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 Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 11:49 am
Lament_of_the_lonely Akura Bashirou Lament_of_the_lonely
@Akura:
I don't see a technique called Crystal Blizzard...
Also, how did the girl Rin stop the Crystals with chakra, when it says Ninjutsu cannot break it? On another note, it seems to me that you have your dragon off of the ground, though the Crystal Dragon Jutsu says you have to have it sliding on the ground...Did it just raise its head or something?The jutsu is in the first page of the custom jutsu forum. She broke the crystals the same way the did in the anime, by applying chakra on to the area. And it didn't fly, it simply moved half it's body off the ground, similar to the way a cobra does with it's head. Hmm... I guess I'll make it that her arm remained crystalized... and when the jounin came in the end he broke the crystal... anything else I got's to change?
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 11:52 am
No everything else is fine! I'll move the custom's into the bloodline...that's bothering me that they aren't on the list
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 12:06 pm
Alright then, I'll go edit soon, also, there is a jutsu that the description isn't very clear...
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 12:16 pm
Pm me about it if you have any questions
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 12:21 pm
Allegra Kori no Tamashi 1. the color change was to indicate me unlocking stage 2 of the blood line 2. ill edit the part with the clone doing actual combat 3. i didnt say it came from behind, what i was saying is that they came from both sides 1. So you say you unlocked it in the middle of the fight? There are several things against that. First and foremost, the eyes don't change color. In my eyes, unlocking stage two is about the same as adding a tomoe to a Sharingan. You're just better at using it, and release a bit more power from it. There is no cosmetic change. Second, you don't unlock it by taking an "Oops, that could have been dangerous." hit, you have to meet several requirements. The only one of which has to do with combat being that you have to kill two Hyuuga members. Third, if I am reading your sample correctly, your character is a genin. Chuunin at most. The second stage is only available after jounin level. Unlocking it in that way, just shows that you don't understand that part of the bloodline. 3. Coming from both sides would imply front and back. If they were coming from either side of you, that doesn't really show anything about the bloodline. Maybe if they each threw ten, all at differing speeds and levels, but then you'd still be in trouble, cause you could only focus on one at a time. ~ Another little bit that bugs me whenever I see your RP posts, is that you refer to yourself as "She". Usually, for the convenience of the reader, you make sure to use your character's name, or a reference to them at the start of your post, to differentiate yourself from the other people in the area. RP is kind of like a book. If I wrote a book, and had two females talking to each other, and one's actions started with her name, and the other only used "She", then people wouldn't understand it, and would think that the character who I named was talking to herself. That's why most people will use the name of the character, or a unique trait that other characters in the scene don't have, to show exactly who is being written about. The only time leaving the identity ambiguous like that is acceptable, is if they are alone, or their identity is unknown for one reason or another.
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 12:54 pm
Minty: You are APPROVED for the Hydration Bloodline!
Lilly: You are APPROVED for the Pinpoint Bloodline!
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 1:05 pm
Mine's edited... do I repost is?
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 1:35 pm
Thanks Cobra! Just curious though, since my rpc will most likely be autoranked to something above Chuunin. Would that make my rpc the clan head for Pinpoint?
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 2:24 pm
White Water Lilly Thanks Cobra! Just curious though, since my rpc will most likely be autoranked to something above Chuunin. Would that make my rpc the clan head for Pinpoint? If you want it, then yes it would.
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 2:33 pm
Gregar828 White Water Lilly Thanks Cobra! Just curious though, since my rpc will most likely be autoranked to something above Chuunin. Would that make my rpc the clan head for Pinpoint? If you want it, then yes it would.
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 2:44 pm
White Water Lilly Gregar828 White Water Lilly Thanks Cobra! Just curious though, since my rpc will most likely be autoranked to something above Chuunin. Would that make my rpc the clan head for Pinpoint? If you want it, then yes it would. Indeed it does.
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 5:01 pm
Rpc Name:Kilanari Komihachi
Village:Leaf
Rank:AC
Bloodline or Clan applied for:Ranmaru
What you know about the clan/bl:I know that they can sense others by tracking their life force.I know that they can cancel the sharingan.And that they can use details they see to predict their opponents last move.
Rp Sample:
After getting permission from the Hokage.Kilanari walked out of the village. But as she was walking out, she activated her renmaru bloodline, to see if there was anyone hiding near.As far as she could tell there were only two. Ok i can handle two.She thought to herself as she walked out. Two snow genin came out of hiding from both sides of her, and threw 3 kunai at her in opposite directions at her signs.Noting their hand movements,she was able to dodge them before they made contact.Then she took out some kunai herself in both and threw it at them effectively stabbing then in the gut.After that she ran,but she didn't get far, three more genin jumped around her, surrounding her at all sides. She cursed under her breath, as she did some hand signs" Bushin no jutsu"She called out, because of her bloodline, the jutsu was stronger then normal, while they were preoccupied, she started to pant, this was taking a toll on her. So when she looked around,she didn't sense anything,so she continued on her way, then suddenly a kunai came at her stabbing her in the back, almost paralyzing her. Her eyes changed from the red color to crimson.She cried out in pain,as she pulled the kunai out. As soon as she cried out, some more genin approached her.She smirked as she did some hand signs and called out ●Akumu Bun'ya (Nightmare Realm)" as she ran away,she could hear then scream as their worst fears came to life. then she followed up with ●Hitoshirenu Shitai Ki (Hidden Body Skill) as she slowly disappeared from sight and made her escape.
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 5:52 pm
Cobra_X Minty: You are APPROVED for the Hydration Bloodline!Lilly: You are APPROVED for the Pinpoint Bloodline!
LOVE YOU -hug-
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 6:05 pm
Does this mean I'm approved?
* Sits patiently *
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 6:41 pm
Misa, you didn't change more than three words in that entire sample, and the information section is completely unchanged. You need to redo the entire thing, because it isn't nearly up to par.
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