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 Posted: Tue Jan 22, 2008 2:55 pm
Karabushi Sushi I'll read it when my head isn't going to explode Dx I'm much too sick to read anything longer than...I don't know. My brain is not functioning well.
 I hope your well soon, and when your well please give it a read And if anyone finds a good one post it, if you dont mind
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Posted: Tue Jan 22, 2008 3:10 pm
[Hollow Point] Angel, gtfo means Get The ******** Out. As in convey your opinions/ideas/sentences in a better manner or I will make you GTFO, with my foot. Not everyone has as good spelling as you evidently do, and I commend you for wanting to become a teacher, just make sure you stay out of Hawaii. I mean god knows that we need better teachers here, but the kids basically run everything. All the good teachers leave within a year because the systems here sucks, the kids basically run everything because teachers here don't like to teach, all hold this liberal ideal that "punishment" is ignoring whatever the kids do. My second grade teacher tried to take this kid to the principal once and he actually grabbed a pair of scissors and start slashing, kicking, etc. He went eventually but that woman cried several times that year. She was a great teacher as well. I wish there were more like her. Hell, half the teachers here don't even like to teach, let alone like kids. well hey now I wasn't being rude or saying that my spelling is amazingly awesome or whatever, but I mean "opinions" was spelled really bad (no offense) and with all the new ways to abriviate (see I know that's not the way to spell it but I wont spell check it to prove that I am not a spelling master) stuff I was just wondering... like gtfo confused me... and yea I'm only in my second year of college for teaching so I still have a ways to go and I think I wouldn't mind teaching in hawaii, Philly (Philadelphia) is probably worse anyway since if a teacher starts to even consider yelling at a student they have to worry about the student pulling out a gun. but yea I don't want to move too far away from home unless it's Florida, I love Florida... (ok done talking... probably not making much sense anyway.)
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Posted: Tue Jan 22, 2008 4:08 pm
Dark_Angel05 sorry I didn't mean to be rude or anything lol just becoming a pet peeve lol... I dunno I couldn't get into them, I guess I'm just not interested enough
Uhm, kiddo, you don't even capitalize.
Don't correct other people's sentences unless yours are damn near perfect. Oh, and by the way, teachers don't use chatspeak. "LOL!!!"
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Posted: Tue Jan 22, 2008 9:23 pm
I'll start with the Tokka one, since, as you can imagine, I'm somewhat of an addict of these. (I love reading, I write my own fics, and I'm a Tokka freak.) I'm going to be honest with you because I respect you enough not to sugarcoat things. There's nothing more frustrating to a writer (or me at least) when there's NO constructive criticism and only unhelpful comments like, "Oh, that was cute."
It was cliche, with the whole idea of Sokka teaching her colours. I've read it a million times, often interchangeably with Taang, Toko, etc.
It was a nice change to see the romance unresolved at the end. A lot of ship-writers feel pressured to have an in-your-face "d'awwwwww" kiss at the end.
Sokka was a bit OOC. I know that Sokka is wholly capable of being a kind-hearted sensitive guy, he's shown it on many occasions, but that essence of being a goof ball is also present. He wasn't horribly OOC, not so much that you noticed it, but y'know, I'm trying to help you out.
Other than that, I don't really have much to say for the Tokka one.
Now, onto the Sokkla one! Strange waters, these be...
First thing that strikes me is that it's insanely OOC, but hey, it's Sokkla... kind of comes with the job description...
There isn't really much... what's the word... I can't really discern any motives. Y'know? It's like, WHY is Sokka doing this? Out of good will? She imprisoned, probably tortured, and possibly killed his girlfriend. She has attempted to kill him, his sister, and his friends on several occasions, not to mention he associates her with Evil-Conquering-Fire-Nation (for good reason), and THAT'S the reason his mother is dead, and the reason he hadn't seen his father for 2 years. True, she isn't responsible for that, but she's representative of a group that is. Sokka is a kind person, but COME ON. No one is that forgiving. If we've seen anything of Sokka, it's that he's INSANELY PROTECTIVE of the people he cares about. I sincerely doubt he would interact in any way with Azula except attempted murder. If she tried to talk to him, he would not listen. (Remember The Eclipse? "Blahblahblah Suki blahblahblah you didn't come for her rofl." "....GYAAAAAAARGH!")
Yeah, so, it was... there was not much logic behind it as far as character profiles go, especially for Sokka. I can accept the idea of Azula being human and vulnerable, but I don't accept the idea of Sokka forgetting the last 16 years of his life that were tainted by everything Azula represents, and indeed Azula herself.
You could make the argument that Sokka has forgiven Zuko, who was in similar light as Azula, but... yeah, no. Just... no. If for the sake of plot-line if anything else, Zuko has been portrayed as STRUGGLING. Azula's been portrayed as a cold sadistic b***h with no regrets. I understand it's fan fiction, but... come on now. Dx
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Posted: Wed Jan 23, 2008 6:19 am
Butterfly Nebula I'll start with the Tokka one, since, as you can imagine, I'm somewhat of an addict of these. (I love reading, I write my own fics, and I'm a Tokka freak.) I'm going to be honest with you because I respect you enough not to sugarcoat things. There's nothing more frustrating to a writer (or me at least) when there's NO constructive criticism and only unhelpful comments like, "Oh, that was cute." It was cliche, with the whole idea of Sokka teaching her colours. I've read it a million times, often interchangeably with Taang, Toko, etc. It was a nice change to see the romance unresolved at the end. A lot of ship-writers feel pressured to have an in-your-face "d'awwwwww" kiss at the end. Sokka was a bit OOC. I know that Sokka is wholly capable of being a kind-hearted sensitive guy, he's shown it on many occasions, but that essence of being a goof ball is also present. He wasn't horribly OOC, not so much that you noticed it, but y'know, I'm trying to help you out. Other than that, I don't really have much to say for the Tokka one. Now, onto the Sokkla one! Strange waters, these be... First thing that strikes me is that it's insanely OOC, but hey, it's Sokkla... kind of comes with the job description... There isn't really much... what's the word... I can't really discern any motives. Y'know? It's like, WHY is Sokka doing this? Out of good will? She imprisoned, probably tortured, and possibly killed his girlfriend. She has attempted to kill him, his sister, and his friends on several occasions, not to mention he associates her with Evil-Conquering-Fire-Nation (for good reason), and THAT'S the reason his mother is dead, and the reason he hadn't seen his father for 2 years. True, she isn't responsible for that, but she's representative of a group that is. Sokka is a kind person, but COME ON. No one is that forgiving. If we've seen anything of Sokka, it's that he's INSANELY PROTECTIVE of the people he cares about. I sincerely doubt he would interact in any way with Azula except attempted murder. If she tried to talk to him, he would not listen. (Remember The Eclipse? "Blahblahblah Suki blahblahblah you didn't come for her rofl." "....GYAAAAAAARGH!") Yeah, so, it was... there was not much logic behind it as far as character profiles go, especially for Sokka. I can accept the idea of Azula being human and vulnerable, but I don't accept the idea of Sokka forgetting the last 16 years of his life that were tainted by everything Azula represents, and indeed Azula herself. You could make the argument that Sokka has forgiven Zuko, who was in similar light as Azula, but... yeah, no. Just... no. If for the sake of plot-line if anything else, Zuko has been portrayed as STRUGGLING. Azula's been portrayed as a cold sadistic b***h with no regrets. I understand it's fan fiction, but... come on now. Dx Thanks for not sugercoating it, I dont know why even tho they where ooc I still like this and this in one of the few Sokkla ones I could find that achaly had her some what in chareter. the Tokka one was cuter then I wanted it to be and yes aa little clich at the end but the writer warns you at the begging about that fluff. I still enjoyed them but thatns for the rough and not the fulff ^_^ XD
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Posted: Wed Jan 23, 2008 10:30 am
[Hollow Point] Angel, gtfo means Get The ******** Out. As in convey your opinions/ideas/sentences in a better manner or I will make you GTFO, with my foot. Not everyone has as good spelling as you evidently do, and I commend you for wanting to become a teacher, just make sure you stay out of Hawaii. I mean god knows that we need better teachers here, but the kids basically run everything. All the good teachers leave within a year because the systems here sucks, the kids basically run everything because teachers here don't like to teach, all hold this liberal ideal that "punishment" is ignoring whatever the kids do. My second grade teacher tried to take this kid to the principal once and he actually grabbed a pair of scissors and start slashing, kicking, etc. He went eventually but that woman cried several times that year. She was a great teacher as well. I wish there were more like her. Hell, half the teachers here don't even like to teach, let alone like kids. I remember when I was in 4th grade the cops had to come in to a class because a kid threw a chair at his teacher during recess ;/ They cuffed him ;o and it was pretty darn exciting :'D
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