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Tai Chi

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Posted: Tue Sep 23, 2008 5:20 pm

She once told me
She hated goodbyes
So all I could do
To get her to stay
Was to say it every day
And watch her cry

Posted: Tue Sep 23, 2008 7:41 pm

goot but I'd put "she hated goodbyes" on the second line. whee but i don't understand the title. explain?

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Posted: Tue Sep 23, 2008 8:04 pm

别容许在眼睛还口! 别容呼吸! 放下及其卒!

It means too slow or too late..
But she doesn't date younger gentlemen anyways.. Even if we are less than a year apart...

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Posted: Tue Sep 23, 2008 8:54 pm

Only a Doctor Could Pull This Off

I wounder if she knows that when my hear beats
It's no longer pumping blood through my veins
It's beating for her
And when my diaphram contracts
It's no longer drawing oxygen into my lungs
It's breathing for her
And when my eyes make fake colors
They are no longer interpreting light
They are looking for her
I wounder if she knows what's keeping her here

(It's the drugs)

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Posted: Tue Sep 30, 2008 4:05 pm

until i read the last line i thought she was dead and you were mourning whee it's a good poem though XD i liked it. but it needs a little spice! tis a normal poem...kinda like the kind i make... crying

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