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 Posted: Wed Aug 26, 2009 5:12 am
This is a ghost story that my cousin told me two or three years ago but with lots of parts added in. I hope you enjoy...and maybe get some chills. =D
If you throw a red - a RED pen - over your shoulder at MIDNIGHT, you won't hear it drop because a ghost will have caught it.
Just a rumor. It was just a stupid rumor. A stupid myth. Nobody knew who started it or where it originated from. It might have been around for a very long time...or for just a short time. In any case, nobody believed it. There weren't such things as ghosts!
Or is there? The question popped into Katie's mind seconds after hearing the myth from a friend. She did believe that supernatural beings existed - like God and Satan. Jesus. Lucifer. Gabriel the angel who brought a baby to the Virgin Mary. The rest of the angels who sat in Heaven and looked over the living. If all these things existed - couldn't ghosts exist too?
"Let's try it," Katie said to her best friend Jane one day. Jane looked at her like she were crazy. She was crazy. Isn't she crazy to want to test the rumor out? And possibly call ghosts into their boarding school?
"Fine," Jane said, and that night, at exactly midnight, Katie tossed her favorite red pen over her shoulder, a smirk on her face. No way was a ghost going to appear - but wait, no sound? NO SOUND? The pen didn't drop on the floor?! Suddenly, Katie felt really frightened - TOO frightened. She collapsed. And died.
Heart attack, the doctors said the next day. Of course. No ghosts came. Katie just had a fright because she heard no sound of the pen dropping - it landed on her bed.
So now Jane was encouraged. So the myth was false. She wanted to try it out herself now.
At midnight that night, Jane tossed the same pen over her shoulder. No sound. But Jane was stronger than Katie. She didn't die of a fright.
Slowly, she turned around. Then she had a fright because a woman dressed in white flowing clothes, black hair covering her pale face like a blanket was holding the pen. In a soft voice, the woman asked, "Is this your pen?"
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Posted: Thu Aug 27, 2009 11:22 am
Very, very good story. I love that last line: "Is this your pen?"
So innocent, so perfect. Good job, its a good story. The only thing I can say is to make sure you read over you write when your done, or have a friend/family member do it. Proofreading helps a lot, especially when your typing because it's really easy for a finger to slip and hit the wrong key. Other than a little proof reading and some sentence restructuring, I think its a really good story.
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fallenangel_Asha Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Aug 27, 2009 4:24 pm
wow awesome story. just proofread a little better next time.
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Posted: Tue Sep 01, 2009 2:55 pm
HaHa. I loved it. The begging seemed like something I'd read before but I'ver never heard it end like that. I loved it. Great story. But I agree with zoje972 about the proofreading thing.
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Posted: Fri Sep 25, 2009 1:50 pm
I loved it.I undertand the proofreading but that i enought with that.Great Job! biggrin
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Posted: Sat Oct 03, 2009 4:14 am
i really like ur story!
Keep the good work up XD
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Posted: Fri Oct 09, 2009 2:44 pm
I didn't find it really scary. I acctually found it amusing. It was really fun. I like it a lot. I have to try and think of something to write now.
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