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 Posted: Tue Nov 09, 2010 6:39 pm
Rpc Name: Kotori Ikusa
Village: Iwagakure (Rock)
Rank: Academy Student
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Ink Artistry
What you know about the clan/bl: A person named Sai was known for his drawings. His drawing talent is also a jitsu called 'Super Beasts Imitation Picture'. You can bring drawing to life by the ink put on the page.
Rp Sample:
Kotori dodged another attack of the enemy's, trying to keep her balance while fighting against the mysterious ninja. Underneath her hood was a face of rage after being shot at by multiple kunais. "Why don't you just give up girlie?" he murmurred at her while she just scowled at him. "In your dreams..." She muttered angerly, taking out some shurikens and chucking them at him. The man dodged and chuckled at her pathetic attempt. Now this is what got her to blow up. She soon took out her scroll and scribbled herself onto it. She made the ink drawing of herself come off of the scroll paper and out into reality to fight beside her. "Sumi Bunshin no Jutsu: Ink Clone Technique!" She yelled out the name of the jutsu to ake it clear to the man that she was ready for a real battle. "Heh... an ink clone, eh? We'll see about that..." He dashed out to hit the ink clone, not noticing that it was a trap so that she could focus o her other attacks.
Kotori scribbled something onto her scroll with her brush, trying to perfect it for her next, and hopefully final, jutsu. The man wasn't ready to give up on fighting her, so he takes his weapon and stabs it into the clone, causing it to disinigrate, or return to its ink state. Kotori just smiles, seeing as to that she has finally finished her ink drawing. The man scowls at her, not getting as to why she was grinning. "Why are you smiling? You're about to be beaten!" He spat out at her bitterly. She just shook her head at him. "Nope. You are the one that will be beaten!" She shoted, using her jutsu. "Choujuu Giga: Super Beast Imitation Drawing!" she finally said, thus causing the drawing on her scroll to morph and come to life. Once it was done forming, it showed a wolf like figure. It was twice the size of a normal wolf, and reached the man at waist height. The wolf let out a low growl, looking up at the man in anger. "Attack!" She yelled at the wolf, causing it to jump onto the man, trying to hurt him. The man looked up in fear of being killed and started to beg for mercy. Kotori just ignored him. After a few moments of waiting, the wolf jumped back from the man, seeing as to that the man only had minor cuts on his body. "Now then... to finish this!" He yelled out at her, charging in her direction. Kotori's eyes widened and decided that now was a great time to escape. "Sumi Gasumi no Jutsu: Ink Haze Technique!" She managed to yell out, making the appropriate hand symbols and has ink form around the area, allowing her to escape. The man froze, trying to figure out where Kogasa was. "This isn't over kid!" Kotori fled the sight quickly, trying to erase the man's words from her head.
@Cobra_X: Better?
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Posted: Tue Nov 09, 2010 9:05 pm
Six Paths: Alright, between the two RP samples, you showed all of what I wanted to see. Remember, it's not jsut using extra limbs in attacks, (which you did very well in this sample)... or splitting into two, like yopu did last time... but its also temporarily merging with enemies to destroy them from the inside as well.
However, I think you'll do well. APPROVED!
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Posted: Tue Nov 09, 2010 9:07 pm
Orchid: I'm a little surprised that you would Block text your entire post, but regardless, this was better then the last one. APPROVED!
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Posted: Tue Nov 09, 2010 9:11 pm
HetaliaRULZ: Yes, much better. APPROVED!
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Posted: Tue Nov 09, 2010 9:15 pm
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Posted: Tue Nov 09, 2010 9:48 pm
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Posted: Wed Nov 10, 2010 4:08 am
Yeah See I never did find the jutsu associated with that so My plan is to make one up and put it in customs.
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Posted: Wed Nov 10, 2010 8:06 am
Rpc Name: Tsubame Itsuki
Village: Konoha / Otogakure (still undecided)
Rank: Hokage / Jounin (depending on location)
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Pinpoint Accuracy
What you know about the bloodline:
The Pinpoint Accuracy was a Mercenary clan feared for their abilities of controlling any weapons with their seal on it and their deadly accuracy and throwing speed. They were therefore ordered to be eliminated; the clan fought hard and long but was eventually overwhelmed by the attacking village. A few children escaped the attack and seperated after promising to one day revive their clan. Unable to find each other after years of being seperated, the goal of regrouping and reviving their clan was passed onto their children and their children's children. Clan members will often wear long sleeved clothing in order to help cover up their weapons and long-haired members can also hide weapons within their hair.
Seals are their main source of power when it comes to their amazing weapon proficiency. Weapons that have their seal on it automatically become easy to use and control becomes a thing of the past. Elemental seals allow for higher ranking clan members to imbed their own element into the weapon thus upgrading the it with an elemental ability (ex. fire element = fire seal which causes the weapon to burn anything it makes contact with aside from the user). With all good things, there are also several bad things to balance it all out. All weapons marked with a seal become more valunable to elemental jutsu (ex. Wind elemental jutsus will blow away the weapon) and users are generally depend on their weapons since they are weaker without them.
Rp Sample:
'Almost done...' Starting at the rapier lying in front of her, a recently turned eleven year old Itsuki watched intently as her seal mark slowly took form on the rapier's hilt. Only able to focus on creating the seal, as was required of her bloodline, Itsuki didn't notice a lone figure slip into the dojo with a blade in hand.
The seal was on the verge of completing when the feeling of cold mental against skin jolted Itsuki awake from her trance, the seal disappearing along with her concentration. As her mind came back into focus, Itsuki was able to clearly determine the source of her surprise. Behind her, a man stood hovering above her with one hand holding a katana to the front of her neck. Taking deep shallow breaths, Itsuki tried to contain the fear that began to build up from inside of her. 'Deep breaths girl, it’s going to be okay, mommy and daddy will be here soon to help, so don't give in to your fears. Just don’t -' A low, sickening laugh belonging to her captor resounded throughout the dojo, cutting Itsuki off from her thoughts.
“What luck! To think that me and my men would stumble upon a family of Pinpoint users, it must be our lucky day. You're deaths would surely bring in the gold. Start saying your prayers now little girl, cause you’re parents won’t be coming to save you anything time soon if that’s what you’re hoping for.”
His voice was a low baritone and the way it resounded off the walls freaked Itsuki out, even more so than the words he said regarding her parents. ‘It can’t be true. They couldn’t have…could they…? No. They couldn’t have, they’re both strong and skilled in the ways of war.’ Though she tried to convince herself otherwise, Itsuki had a irking suspicion that what he said might be the truth. If his words were indeed true, then Itsuki had no choice but to rely solely on herself if she is to hope for any chance at survival. ‘But I hardly know any techniques…’
Pushing those thoughts aside, Itsuki did her best to maintain her calm and find a way out of her current predicament. With shaky breaths, Itsuki subtly searched the room with her eyes to see if anything could be of use to her while her captor began gloating about how he was able to find out about their family’s bloodline. Itsuki herself didn’t have much knowledge on the matter but even she knew that the elimination of the Pinpoint Accuracy clan occurred over 70 years ago. Would there really be people still seeking their life even after all these years? It made no sense, but then again, when did sense ever apply to greedy money seekers? Paying no heed to her captor, Itsuki used this as a chance to come up with a plan, zoning in on her travel bag filled with a few sealed throwing knives, Itsuki made that her goal point. ‘I’m only going to get one chance at this so I better do this right.'
Secretly sliding one of the two throwing knives hidden by her left sleeve down her arm, Itsuki waited till the man reached the climactic moment of his gloating, the moment where his mind would be the most sidetracked for her counter. Distracted by his own ignorance, Itsuki’s captor hadn’t even noticed himself loosing the position of the katana at her neck. As soon as the feeling of cold steel left her neck, Itsuki wasted no time at all to escape. Snapping her left hand up towards her opponent, the throwing knife flew quickly from her hand and straight into the man’s shoulder. As the man howled in sudden pain, Itsuki used this chance to run towards her travel bag. Picking it up as she ran pasted it, Itsuki headed towards the stairs leading up to the viewing gallery.
Not stopping till she reached the top of the spiral wooden staircase, Itsuki heard the man making his way up the stairs as well. Rushing off to the side a good distance away, Itsuki dug through the bag and pulled out 4 throwing knives. Fingering the knives, Itsuki felt an almost immediate connection with almost all of them execpt for one. 'Not good, my throwing speed and accuracy aren't as good for weapons without my seal on it. Should I switch it out?' As the man reached the gallary, Itsuki knew she didn't have much time and swiftly procceed with her attack. 'Aim for the vital points...'
Snapping her arm four times in quick succession, Itsuki sent the blades, except for one, flying blindingly fast down the narrow open viewing gallery towards her opponent. The blades with her seal on it made the 15 meter distance no problem, her regular one coming up short at 10 meters and way off target. Watching as the man raised his blade to smack away her knives, the man failed to react quickly enough, as her blades zoomed past his sword and struck him twice in the chest and once in his right arm.
Still backing away, Itsuki pulled out four more throwing knives and whipped them towards her opponent, this time aiming for his knees. Smarter this time around, her opponent rushed his counter, only to knock aside only one of the four knives. The other three imbedded themself into his right foot. As the stench of blood filled the room, Itsuki felt herself go slightly light headed but kept on moving towards the back staircase. With the man limping towards her now, Itsuki took this chance to dash quickly around the gallary corner and down the spirl staircase.
Stopping to look at the display of weapons in front of her, Itsuki began to wish that she had the ability to infuse her chakra element of fire into a weapon elemental seal. Cause if she did, then she could've set her weapon ablaze giving her the opportunity to burn the stairwell while he was limbing down it or just burn away at her opponent's skin. But seeing as how that wasn’t an option for her, Itsuki went for the next best thing, knocking her opponent out cold.
Glancing upward at the gallery, Itsuki saw that the man had already reached the corner and knew that it would be a matter of time before he reached the bottom of the stairs. ‘For a injured man, he can still move at a fairly decent pace.’ Deciding to gamble in, Itsuki cleared her mind of her surroundings, focusing on only the ten pound hammer hanging directly across from her eyes.
Seeing as if his pray was unmoving, the man did his best to pick up his pace, the need for revenge consuming him, to think he allowed a little girl to injure him so much. People had a right to fear their ability; it was difficult just trying to make out the knives as they were thrown towards him. Reaching the stairs, he began making a shaky decent down to the bottom. With only the hammer in her eyes, Itsuki saw and heard nothing of the man coming down in an unsteady rhythm, ready to finish her off. Noticing only the seal that was halfway complete, Itsuki tried concentrating a tad bit harder in hopes of it taking shape faster. Halfway down the stairs, the man grew curious as to why the girl stood staring at the wall but brushed it off as he kept descending at a slightly faster pace. He was so close now, he was sure he could just simply reach out with his katana and slice away at her throat. Eyeing the hammer more intently than ever, Itsuki continued to stare at her almost completed seal. Near the final turn of the stairs, the man hung onto the rail with his left hand as he leaned forward swinging down his katana towards the unaware girl. ‘Done.’ Letting her instincts take over, Itsuki reached for the hammer, finding it surprising light, and swung it in the general direction of the stairwell.
Metal clashed against metal as Itsuki’s hammer intercepted the man’s katana. Breathing heavily, Itsuki knew she had to finish this quickly. Swiftly sidestepping a few times to her left, Itsuki made a swing for the man’s right. Unable to gather his bearings fast enough and with the stair rails blocking his direct line for a backslash, the man was unable to properly defend himself as the hammer came crashing through the wooden rails and strike him on his side. Keeping her eye on her opponent, Itsuki watched as he fell from the stairs and onto the tough hardwood floor of the dojo. Slipping out her remaining throwing knife, Itsuki pinpointed the spot on the man’s neck that would finish him off and threw it, her accuracy and speed of the throw increasing due to the seal’s power. Her knife hit its mark as she heard the man groan in pain before all that was left was the sound of her own heavy breathing. Sliding down to her knees, Itsuki could feel her body shaking as the realization of what just happened all came crashing down on her. ‘I just…killed someone…and there are probably even more of them in the house…’ Looking around alarmingly, Itsuki searched for a place to hide and immediately remembered the secret study. Making her way into the hidden study through a secret passage way in one of the storage closets, Itsuki tucked herself into a ball beneath the desk and nervously waited out the rest of the day while silently praying for her parents safety.
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Posted: Wed Nov 10, 2010 11:15 am
Rpc Name:Kilanari Komihachi
Village:Leaf
Rank:AC
Bloodline or Clan applied for:Ranmaru
What you know about the clan/bl:I know that they can sense others by tracking their life force.I know that they can cancel the sharingan.And that they can use details they see to predict their opponents last move.
Rp Sample:
After getting permission from the Hokage.She walked out of the village. But as she was walking out, she activated her renmaru bloodline, to see if there was anyone hiding near.As far as she could tell there were one two. Ok i can handle two. She thought to herself as she walked out,two snow genin came out of hiding and threw kunai at her in opposite directions.Noting their hand movements,she was able to dodge then before they made contact.Then she took out some kunai herself in both and threw it at them effectively stabbing then in the gut.After that she ran,but she didn't get far, three more genin jumped around her, surrounding her at all sides. She cursed under her breath, as she did some hand signs" Bushin no jutsu"She called out, because of her bloodline, the jutsu was stronger then normal, while they were fighting the clone, she started to pant, this was taking a toll on her. So when she looked around,she didn;t sense anything,so she continued on her way, then suddenly a kunai came at her stabbing her in the back, almost paralyzing her. Her eyes changed from the red color to crimson.She cried out in pain,as she pulled the kunai out. As soon as she cried out, some more genin approached her.She smirked as she did some ahnd signs and called out ●Akumu Bun'ya (Nightmare Realm)" and let the jutsu do it;s job, then she followed up with ●Hitoshirenu Shitai Ki (Hidden Body Skill) as she slowly disappeared from sight and made her escape.
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Posted: Wed Nov 10, 2010 11:26 am
Lament_of_the_lonely
@Akura:
I don't see a technique called Crystal Blizzard...
Also, how did the girl Rin stop the Crystals with chakra, when it says Ninjutsu cannot break it? On another note, it seems to me that you have your dragon off of the ground, though the Crystal Dragon Jutsu says you have to have it sliding on the ground...Did it just raise its head or something?The jutsu is in the first page of the custom jutsu forum. She broke the crystals the same way the did in the anime, by applying chakra on to the area. And it didn't fly, it simply moved half it's body off the ground, similar to the way a cobra does with it's head.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Nov 10, 2010 12:17 pm
 Misa: I see several flaws in both the sample and the what you know. There is enough stuff in this bloodline for the what you know section to easily become three paragraphs if the applicant is detailed enough, while you only mention a few minor parts, and wrong at that. They don't cancel the Sharingan. They cancel the Byakugan. First problem in the RP sample, other than the apparent paranoia of your character, is the fact you misspelled the bloodline name. Not a big deal, but worth pointing out. You then said that they threw kunai at you from opposite directions. To me, that implies one of them was behind you. I don't care how powerful this bloodline is, you can't see things that are behind you. Next, you claim your bloodline powered up your bunshin technique, and then had the genin fighting the bunshin. It doesn't work that way. yes, it makes genjutsu stronger, but how exactly do you take that and turn it into an intangible clone being capable of actual combat? Why are your eyes changing color in the middle of the sample? That makes no sense at all. You used a couple genjutsu at the end there, but made no reference to what the jutsu actually did, nor it's effect on the opponents. I could go on for a lot longer telling you about all of the spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors in this sample, but I really hope you can figure that out for yourself. Suffice to say, there are a lot of them.
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Posted: Wed Nov 10, 2010 5:49 pm
Martin Spiralwave Cobra_X Martin: I guess my only problems with the RP Sample are as follows:
1. Are the nano bugs REALLY able to travel at small distance VERY quickly? That seems kinda broke to me considering their deadliness.
2. I didn't really see you allowing many of the bugs to die... or mentioning it, because i would assume those chakra blasts would have taken out a bunch. Oh no, the way I interpretted the manga it seemed like the nanobugs wouldn't have any wings which is why the were limited to physical contact. For the sake of a cooler RP sample, i made the fly but I don't really exspect any mod to let bugs like that be able to fly...Mabye they could skip across short distances or something as an evolution? Again, I only did this for a cooler RP sample. Honestly most attacks that hit the insects will kill alot of them but the sheer volume of the insects the average Aburame can store seems to make up for this. Plus the way I invisioned these particular bugs was the ability to siphon large amounts of chakra from the air instead of from a victims body >.>
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 8:04 am
1. the color change was to indicate me unlocking stage 2 of the blood line
2. ill edit the part with the clone doing actual combat
3. i didnt say it came from behind, what i was saying is that they came from both sides
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 8:13 am
little mintchan Rpc Name: Syphen Jabbit
Village: leaf
Rank: academy
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Suigestu bloodline[head]
What you know about the clan/bl: The user can regenerate thier body into water when they want to, the user of the bloodline needs to drink water constantly or be dehydrated. The bloodline users are skilled in suiton as their main element.
Rp Sample:
Syphen sat down, taking out a water bottle and taking a drink before a lady's voice came up. "Come on! Why do we have to take so many breaks?!" He put the bottle down and looked at her. "Cause I need to..." He didn't know why he loved the girl so much, maybe cause he was a patient man who tolerated complaining. "I want to finish this mission! We must find the scroll that contains the information!" She was hyper, yes very hyper. They had just gotten a new sensei and he barely spoke to them. "What is so important about a dumb scroll filled with useless information?" He asked. "It has the information on the clans that are near exstinction!" She raised her arms to show it's value with motion. They set off again, reaching the dojo within a hour. It was kind of a fortess but not guarded by anyone or thing.He made hand signs and turned into water, slipping into a small stream that went down to the fortess. It was Teichi Mizu Ryokou (Water Release: Spying Water Travel). He spyed only for another hour then went back up to say it was safe to go in. They went down to the fortess and Syphen made hand signs for Suika no Justu(Hydration techinque) and changed to the form of liquid to go in between the door which had a hole in it only big enough for that. Opening the entrance for them, they walked in and explored to find the sacred scroll. "There it is!!" The girl ran towards it, grasping it in her hands. Syphen saw thin rope on the walls and got wide eyed. "Wait!! It's a trap!!" Too late, the trap sprung up to catch the girl in a net that if she moved would cut her with the thinness of it. Strong enough to hold a person but thin enough to cut them up. The scroll was thrown in the air and landed on the ground. Syphen ran to help her but the sensei grabbed him and put a arm around his neck. Something wasen't right...he felt something poking his butt. "Oh no.....is...he...horny?!?!" Syphen got startled immediatly realizing and pushed back, hearing a crushing/cracking noise the sensei let go in screaming agony. He ran toward his love and cut her down quickly and safetly. "Grab the scroll bunny!!" He turned and ran towards it, his sensei was getting up still in agony. He kicked the scroll under the man and made a set of hands signs. "Gōesuiwan no Jutsu (Water Release: Great Water Arm)" He turned his arm into water and swung it at the sensei, since he was still in pain he was knocked over easily but the force knocked him into a wall. Grabbing the scroll he turned to see where the girl was. She had no special power except taijustu. She was right behind him. "Lets get out of here." She nodded in agreement and they ran out quickly, running till they coulnd't anymore. Stopping to rest finally. "Open the scroll! It can be only opened by someone who belongs to a clan!" She said, Syphen drank hsi water and numed on a carrot, sighing he put his hand on the scroll and pushed chakra into it. It opened the scroll and they studied it for hours. "So I'm the only one left in my clan....?" He looked saddened, his parents were unknown....his only family was a carrot and the girl he loved.Suika no Jutsu (Hydration Technique) Suiton: Gōesuiwan no Jutsu (Water Release: Great Water Arm) Teichi Mizu Ryokou (Water Release: Spying Water Travel)
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Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 8:32 am
Akura Bashirou Lament_of_the_lonely
@Akura:
I don't see a technique called Crystal Blizzard...
Also, how did the girl Rin stop the Crystals with chakra, when it says Ninjutsu cannot break it? On another note, it seems to me that you have your dragon off of the ground, though the Crystal Dragon Jutsu says you have to have it sliding on the ground...Did it just raise its head or something?The jutsu is in the first page of the custom jutsu forum. She broke the crystals the same way the did in the anime, by applying chakra on to the area. And it didn't fly, it simply moved half it's body off the ground, similar to the way a cobra does with it's head.
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