isn't what I expected" He said. Fixing the beanie he had on his head he wondered what kinds of rigorous training they would put him through. He glanced up at the sky, noting that the sun was close to setting. He looked around, hoping to find a place to sit. He noticed a lonely grouping of trees near the side of the road and headed towards them. He laid his backpack on the ground and sat down. After going through the usual recruit thoughts of what was going to happen to him, and who his Drill Sergeant was going to be, he rummaged through his backpack. He pulled out a pair of headphones and an mp3 player. He plugged in the headphones, turned on the mp3 player, and lay against the tree, hoping that the challenge ahead of him would end quickly. (Sorry if it doesn't sound good. I haven't rped in a long time) The post itself is up to standards. Just keep in mind that when your character speaks I would expect you to write the dialogue in bold or another color so it can stand out for your fellow RPers. divinityboy1229 HAS PASSED BOOT CAMP
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Posted: Mon May 31, 2010 3:40 pm
NEW RECRUIT THOMAS X. PENNT FIRST POST
Recruit "Thomas X. Pennt"
S.T.A.R.S Boot Camp
Boot Camp "Main Office Building"
Thomas arrived throught the front door of the main office building. He stopped to look around the hall, and soon he spotted an office with the name "Colonel Dean Winchester" on it's door. In entering the room, Thomas introduced himself. I hope that this first impression will turn out well! Thomas thought to himself, and with the short silence between him and the colonel, Thomas continued his introduction,
" Sir, I hope to make a contribution to the STARS. I will work hard and I will do whatever is needed to complete the mission, whatever the cost". Thomas' eyes met the Colonel's and he began to lose his confidence while sputtering in his speech, " W-well....sir....what are the requirements...the requirements for joining! Yeah...erm....what is needed to pass bootcamp? I....I.....um". Thomas was enveloped by a deep and sickening curtain of uncertainty, and the silence had it's own horrifying effects. In trying to stem his self-consciousness, Thomas scanned the room, and to his surprise it was actually pretty comfortable looking; pictures of fellow boot camp trainings, a painting of the S.T.A.R.S emblem, a mini fridge with the capacity of holding bite-sized frozen snacks, and an organized desks, with a pile of administration forms and entrance papers. All of this noted in a split second. Thomas also saw another comforting sight, photos of fellow boot camp graduates with their licenses, which gave Thomas sone hope, one of these days I'll have a respectable liscense of my own.
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Posted: Mon May 31, 2010 9:50 pm
a-TAP-in-time123 NEW RECRUIT THOMAS X. PENNT FIRST POST Recruit "Thomas X. Pennt" S.T.A.R.S Boot Camp Boot Camp "Main Office Building" Thomas arrived throught the front door of the main office building. He stopped to look around the hall, and soon he spotted an office with the name "Colonel Dean Winchester" on it's door. In entering the room, Thomas introduced himself. I hope that this first impression will turn out well! Thomas thought to himself, and with the short silence between him and the colonel, Thomas continued his introduction, " Sir, I hope to make a contribution to the STARS. I will work hard and I will do whatever is needed to complete the mission, whatever the cost". Thomas' eyes met the Colonel's and he began to lose his confidence while sputtering in his speech, " W-well....sir....what are the requirements...the requirements for joining! Yeah...erm....what is needed to pass bootcamp? I....I.....um". Thomas was enveloped by a deep and sickening curtain of uncertainty, and the silence had it's own horrifying effects. In trying to stem his self-consciousness, Thomas scanned the room, and to his surprise it was actually pretty comfortable looking; pictures of fellow boot camp trainings, a painting of the S.T.A.R.S emblem, a mini fridge with the capacity of holding bite-sized frozen snacks, and an organized desks, with a pile of administration forms and entrance papers. All of this noted in a split second. Thomas also saw another comforting sight, photos of fellow boot camp graduates with their licenses, which gave Thomas sone hope, one of these days I'll have a respectable liscense of my own. Grammatically you are doing well, except for 3 mistakes. Try to re-read your post before posting them. And although it is as not as wrong as it could be, try to take in consideration that you should avoid responding for other characters. Perhaps Mistro's character would have liked to talk before the rookie responded, or something like that. Remember that and you'll be fine. a-TAP-in-time123 HAS PASSED BOOT CAMP
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Posted: Mon May 31, 2010 10:22 pm
THANK YOU!!! crying I'd like to thank the academy...and my momma and dadda... And *goes of on long speech detailing hardship throuout the years and other crap* I OWE U ONE DARC KNIGHT!!!
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Posted: Fri Jun 18, 2010 9:22 am
New recruit C. Reed first post
Recruit C. Reed
S.T.A.R.S Boot Camp
Boot Camp 20 miles South of Demilitarized Zone
I havn't seen anything for miles... To think someone put a training camp all the way out here, in the middle of nowhere. Although, considering the world going to hell in a handbasket the past few years, what with the wars, riots and lack of authority figures would explain why.
Up until a few years ago everything was just peachy. World governments came forth to sign a treaty to help put an end to the global warming crisis. A new leader had been appointed in Korea, Russia, Japan, and America, and everything seemed to be going well. That is of course until the Civil War in Europe... Nobody is really sure how it started, but when the war became bad enough, things got out of control. All it took was that one biological warhead to destroy most of the world. After it dropped, people started dying, not from the initial blast itsself, but from the mutagen that was hidden in the bomb. But those that died, didn't stay dead.
This is where I come in. The United States government issued a law saying that any fit men and women over the age of 16 would be put into service to fight "for their country" as they put it. But I knew about the government enough to know that they were just trying to save their own asses.
Training started as soon as my feet hit the ground. Running laps around the building, dismantling and rebuilding our weapons and other harsh exercises. training with everything from blades to explosives took place. One could say it was a nightmare, but it will help me survive. Follow orders, and ask no questions.
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Posted: Wed Jun 23, 2010 8:25 pm
tormenter012 New recruit C. Reed first postRecruit C. Reed S.T.A.R.S Boot Camp Boot Camp 20 miles South of Demilitarized Zone I havn't seen anything for miles... To think someone put a training camp all the way out here, in the middle of nowhere. Although, considering the world going to hell in a handbasket the past few years, what with the wars, riots and lack of authority figures would explain why. Up until a few years ago everything was just peachy. World governments came forth to sign a treaty to help put an end to the global warming crisis. A new leader had been appointed in Korea, Russia, Japan, and America, and everything seemed to be going well. That is of course until the Civil War in Europe... Nobody is really sure how it started, but when the war became bad enough, things got out of control. All it took was that one biological warhead to destroy most of the world. After it dropped, people started dying, not from the initial blast itsself, but from the mutagen that was hidden in the bomb. But those that died, didn't stay dead. This is where I come in. The United States government issued a law saying that any fit men and women over the age of 16 would be put into service to fight "for their country" as they put it. But I knew about the government enough to know that they were just trying to save their own asses. Training started as soon as my feet hit the ground. Running laps around the building, dismantling and rebuilding our weapons and other harsh exercises. training with everything from blades to explosives took place. One could say it was a nightmare, but it will help me survive. Follow orders, and ask no questions. ((Grammar-wise you are okay. This is a narration only text however which we usually stay away from here. It's always a good idea to add some action your character is doing. Also, when your character speaks, it's should be in ".." and in another color different, such as bold for blacker or any readable color. Please modify this post so you include all these things))
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