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That's about the same as how I feel about the piece...thanks for the input.

Okay, so my redlines suck. Because we're sort of... on par in our talents. But It made me understand what I was seeing.



You see, you've got her back twisting. But you don't have her hips following. That's the problem with the hips and the legs. So I've angled her butt. And that fixed that problem, sort of, and so you have to change her legs a bit too.
Also her torso is really too long, but that's a stylistic choice so I ignored it.
And the problem in the shoulders is just that you didn't bother to visualize the way a shoulder works or connects to the body.
You should've drawn a straight line across (or in this case it would've been an oval now that I think about it).
I did a very bad job of redlining now that I think about it....

Um.. Anyway. I hope I helped a little.

I'm sorry. I don't always have the best way with words when it comes to critiquing. That wasn't really what I meant.

Anyway. Sorry if I wasn't of any help.

EDIT: In one last attempt to be helpful, here's a reference to a similar pose, but at more of a side angle. Her knees aren't bent, but maybe it'll help.Picture Reference.

Hrm. I'll try that next time. XD
Also, they're markers. I use copics. :3