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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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 Posted: Sun May 09, 2010 7:00 am
Name of weapon: Chakra Glaive
Who owns the weapon: Kyoujin Tosatsu
Where it was found/Who made it: Tosatsu found it, but refuses to say where.
The Range of the weapon: Melee range, about seven foot.
Weakness: No real weakness, because it has no real strengths.
Description: A six foot steel pole that looks suspiciously like a wagon axle. When chakra is put into it a blade forms at the end. The blade is about a foot long, making the total length seven feet. Another blade can be made at the other end, jumping the length to eight feet, but the range remains at seven. The ability to form this blade is not actually built into the pole, but is actually caused by a slot on the tip of the pole. Chakra flowing through the pole shoots out through the crack, forming the blade. The chakra used to form the blade is held in stasis, meaning it does not disperse, and when the blade is released, the chakra returns to the user.
Rp Sample: RP Pending, if needed.
This weapon is the staff my character already has, he just hasn't discovered the ability yet.
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Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 1:47 pm
Who owns the weapon: Kuza Kalomi
Where it was found/Who made it: Kuza created it after studying how her other sword was created and used Mokuton instead of other stuff.
The Range of the weapon: Tachi range which is longer then a katana
Weakness: Fire, Lightning, ninjutsu blades
Description: This Tachi was made out of special Mokuton wood that is stronger then steel due to being based off of Mokuton: Moku no Yoroi, and coated with a powerful poison. The poison due to the very absorbing and adaptive nature of the wood the poison can remain on it for a set amount of attacks. Even though the blade is made out of wood it looks like steel. This blade was designed not to have a handle and just make it part of that blade making sure that only a puppet could use it or the risk of cutting fingers off would be high. This Tachi could also be held by someone with a puppet arm. When in its sheath it is made to look like a ordinary Tachi with a handle but any try on grabbing it would end bloody. The sheath is also made of Mokuton wood and can be used to block attacks. The Tachi because of the poison has a side effect to cutting humans and only humans, the poison causes the victim to go through many stages of effects.
Name: Kalomi Curse (The Poison)
Required Posts: 15 Posts to make a vial/ 1 vial per weapon
Effects: Listed below
Stage1: 1 post after being cut the victim will begin to feel great pain that spreads to 1/4 of the body from the initial point, and feel dizzy
Stage2: 2 posts after being cut the victim will begin to feel great pain that spreads to 2/4 of the body from the initial point, and feel dizzy
Stage3: 3 posts after being cut the victim will begin to feel great pain that spreads to 3/4 of the body from the initial point, and feel dizzy
Stage4: 4 posts after being cut the victim will begin to feel great pain that spreads to 4/4 of the body from the initial point, and have a hard time concentrating.
Stage5: 5 posts after being cut the victim the pain increases to the feeling of being stabbed and they lose sight in right eye.
Stage6: 6 posts after being cut the victim the pain increased to the feeling of being burned alive and they lose sight in left eye.
The Wood blade have 18 charges.
The regular blades have 10 charges.
A attack that cuts into the skin takes 1 charge, jutsus take 3 charges.
The blindness lasts for 3 posts after stage 6
The pain requires hospital attention, or medical ninja. 2 day stay in hospital or 4 posts to cure from a medical ninja.
If a medical ninja get to the victim before stage 6 only 1 post to cure is required. ( only can be cured once per fight )
In order to make a vial of anti-poison for the poison the medical ninja must know how to do that with poisons and must take 15 posts to create a vial. That vial will give the user immunity to the poison. (shouldn't take less time to break down a poison and create a antidote then it did to make the poison)
Additional cuts do nothing due to the poison already being in their system until they have been cured. After being cured 3 times the victim is immune to the poison.
If the blade is damaged or broken, Mokuton: Moku no Ningyo yaiba [Wood Release: Wood Puppet Blade] can repair it.
Besides the powerful poison that can be applied to the Tachi, it had a few of its own abilities.
Must Be Rank or higher then the Jutsu to use them.
Gennin:
Name of Jutsu: Mokuton Hidden Spikes
Rank of Jutsu: D
Range of Jutsu: 10 yards
Jutsu's Element: Mokuton
Description: The user of the Tachi forces D rank amount of chakra into the sword, after doing so the user must stab the blade into the ground for the jutsu to work. After being stabbed in the ground wood spikes shoot up from the ground at any enemy in a 10 yard radius. These spikes will have any poison that is applied to the Tachi on them
Name of Jutsu: Mokuton Tachi Wrap
Rank of Jutsu: D
Range of Jutsu: 10 yards
Jutsu's Element: Mokuton
Description: The user of the Tachi forces D rank amount of chakra into the sword, after doing so the user must point the Tachi at their opponent instead of stabbing it into the ground like Mokuton Hidden Spikes. The tip of the Tachi will shoot out a 10 yard piece of wood that attempts to wrap around the enemy and bind them in place. The Tachi its self is still sharp up to the tip and the wood that is shot out remains connected. The user is required to stand in that spot or else the jutsu will stop working.
Chunnin:
Name of Jutsu: Mokuton Explosion
Rank of Jutsu: C
Range of Jutsu: 20 Yard Radius
Jutsu's Element: Mokuton
Description: The user of the Tachi forces C rank amount of chakra into the sword, A wood ball around the size of a base ball forms on the tip of the sword. This ball can be picked up and thrown or the sword can be used to launch it. The ball once struck hard from hitting the ground or a person or anything else will explode sending Senbon shaped pieces of wood in all directions for 20 yards. If the Enemy intercepts the ball the user can cause the ball to explode at any time. The Senbon have any poison that was on the blade.
Name of Jutsu: Mokuton Wall
Rank of Jutsu: C
Range of Jutsu: N/A
Jutsu's Element: Mokuton
Description: The user of the Tachi forces c rank amount of chakra into the sword, after doing so the user must stab the blade into the ground for the jutsu to work. After being stabbed in the ground wood will shoot up from the ground making a 6 by 6 foot wall 3 inches thick. Due to Mokuton wood being heavily infused with Wood Chakra, making it very resilient to taijutsu damage. Ninjutsu blades can penetrate this armor. By forcing higher rank chakra into the Tachi the user can increase the size.
A additional 6 by 6 foot and 3 inches think per rank.
Jounin:
Name of Jutsu: Mokuton Chakra Herb
Rank of Jutsu: B
Range of Jutsu: 5 feet
Jutsu's Element: Mokuton
Description: The user sits on the ground and crosses his or her legs, the user then stabs the Tachi into the ground after forcing B rank chakra into it. Vines the grow out of the ground and wrap around the sword and the user but not tightly. The user must remain like that during the jutsu. Every post the user regains 3 chakra points. This can be used with a group, the group but also go into the same meditative state. Each person must post on their own in order to regain chakra.
By useing A rank chakra at the beginning of the jutsu, User gains 5 chakra per post and S rank gains 7 chakra per post.
This is mainly used for regain chakra in order to prepare for a large fight or to train longer.
Name of Jutsu: Mokuton Poison Negation
Rank of Jutsu: B
Range of Jutsu: N/A
Jutsu's Element: Mokuton
Description: This is a Passive Ability. Due to the Adaptive properties and absorption of wood and after studying the properties of wood element the user is able to have a higher immunity to any poisons that touch Mokuton wood. After 2 posts all poison is negated from the users system. The user must be holding the Tachi.
Kage/Sannin:
Name of Jutsu: Mokuton Weapon Master
Rank of Jutsu: A
Range of Jutsu: N/A
Jutsu's Element: Mokuton
Description: The user of the Tachi forces A rank amount of chakra into the sword, after doing so can can form the sword into any type of weapon they can think of. Blunt weapons causes the poison to have no effect on the enemy. If the user wishes to change the type of weapon they must force C rank amount into the blade. The Jutsu can be canceled at any time causeing the weapon to change back into a Tachi.
Name of Jutsu: Mokuton Dragon Blade
Rank of Jutsu: S
Range of Jutsu: 30 yards
Jutsu's Element: Mokuton
Description: The user of the Tachi forces S rank amount of chakra into the sword, after doing so the user must point the Tachi at their opponent. A large dragon head made of wood forms on the tip of the sword then can be launched like a whip at the enemy. When the dragon head is launched at the opponent a 'neck' is attached to the tip of the sword. The 'neck' has spikes all over it that contain any poison absorbed by the blade. The dragon head's teeth contain the poison also. Due to the Dragon head being made of Mokuton wood it is stronger then steel but is weak to lightning and fire jutsus. The Head can travel up to 30 yards and go around corners and change direction at any time depending on how the user wants it to travel.
Rp Sample:
Kuza let out a long sigh after begin slammed into a tree from a strong taijutsu move. She popped her neck before holding out her right hand and focused chakra into it. "Come to me Honekazari.." There was a poof of white smoke, when it cleared kuza was holding Honekazari in its sheath in her right hand. "now we will begin.." She took the sheath in her left hand and pulled out the Tachi with her right. The Tachi had been covered in her powerful poison a day before and due to how Mokuton wood was it was still on there. She smiled before forcing D rank chakra into the tachi and stabbing it into the ground, with enemy ninja was close enough to the jutsu, spikes shot up from all directions at him. He attempted to dodge and get out of the range of the spikes but was cut lightly on his arm. "perfect.." Kuza said as she pulled the blade out of the ground. "Dam you.." The enemy ninja said as he began to feel the pain in his stomach. "im not done yet!" Kuza yelled as she forced D rank chakra into the tachi once agian and pointed at the ninja, wood shot out at him in attempt to bind him be he was able to dodge it. "dam you.." Kuza let out a sigh but smiled agian as the enemy ninja felt the pain go to his arms. "...lets see if you can dodge this..." She had a plan and was sure it would work. She quickly forced C rank chakra
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Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 3:26 pm
@Tosa: Nice description, yet there are weaknesses like eletricity that could be used on the staff in order to shock you while you hold it, heat is also another kind of weakness. The staff could be heated and cause you to not be able to hold it, burn your hands and stuff like that. Though it would need a high temperature for that to happen it is still a weakness. How much chakra would be "moved" from the user to the staff in order to keep each blade? If the staff is removed from your hands forcefully before you can release the blades, wouldn't the chakra that forms them be lost? I know how you rp, yet, I'd prefer if you added a RP sample just to avoid future problems.
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Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 4:16 pm
 Name of weapon: Spider Bite
Who owns the weapon: Future RPC
Where it was found/Who made it: RPC's Grandfather
The Range of the weapon: About the length of a kunai
Weakness: 1 Post to load with liquid, easily breakable
Description: The Stiletto was crafted, at first as a tool to inject people with, such as things for medicine. It is extremely thin, and easily breakable if bent. The user would first load up the dagger with a liquid, for example a poison of some sorts. They would then somehow p***k it into the victim, and inject the poison. Afterwords, the stiletto is in need of loading again, and takes 1 post to do so. The weapon can also be used to inject medicine, or adrenaline, etc.
Rp Sample:
Teisei's mind teetered on the brink of unconsciousness. His team was down, and he was failing as a medic. He himself had received a number of injuries, some that were actually dangerous. Tessei had done his best to heal himself, though it was taxing, and the enemy was still alive. He had come to the conclusion that he was a Speed Ninja, and Tessei couldn't keep up with him. The man would rush in, land a hit before Tessei could block it, and then run before Tessei could retaliate, well, that was how he broke Tessei's leg that is. His eyebrows knitted in concetration as he spotted the ninja, who was wielding the kunai that had pierced Tessei a few times. Tessei's eyes widened as the ninja took off, running straight for him once more. His mind reeled as he thought of a plan, and he reached for his stiletto dagger attached to his left calf. The man thrusted the kunai forth, and Tessei grimaced as he stuck his hand straight out, allowing the kunai to pierce his hand. He pulled forth, and launched his arm that was holding the stiletto, feeling it sink into the mans shoulder. The enemy jumped back, breaking the stiletto in the process due to the angle of the maneuver. Tessei smiled as he ripped the kunai from his hand, and did his best to close the wound, and bandage it. The enemy shinobi was slowly rocking back and forth, probably wondering why he couldn't move so fast. Tessei smirked, and watched as the poison took affect. It wasn't deadly, though it may as well have been. The poison he had used would slow the movements of a human body, letting their minds still comprehend everything at a normal pace, though the message would not get to the body as fast as it normally would. Tessei stood up, and hobbled over to the enemy, wincing at the pain. He grasped the man's kunai, and shoved it into his eye, angling it up so it pierced his brain. The enemy had been trying to raise his arm in defense, only to have it fall limp beside his arm.
{I'll submit the non lethal poisons I will use as other custom weapons if this is approved}
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Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 4:52 pm
@Jade: I see nothing wrong with it, approved.
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Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 4:57 pm
*Performs a set of 103984 backflips, lands and sets the fireworks off*
Thanks Beatriz, I shall now begin to work on the poisons I will use!
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Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 6:11 pm
--These substances are made for Spiderbite, which was just approved by Beatriz-chan--
 Name of Substance: Hinder
Required Posts: 3 Posts to make
Effects: The victim will begin to feel too slow for their own good, over a course of 6 posts.
1st Post: The victim will feel their legs reacting slower, which may cause them to trip up, and move slower.
2nd Post: The victim's torso is slow at reacting, making maneuvering hard.
3rd Post: The victim's arm begin to slacken, once more making maneuvers hard.
4th Post: The victim's body is slower than it should be, making reactions to things slower. Their brain is unaffected by this.
5th Post: The victim's arms return to their normal speed
6th Post: The victim's torso and legs have returned to their normal speed, and the poison has been purged.
xXx
 Name: Adrenaline Shot
Required Posts: 5 Posts to make
Effects: The user will inject the adrenaline, though way more than should be allowed. This makes the victims mind perceive everything at such a high rate, it seems as if everything is moving in slow motion. There body will not be affected by this, it is simply their mind. For example, when after the victim is injected with the adrenaline, and if they are about to receive a cut, they will feel everything as if it were in slow motion. They would feel the blade entering their skin, cutting through the tissue, muscle, etc. This lasts for 5 posts
xXx
 Name: Blind
Required Posts: 4
Effects: The victim, after being injected, shall suffer blindness for a few posts.
1st Post: The left eye goes blind
2nd Post: The blindness alternates to the right eye
3rd Post: Both eyes fail
4th Post: Vision is returned
xXx
 Name: Numb
Required Posts: 15
Effects: The victim will loose their sense of feeling, even pain they may suffer. This could make the victim quite reckless, as they may believe they have turned invincible. They will tend to not shy away from a blade, nor notice if a kunai is protruding from their back. Of course, injuries will still tax them, such as they cannot run on a broken leg. This poison lasts for 10 posts. Afterword, all the pain will rush back, and consume them if they are not already dead.
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Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 9:22 pm
Name of weapon: Serpents Bo Staff Who owns the weapon: Yun Sung Where it was found/Who made it: Created by the warrior priests at the Sung mansion, it was bestowed upon Yun as a graduation present for mastering the monk's fighting style. The Range of the weapon: 7 feet, 9 feet when detached. Weakness: Its long length makes it an extremely slow weapon. When in nunchaku mode, its hard to handle. If the weapon misses, it has a chance of harming the user. Description: A 7 foot long staff that when activated, breakes into a 9 foot long, tri-section nunchaku. Rp Sample: Yun Sung
Rock Shinobi | Master Tactician | Defense Ninja | Yamanaka Clan
Yun stood guard at the Rock's intelligence building as he looks at the oncoming rush of bandits. Despite his interrogation and careful planning for defense, the rogues broke through the defensive line and also sprung and ambush over the mountains. Yun grabs his staff and readies into his stance. One after another, the rogues rush him as he swings and thrusts his blunt weapon into the attackers. Skulls crushings and the occasional impalings were all that was seen by the attackers.
Suddenly, the rogues halted their attack. They surrounded Yun. Grinning, he watches as one by one, they attacking. Twisting the center of the staff, the two ends detach and a steel chain exits from the center staff. He spins the tri-handle nunchaku with much skill, breaking the bones of all his attackers. Waving it around his body, he spins it in the air and twists the center again, causing the staff to retract and return back to normal.
"Come on, is that all you got?"
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Posted: Wed May 19, 2010 10:32 am
Name of weapon: World Ablaze, or Ragnarok
Who owns the weapon: Saga Saki
Where it was found/Who made it: Passed down From Father who stole it from a Mist shinobi
The Range of the weapon: Close
Description/Weakness: World Ablaze, or Ragnarok is a weapon of subtle myth and legend. At the dawn of the world, the 5 elements took physical forms, until one met the other in a fatal death match. Water consumed Fire, as Fire consumed Wind, and the circle of elemental chakra was born. Each of these elements carried weapons of supreme power, some of which are still rumored to exist today.
Physical description
Ragnarok takes it's form as a sword made of lava glass, or obsidian. The edge appears to have been lovingly crafted over the course of many years, centuries even, and is literally razor-sharp. The edge isn't fully straight, but sharp all around. It's approximately 2'8' long, and a few inches wide. The blade is rather heavy, but tends to be comfortable in the hand. Straps of cured leather have been wrapped around it's grip, but these have to be replaced occasionally, both due to wear and through them becoming brittle.
The sword, when held, has a number of interesting characteristics. For one, the sword feels warm to the touch; one would say feverish. The wielder, and the wielder only will see a slow stream of fire moving through the obsidian, weaving it's way through the crystal. Rumors maintain that Ragnarok shows one the end of the world, the vision of Fire at the dawn of time. A world devoid of wind, water, earth, and lightning, forever consumed in raging fires and quivering flames. Abilities and restrictions
Ragnarok grants it's powers commonly to one who possesses Fire-attuned chakra. Those of wind have great difficulty using it, and those of water will find that it actually makes their water element difficult to access, water jutsu's costing more chakra to use.
Flamewreath
Ragnarok has the ability to convert one's chakra into it's base element - that is to say, fire. This chakra is then automatically manifested into a large barrier of flame, coming from the tenketsu of the wielder. The barrier can be controlled - to a degree. While the wielder would not be able to stop the chakra coming out his tenketsu, he could direct it to a degree, making it react to the attacks of his opponents. This, of course, means strengthening one side at cost to another. An enemy favoring mainly left-handed attacks could find himself attacking the shield's strong side, for example. But were he to attack right-handed, he might find weakness in the shield.
The shield itself causes first degree burns, shallow burns for fast hand to hand attacks. However, for more exposure comes more damage. Were contact to be maintained, second, and even third degree burns aren't out of the ordinary.
The shield can even be amplified to a level where it may deflect simple thrown projectiles, or even some low-level directed jutsu's. In this aspect, it acts as a buffer of energy with a high density, decreasing the force behind thrown objects, and even jutsu-based projectiles. However, higher level jutsu, particularly from the element of water, have a tendency to break through this shield more often then not. It can be said techniques with a level of C can be stopped accurately, yet B-level jutsu would penetrate the shield easily. However, a suiton technique of even a D level would penetrate, and even weaken the shield. Speculations exists about a flacon of water's effect, but no experiments have been undertaken.
Once the wielder wills off this ability(a simple act of willing, again), his chakra is drained accordingly as to how long he maintained this technique. This technique takes chakra according to a S-level jutsu, yet it drains this per minute.
Jutsu
Ragnarok has several jutsu accompanying it, through legend and lore. They are covered below. It's important to note that these techniques emerge from the weapon itself, not the tenketsu of the wielder, unless noted.
Weapon of purest Fire: Berserker's blood
Range: Close
Level: C
Type: Supplementary/offensive.
The blood that leaves the body of the wielder is ignited. This effectively causes any wound to shoot out with a burst of flame, possibly scorching the attacker. The wielder, however, is immune. The blood continues to burn as it drips over the skin, and may be flung at opponents. This drains chakra per 3 minutes. This technique comes through the tenketsu of the wielder.
Weapon of purest Fire: Path of flame
Range: Close-mid
Level: A
Type: Offensive
The wielder waves Ragnarok over an area, which then erupts into flames. These flames may be directed at will, and will remain fairly small. However, they can be used to ignite entire fields. The wielder is immune to the fire produced. These flames, however, do not feed Ragnarok, the chakra it generates being used to fuel itself. This, for one, does not drain chakra, unless used again.
Weapon of purest Fire: True form
Range: Weapon
Level: S
Type: Offensive
Ragnarok ignites into sudden flame, feeding off the wielder's chakra. The flames only lick and erupt from the sword. The wielder becomes completely immune to any fire-based jutsu used, be it a pure fire jutsu, or a mixture. Anything utilizing fire chakra is rendered useless against the wielder. There is, however, a price. The usage of this jutsu burns away any other chakra nature the wielder has, making fire his one and only nature for the duration of the effect. If the jutsu is ended, the changed chakra nature remains. The protection, however, is lost. Should the wielder run out of chakra, he dies, irrevocably. It's of note to add that this jutsu continues to drain chakra for as long as it's active, and it drains this per 3 minutes for the cost of an A ranked jutsu.
Rp Sample: In a quick, fluid, motion she reached up and grabbed the handle of Ragnarok and her lip quivered up into a smile as the kunai slammed into her body and passed right on through it. She then suddenly exploded into a living body of flames as she suddenly split into a wild fire and burned the grass in the arena and created a circle of fire around her foe. "You see, Ragnarok has the ability to convert one's chakra into its base element - that is to say, fire. Following that matter is energy on a basic level, Ragnarok merely reverses that principle, by infusing all the cells of one's body with fire-attuned chakra. The wielder then wills to be converted into an open flame, which then readily takes place. The flame can be maintained for as long as the wielder has chakra or there is actual fuel about. In this form, the wielder is immune to any attacks not using water." she cackled. With that said, 4 clones of fire emerged from the burning prison. "Time to sear your hide" they hissed. One of them charged forward before sliding at the feet and slashing another foes legs. A second run ran at her mid level and swung as her waist trying to cut her clean in two. A thrid ninja ran at her and jumped into the air slicing down wards at her, trying to make a curved cut, that would decapitate her head. The 4th ninja vanished in an explosion of fire as it emerged from the opposite side of the flame wall and preformed hand signs. "Ninja art, fire style phoenix flower jutsu" it roared before it jumped into the air and inhaled before exhaling and blowing a torrent of fire balls down at her foe. Even if she managed to survive the slashes she would at least get burned, and wind only worsened her situation.
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Posted: Wed May 19, 2010 11:09 am
Beatriz-chan @Tosa: Nice description, yet there are weaknesses like eletricity that could be used on the staff in order to shock you while you hold it, heat is also another kind of weakness. The staff could be heated and cause you to not be able to hold it, burn your hands and stuff like that. Though it would need a high temperature for that to happen it is still a weakness. How much chakra would be "moved" from the user to the staff in order to keep each blade? If the staff is removed from your hands forcefully before you can release the blades, wouldn't the chakra that forms them be lost? I know how you rp, yet, I'd prefer if you added a RP sample just to avoid future problems. Being that my character no longer has the staff, I'm going to just go ahead and rescind the request. If I ever decide to give my new character the staff again, I'll come back and rework it.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed May 19, 2010 11:32 am
@cain em just to let you know i believe if your weapon dosnt do anything ordinary then u have to make it custom but seeing how a serpent bo staff is a known weapon and it dosnt do anything extra i dont think u need to fill this out.
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Posted: Wed May 19, 2010 6:14 pm
@Orchid:
1- "Mokuton stronger than steel"? In what characteristic is the wood used "stronger"? More resistant? I'd say that is very odd since wood can't be refined as metals.
2- Lightning being a weakness of a wooden sword and not fire?
3- "The poison due to the very absorbing and adaptive nature of the wood needs only to be applied once." If the poison is absorbed by the wood, it wouldn't be injected into the victim's body unless part of the wood remains in the wound, causing the infection. If the poison isn't fully absorbed by the wood it would need to be reapplied since the poison in the wood weapon isn't infinite.
4- "When in its sheath it is made to look like a ordinary Tachi with a handle but any try on grabbing it would end bloody." How exactly would someone be hurt by attempting to grab it?
5- Poison: "Stage1: 1 post after being cut the victim will begin to feel as if they were punched hard in the stomach and feel dizzy." If the wound is on a hand of feet, for example, how would the poison have already spread enough to cause effects at the stomach area and make the person feel dizzy?
"Stage2: 2 posts after being cut the victim the pain spreads to their arms and they feel dizzy.
Stage3: 3 posts after being cut the victim the pain spreads to their legs and they feel dizzy." The same situation from before, if the wound was on a feet for example, it would spread to the arms first then legs but before it would already have an effect on the stomach?
"Stage5: 5 posts after being cut the victim the pain increases to the feeling of being stabbed and they lose sight in right eye.
Stage6: 6 posts after being cut the victim the pain increased to the feeling of being burned alive and they lose sight in left eye." The stab and burn are okay but without much intensity, otherwise it would be overpowered.
"The blindness lasts for 4 posts after stage 6" Blindness lasting 4 posts since stage 6 I think that would be too much, 5 posts of full blindness. I'd say 3 posts of full blindness is fair enough.
"That vial will give the user immunity to the poison." A vial of poison wouldn't make you immune, nor an antidote, the antidote would just cure the poison once. One would be immune after being cured 3 times as you said, instead of simply having a vial of the poison.
-Still checking the rest, I will have to go out for a while now but I will be back in 3 hours at most and finish checking your weapon, during that time it would be good if you could answer my questions and/or correct what I asked-
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Posted: Wed May 19, 2010 6:38 pm
Beatriz-chan @Orchid: 1- "Mokuton stronger than steel"? In what characteristic is the wood used "stronger"? More resistant? I'd say that is very odd since wood can't be refined as metals. 2- Lightning being a weakness of a wooden sword and not fire? 3- "The poison due to the very absorbing and adaptive nature of the wood needs only to be applied once." If the poison is absorbed by the wood, it wouldn't be injected into the victim's body unless part of the wood remains in the wound, causing the infection. If the poison isn't fully absorbed by the wood it would need to be reapplied since the poison in the wood weapon isn't infinite. 4- "When in its sheath it is made to look like a ordinary Tachi with a handle but any try on grabbing it would end bloody." How exactly would someone be hurt by attempting to grab it? 5- Poison: "Stage1: 1 post after being cut the victim will begin to feel as if they were punched hard in the stomach and feel dizzy." If the wound is on a hand of feet, for example, how would the poison have already spread enough to cause effects at the stomach area and make the person feel dizzy? "Stage2: 2 posts after being cut the victim the pain spreads to their arms and they feel dizzy. Stage3: 3 posts after being cut the victim the pain spreads to their legs and they feel dizzy." The same situation from before, if the wound was on a feet for example, it would spread to the arms first then legs but before it would already have an effect on the stomach? "Stage5: 5 posts after being cut the victim the pain increases to the feeling of being stabbed and they lose sight in right eye. Stage6: 6 posts after being cut the victim the pain increased to the feeling of being burned alive and they lose sight in left eye." The stab and burn are okay but without much intensity, otherwise it would be overpowered. "The blindness lasts for 4 posts after stage 6" Blindness lasting 4 posts since stage 6 I think that would be too much, 5 posts of full blindness. I'd say 3 posts of full blindness is fair enough. "That vial will give the user immunity to the poison." A vial of poison wouldn't make you immune, nor an antidote, the antidote would just cure the poison once. One would be immune after being cured 3 times as you said, instead of simply having a vial of the poison. -Still checking the rest, I will have to go out for a while now but I will be back in 3 hours at most and finish checking your weapon, during that time it would be good if you could answer my questions and/or correct what I asked- 1. Mokuton: Moku no Yoroi [Wood Release: Wood Armor] DESCRIPTION: A skill where the user can create an armor made of wood, however this armor is a special type of armor. Weighing less then conventional steel armor, it is actually stronger then steel. Being heavily infused with Wood Chakra, making it very resilient to taijutsu damage. Ninjutsu blades can penetrate this armor. Same thing happened when i made custom mokuton jutsus and they were accepted after i posted this exact thing ^ 2. Ill change extreme heat to fire.. which is the same thing.. i was just giving it a bigger variety of heat sources besides just fire. 3. 'adaptive nature' meaning it would take on the poison properties. 4. look at the sword its self not the sheath, its a full blade no grip or anything just like how swords normally are before the maker adds a grip onto it. 5. No matter where they are cut the poison quickly moves through their system. and gos through many stages of pain. Due to the poison poison taking a extremely long amount of posts to make for a single vial. and is suppose to be my strongest poison. i dont see a fault in the blindness... The reason being we have a poison in the guild that kills people in 15 posts and being blind for 15 posts isnt much... seeing as how just about everyone who will be fighting me will be in squads... remember im akatsuki my best chance scenario is drawing a member of a squad awway from others... only then would i consider it Op and thous i would not use it for 1v1 besides once i get it accepted iv gotta make the poison and thats 15 posts >.< so i probably wont do it for a while (kinda lazy when it comes to that) A vial of anti-poison then instead of antidote
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Posted: Wed May 19, 2010 9:06 pm
@Orchid: Um, I'll let Beatriz finish critiquing your custom weapon since I'm back now and she was working with you.
@Jade: I'll let Orchid finish with you as well as far as your poison's go.
@Remedy: DENIED. I wouldn't want anyone under chuunin with a weapon like this, and that's excluding the changes I would make to it. In a sense this is fairly overpowered for someone of your rank, and potentially chuunin as well (although I would let it slide depending on your RPC.). If you want to find out what changes those are, feel free to PM me so I can tell you what I would change if I were you and then reapply if you want.
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