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Tempest of Poetry Muse

PostPosted: Sat Sep 26, 2009 11:26 pm


Screaming with fear
As the world tilts downward
Laughing with joy
As the world shoots forward
Death clouds around
While
Life brightens the day
Swirling around is
Emotions
Human heads
Are cleared by
Medications
While Earth spins round n’ round
Lives spiral out of control
Put in place
By unseen forces
PostPosted: Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:35 pm


It is very good, some of it seems to not flow perfectly but it is still pretty good.

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DKMiller

PostPosted: Sat Apr 03, 2010 9:58 pm


I liked it and it flowed fairly well but it seemed like there should be more to it.
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