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(You got me, I'm sitting on the other side closest to the door.)

Deugaro blinked at his outburst.
"That was... unexpected." He thought.
With mild curiosity of what the picture was, Deugaro complied.

"It is considered polite to give your name first before asking another." He said in a patient baritone voice. "As for your other question, I came through that door which is connected to the halls, that is connected to another door that leads outside... That is where I come from."

With no full answer given he relaxed in his chair, the painful ringing in his head fading slightly.
(Thank you for the rank up Aniur.)

Vanyel had gone over to the room the other had gone into earlier. "Excuse me," he said hoping not to intrude on the man's privacy, "but I have a question about one of the gods here. The elder stood and walked over to Van and gestured for him to follow. Van was doubtful, but he assumed the other man had been watching him and somehow knew what he was going to ask about. Then he realized he was being led away from the strange and terrible figure. They reached the opposite side and the old man said, "I'm willing to bet you were drawn to this one, am I correct?" he sighed another deep, tired-of-the-world sighs he seemed so apt to do, "It feels like everyone is drawn to him. Many of these others have been neglected because of him. It's very sad." Van was stunned, this god was amazing, but he lacked something that the dark figure had. He seemed be lacking a purpose. "Actually no, not him. I meant the one at the other side, the dark one on the pool of water." For a moment the other man seemed to be shocked, "Are you sure you are interested in him? No one ever has gone to him." He pulled a scroll out of his robes and handed it to Van, "If you wish to learn about him, look for these texts, they will help you. I wish you luck Child of the Dark One." he walked back to his room leaving Van standing before the golden god in stunned silence, "Child? Of the Dark Lord?" he puzzled for a moment of the meaning of the old man's word. He walked out of the Chapel looking for someone who could help him get the texts on the list. Out of nowhere it seemed, Van had an urge to go to the dining hall. He looked at the sun and did some quick mental math. A sudden thought struck him like a blow, "Oh my! I'm late! She'll rip me to pieces!" Vanyel ran off at top speed towards the hall. As he entered he realized that it was almost full. He found and got into the nearest empty seat and hoped no one had noticed his entrance. He put the text under his seat and waited for his meal.

((I'm glad you enjoyed my last post. It's interesting because usually my posts degrade if I'm even a little tired. I've been working on a couple other RPs and it's been helping me improve faster because I'm using what you told me so often.))

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So it is my first student who started all this comes back for another posting. Been waiting for this, lets see if you've gotten a bit better from those other rps you've been taking part in.

Oh girl, holy run on sentences Batman!
I see at least two sentences in there. Good use of the word slouched though.

Clever, you almost got me there. I had to look it up because that is not a normal use of the word. Very clever though. :3 Getting so good at this you got the upper hand on your tutor there. Lets see. Its not so much you made a huge mistake in linking all that into one sentence, its more that its a lot to swallow in one chunk. If you get my drift. So lets:

Not a huge change, it was already well written. Of course that makes an issue with the next sentence, but I know that you know that it could have been started like this:

Otherwise, this was quite good as well. You did a good bit of character work right there and while I felt the post was a bit short, I don't see much more you could have done with it due to how your character is interacting with those around him. Good. :3 I'm happy with how you've been developing your character in the last few consecutive posts.

No need for thanks, you earned it. If you hadn't, I wouldn't have upped you one. :3
Oh, slick. Baritone even. XD Anyways, where was I?

Just a little issue here, it has to do with how quotations are done. They are tricky things and I've seen a lot of trouble with them in this thread. It seems to be one of the few problems you have left in your writing, so we're going to try and tackle it.

Also, a question of intent here.

I understand what you were getting at, or at least I believe I do. It could have been worded better. Perhaps instead of "With no full answer given...", something such as "With parts left out that he would rather have unknown..." or "Trouble in the guise of probing questions side skirted..." or even "With the attention diverted from himself..."

Thats about it. Short and sweet. Good job.

Yesterday I was ill and was unable to get to your post. D: I'll spare you the messy details. I am glad to hear though that you've seen improvement in yourself. I understand how hard that can be, but also how good it feels. :3
Well, lets get going:

Just a sticky little note. You use "gone" twice which makes your sentence feel redundant. It's not grammatically incorrect, it just sounds bad. Something more appropriate would have been:

Simple and sweet. The rest of the post is rather brilliant. I mean, not only the way you've manipulated the npc, but the artful way in which you interacted with my little prompt. The thread of magic. I've really been looking forward to each one of your posts and the same can be said for the next.
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+1 Rank

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Good day to you sir. Lets see what we have here. ( Have you guys noticed I'm taking a long time to grade? It's because I don't want to get too ahead without Squire around. )

I really like this sentence. There are a few problems with it though. The phrase "to notice" is the infinite form of noticing meaning that it can't be assigned as an action. You have to conjugate it to another form. In this case you should have used:

You know, I really liked that memory lane bit, but I kinda tinkered with it to give it a bit more flare. The kind of thing I believe your character would think. :3
Not much else to change, but getting much better.
In the sentence "Though he didn't..." should be "Though he doesn't...". Same old same old. Didn't is past tense, doesn't is present. :3 Looking for the present tense here. If you're not sure as to which form of a word you should be using, check a thesaurus.
Last note, tack a "He" on to the front of that "Stands back up." It just completes the sentence.

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Good job. Fewer and fewer mistakes every time. Solid posts. Very good work.

Raoden spent time observing everyone in the dining hall, trying to discern what their abilities, srengths, and weaknesses could be. He wasn't getting much. Everybody was so different... There was even one who looked to be of a different race than he'd ever even HEARD of! He cleared his mind of the confusion he felt and began observing the room, searching for any exits or hiding places, should things go badly for him. Still he did his best to avoid notice. He felt like he was succeeding in that aspect, for no one seemed to be paying too much attention to him...