Welcome to Gaia! ::

Okay, I may not be the best but I don't care. Okay so this is a book I am creating and it is in need of some serious help. I went blank for it and barely started... Well here it is, 'Cry Wolf'.

Cry Wolf
Amira is just an average girl looking for an average life, but when she moves into a small cabin in the great Appalachian moutains her life becomes far from average. Who is the boy that she found on her way home and what hade happened to him? What could do something so horrible to the boy? What is happening to the boy and what is it that is lurking in the dark forest that surrounds her home? So many questions, but what of the answers?

Prologue
The boy can as hard as his feet could take him. The giant wolves right on his heels. "Leave me alone you beasts."
The boy screamed as one jumped over him. The boy stood still from fear as they closed in a small circle around him. They snapped at his heels in turn making the boy more frightened. Then there was a frightening deep growl. All the wolves stoped what they where doing to the boy and backed away from him. The boy stood in horror as a gaint wolf like creature on its' hind legs, came out. They berast let out a crackling roar and the wolves scampered off. The beast looked at the boy with bood red eyes then let out a ear splitting howl. The boy covered his ears, falling to his knees. The creature aproached him with astonishing speed. Without a chance to run the beast bit into the boys throut. The boy let out a high pitched scream...

Chapter 1
"Home sweet home."
Amira looked up at her new home. It was a beautiful little cabin that sat on top of a mountain, giving her an unbeilveable view of the scenery around her. She looked for the key to the cabin's lock on her key chain. 'Found you.' Amira put the key into the hole and turned until she heard a 'click' sound. She opened the door to see all her stuff on boxes and her couches and such were they where suppose to be. Amira walks in, setting her stuff that she brought with her on the floor and took a look around. She walked over to were the bedroom was and opened the door. Her bed and wordrobe was there with boxes pailed up in one corner of the room. She walked over to the pail and grabed a box and opened it up and started to unpack her belongings.

I would mess it up knowing me^^

Just click "Add new topic" .__.

uh... hi... I'm Hokama and this is uh.... one of the poems a wrote after the love of my life abandoned me. I hope you enjoy my sorrow.

Nothing left to Die.
By Hokama.

My tears speak the words I cannot say
My heart beats with every word.
I can’t stand the life of nothingness
For to exist is no life at all

You said you’d always love me.
And I believed it true
You stabbed me in the back again
Everytime that you said
I love you

My heart is always breaking
My soul cries out for help
I’m a dead man in his waking
And it’s all because of you

For me to ever think you loved me
Proves me a fool
I can’t believe I ever thought
That you wouldn’t be so cruel.

Everything is gone form me
Everything I've ever felt
You never really truly cared.
And now there’s nothing left to care about

Nothing ever matters
No one ever cares
Love has never existed
And life is so unfair.

How could you ever do this?
Put this pain upon my soul
You said you’d never hurt anyone
But I guess that just proves me right

I’ve never been anyone.
I never will be.
Nothing I ever do will be good enough
Never, not for me

You ripped my heart out in every way
But still say you care
Don’t ever say you ever do
You shouldn’t even dare

I know you never cared for me
The same way I did you.
But the least you could have done was told me
Before I did myself

Forever is a long, long time
Eternity is longer.
What I wouldn't give to die tomorrow
And never have to see you

Because of you
I hurt myself
Everyday in every way
But there’s nothing left to hurt.

All you care about is yourself
That’s all you ever have
So much for ever falling in love
Because this pain is deadly.

You’ve lied to me,
You’ve put me down
You’ve hurt me every time
You ripped my heart out time again

So why should I even try?
there’s nothing left to kill inside
Nothing left to die.


END

ok, that's it. I want honest opinions please. there,s a whole bunch more poetry kinda like this one if anyone wants to read it, i guess i could put it up. PM me if you want to keep a copy. all my work is copyrighted to me and if your caught stealing it wont be good. but if you want it, just ask, and I'm sure i can let you have a copy. Thanks! and don't forget, constructive criticism! not verbal harassment! lol.

really? honestly I don't think its that good. you actually cried? wow. that's a first for me... here's another!! Mild (cursing) language in this one. nothing serious, but just to warn you. This another one I wrote since he abandoned me. I hope you enjoy my sorrow.

Lover forever, Never.
By Hokama

You never listen.
To a single word I say.
Then cry to me and bring me down
day after day.

You never ever held me,
like you said you would.
But expected me to hold you
like I was the only one that could.

You come and go faster,
then the wind through my breath.
And when you leave me here alone
all I wish is death.

You never ever held me,
like you said you would.
But expected me to hold you
like I was the only one that could.

You break my heart and poison my soul
and demand that I stay.
Right now I'm not sorry to inform you,
but it don't work that way.

You never ever held me,
like you said you would.
But expected me to hold you
like I was the only one that could.

Your image always haunts me,
never leaving me to be.
That ever controlling monster
I can never see.

You never ever held me,
like you said you would.
But expected me to hold you
like I was the only one that could.

Can't you ever even see,
the hurt inside my heart.
That was until you ripped it out
you filthy offal tart.

I feel the pain but see no wound
just like I've always felt.
But still when you smile at me,
what’s left begins to melt.

You never ever held me,
like you said you would.
But expected me to hold you
like I was the only one that could.

You always said you loved me.
I believed it to be true.
I never should have thought that way.
I always, always knew.

That as soon as something perfect,
came into your eye.
Your "love" for me would falter
and you would force it to die.

You never ever held me
like you said you would.
But expected me to hold you
like I was the only one that could.

But as of now I've had enough.
You can kiss your chance good bye.
'cause I'm never ever coming back
and that's not a lie.

I never really thought
it would all happen this fast.
But I've only got one thing left to say,
and that's Kiss. My. a**.

You never ever held me,
like you said you would.
But expected me to hold you
like I was the only one that could.

But for now and forever,
you've got to realize.
I don't really give a damn.
What I am in your eyes.

END

hope you like it! leave your comments please, I want to know what you think! and remember! everyone's view is important! biggrin

wow. that was amazing! i love it!!