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 Posted: Thu Sep 23, 2010 3:52 am
Gstack:Approved
Martin:ill let cobra judge yours ok
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Posted: Thu Sep 23, 2010 10:13 am
Rpc Name: Saitama Toshiko
Village: Kumogakure
Rank: Academy student
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Ranmaru's Kekkei Genkai
What you know about the clan/bl: (So if I put nothing, would it be automatically accepted by default?)
Ranmaru's Kekkei Genkai is one of the few doujutsu techniques shown in the anime. It is also one of the broadest in power, and lesser known doujutsu around. It has powers ranging from telescopic and penetrating vision, to sensing and tracking chakra from extremely long distances. One with the kekkei genkai can even transfer their own life-force over to another to help them recover from wounds and other ailments! It is probably one of the most powerful doujutsu around merely because of the fact that so little is known about it!
The doujutsu itself was only seen in one individual in particular, a young orphan from Kirigakure named Ranmaru. The boy had been loyal to one of the seven swordsmen of the mist, a man by the name of Raiga Kurosuki. Ranmaru used us various powers to assist Raiga in combat. Such as his ability to analyze an opponents movements, allowing him to predict their next move in a fashion similar to the sharingan. Or his amazing powers of vision and sight. Such as his telescopic vision, or the ability to see an opponents life force and chakra from extremely long distances. All of these powers used by Ranmaru ultimately aided Raiga in combat and as a shinobi.
Two of the most prominent techniques of the Ranmaru bloodline are what really sets this kekkei genkai apart from others. The first of which directly involves doujutsu such as the Byakugan. Using their abilities, the host of Ranmaru's kekkei genkai has the ability to cancel out the effects of the Byakugan. Rendering most Hyuuga useless in combat as they cannot use their specialized doujutsu upon which they so heavily rely. The second ability almost goes hand in hand with the first ability. The host is able to create genjutsu's that can fool even the byakugan. It is said that a genjutsu crafted by the host of Ranmaru's kekkei genkai is nearly lifelike in effect. Able to fool even the most skilled of shinobi into believing that it is actually happening. In fact, the genjutsu created are so strong, that they are actually impossible to simply 'kai' one's self out off. One must actually inflict personal harm upon themselves in order to escape from what is best described as a living nightmare.
Rp Sample:
"Target sighted. 120 meters and approaching. Accompanied by three guards and an unknown child." The sharp, metallic sounding voice filled the ears of every allied shinobi in the area. It was a radio message from one shinobi to the rest, a small group of four shinobi that could be best described as a janitorial squad. You see, it was their job to clean up the messes that their home village left in its wake. They were the ones that stopped situations from becoming full blown conflicts, and it was their job to do so quietly. Something each and every shinobi within the squad regarded with the utmost respect.
'Stealth over anything else, if you are caught, you are rogue. You know nothing of this village and you know nothing of its techniques. You are nothing.' The one phrase each shinobi was taught before being assigned to one of these non-existent squads. They were on their own out here, working for nobody and yet saving everybody. It was a tough job to handle.
"100 meters, target is wearing the straw hat. Still approaching." It was amazing that the radio's small microphone could pick up such a hushed whisper, it was almost as if the voice on the other side was merely a slight breeze in the wind. Calm, and soft. Yet still forceful enough to be felt.
After the voice had reported its findings, a sickening silence fell over the surrounding forest. None of the men hiding within the shadowy leaves dared to make a sound, lest they fail the mission for everyone present. Not even the local wildlife took notice of their presence. Deer still grazed beneath their hidden forms, oblivious to the deadly trio standing just above their furry heads. These shinobi knew what they were doing, they were the best that their village had to offer, and oh did they show not show it.
"75 meters. Declare radio silence and begin the countdown. Be advised, the target has given the straw hat to the child. I repeat, the target no longer has the straw hat." With just the slightest amount of motion, each and every shinobi in the group slowly slipped on what appeared to be an ANBU mask. Each mask resembled an animal's face, from a fox with pointed ears, to a bird with a long, sharp beak. The masks held the full features of the animal carved deeply into their surfaces, something that allowed for one to distinguish between the separate members of the squad. In all, there was a fox, a crow, a cat and a raccoon. Four animals known for preying off of what other, much larger animals, left in their wakes.
As the target approached, the crow held up a hand with three fingers extending towards the sky. 'Three seconds' Every squad member understood the gesture, as their bodies tensed in anticipation. 'Two seconds' Crow had dropped one of the fingers now, the target was nearly beneath the trees that three of the four members concealed themselves within. 'One second.' Only one of Crow's fingers remained now, its pointed figure drawing the attention of every member present. If only he would drop it, if only he would let them loose upon their prey that was just in reach...
As the final finger fell, two of the four members, Cat and Raccoon, pounced. Falling gracefully down upon the two guards shoulders while driving kunai deep within the backs of their necks. Severing spinal cords before the guards even had a chance to yell out in surprise. Crow shortly followed after the two, landing in front of the target with the moon set just behind his towering figure. The child, not yet noticing the deaths of the guards beside her, let out a startled cry as she attempted to jump away from Crow. Her feeble attempts at escape merely caused the child to topple over into the waiting arms of the target, an older woman just passed the age of thirty, though her face certainly did not show her age. "Mommy!" The child cried out, clutching at the woman's protective form, burying her face into the woman's extended arms as if to hide from the evil bird behind her.
But, second ticked by as Crow and his accomplices did nothing. In fact, all of them remained deathly still. Simply listening for the sounds of any reinforcements heading their way. "Do you not trust my eyes?" Though the voice was in Crow's ear, even the child could hear it break the dead silence that surrounded her. "There is nobody coming. I can guarantee that. Though there is a small moth on the back of your head that has seemed to take a liking to you..." The metallic voice of a young girl spoke clearly though Crow's headset.
Reaching behind his head, Crow slowly produced the smashed and still twitching remains of an insect only recently killed. "Sometimes you are to full of yourself..." Crow muttered, either forgetting to press the switch on his headset that allowed him to transmit messages to his squad, or simply not bothering to. With a slight sigh, he made a simple gesture with his left hand. Causing Cat and Raccoon to relax and stand up once again as they wiped the blood from their blades onto their dispatched targets foreheads in an 'x' fashion, their signature mark for others to find and remember them by. "Form up on me." This time Crow made sure to press the transmission switch, his voice filling the ears of the final member that had yet to reveal herself.
"Whatever..." The answer was short and quick, as was the final members arrival. Her form flickering into appearance beside Crow, with her mask being that of a Fox. "Sometimes I get tired of playing the eyes and ears for you people..." Fox's statement was not met with an answer though, as Crow was already approaching the target and the child. Whom had seemed to collapse into a form of a sitting position. The child's head buried into her mother's lap as the woman had begun to stroke the child's hair. A weak attempt at providing at least the slightest amount of comfort for her frightened child.
"So she sent you...?" The woman's voice had more the tone of a statement rather than a question, as it was laced with a tone of sheer boredom. As if the appearance of the shinobi was almost expected. None of the members felt the need to answer that question, though they could all hear the woman sigh softly to herself. "How unfortunate..." Something that almost caused Crow to chuckle.
"If you know who we are, then you know what we are here to do..." Crow's voice held an air of authority, and yet it still had a lazy trail to it. As if Crow himself had better, more important things to be doing than assassinating guards during a calm kiri night. "You must also know that we can not let you, nor your child leave this place toni-" Crow's lazy tone was cut short, for a slight change in Fox's posture told him something was coming. Something big. "What is it?"
Fox never had the chance to answer though. Instead, Cat, whom had been staring intently at a particular bush in the distance, suddenly began to claw at his mask. Tearing it off as he began to gag, tossing the remains of his lunch down onto the guard's dead body below him. Crow was about to question Cat's health, but something quickly caught his eye. Something was slowly pushing its way past Cat's tongue! At first it appeared to be a worm like animal slowly fighting its way out of Cat. But as a second 'worm' appeared, and then a third. It appeared to be part of a much larger organism that was now forcefully tearing its way up Cat's throat, bringing with it blood and flesh as it attempted to escape from Cat's innards. Cat himself had switched from clawing at the tentacles, to attempting to preform a kai. But every time he tried, there was absolutely no effect whatsoever. Something that only caused even more panic across the group.
"Fox?" Crow calmly muttered, keeping his emotions in check as he consulted the young Hyuuga girl beside him. "You can see though this right? Tell me it is a genjutsu..." But when Fox did not answer, that gave Crow all the information he needed. What was happening had to be real! Nothing can fool the Byakugan.
By now Cat was practically covered in slimy blood covered tentacles. They came from his ears, his mouth. Every orifice on his body had at least three of the slimy protrusions attempting to wiggle their way free, some openings even had more. It was a gruesome and stomach wrenching sight to see, even for such seasoned shinobi as Crow. Who couldn't help but to look away out of sheer disgust. But, what Crows eyes fell upon now was less than relieving.
Raccoon had spend her time attempting to slowly move away from Cat. But as she had made her way to free ground, something had caught her eye in the distance. What seemed to be a pair of red lights flashing only once in the distance drew her gaze to a large tree within the forests beside them. If she could have spoken, she would probably have warned her comrades to the sight she caught. But before she even had the chance to move, the ground beneath her feet suddenly erupted upwards in a shower of rocks and dust. A countless number of metallic chains burst upwards from the ground, wrapping themselves around every last one of Raccoon's limbs before they drug her forcefully down to the ground. A cry for help escaped her lips as the chains almost seemed to wet with some sort of a slimy slickness.
It took Raccoon a few seconds to actually feel the pain, but when she did, it all rushed at toward her in one large wall of searing agony. Looking down at her hands, Raccoon watched as the skin itself simply slid off. Her hand exploding in a shower of blood and meat fragments that made Crow nearly toss his salad. The screams of Raccoon only made it worse for him, as he had to avert his gaze to the ground below. "Fox! Tell me this isn't real!" Crow screamed, the panic starting to finally set in as he had watched his allies bodies literally fall apart on their own.
But once again Fox didn't answer, and that is when Crow saw it for himself. A bright red pair of what seemed to be eyes, slowly approaching out of the distance. The eyes' host seemed to be hidden in the shadows, but the glowing pair of menacing crimson eyes seemed almost demonic. "You b*****d! What are you!" Crow was actually screaming now, but his enraged cries were only met by Fox beside him giggling like a school girl. Something that made Crow's skin crawl, how could she just stare off into the distance at a time like this? How could she giggle as her only friends in the world fell around her! Was she behind this!?
Enraged at Fox's non-stop giggling, Crow produced a kunai from deep within one of his own holsters. "What are you laughing at you monster!" Crow's voice was laced with malice, he was practically foaming at the mouth out of sheer anger alone. When Fox only giggled in return, Crow did something he would have never dreamed of doing in a thousand years. Driven by anger and madness, he drove the kunai straight into the chest of his partner. But she didn't cry out in pain. Instead, with a final giggle as she crumpled against his body. Fox managed to mutter, "Can we name him after you...? Because... He... Has your.... eyes."
Giving her last breath as tears streamed down her cheeks, Fox fell to the ground in a pool of her own blood. With Crow standing over her still body as he realized what he had just done. Ripping the mask from his face and tossing it to the ground, Crow slowly began to sob out of frustration. Why was this happening to his squad? What did they do to deserve this? They were just a group of shinobi ordered by their village to kill for the sake of peace! "Who are you!" Crow shouted at the top of his lungs, causing both birds and animals alike to scatter throughout the moonlit forest. "What did you do to her?!"
When no answer came, Crow began to laugh hysterically. "Look at you! You cannot even fight us face to face!" Looking up, Crow began to reach for a second kunai. His hands shaking from both adrenaline and fear as he began to raise his own weapon to his throat. "Well not me! You will never get m-" Once again Crow was interrupted. The bright pair of eyes was closer now, in fact, he probably could have reached out and touched them if he really wished to. But before he could even react, the eyes flashed red once more. Crows body tensed in response, but instead of feeling any sort of pain. Crow witnessed the eyes slowly fade away into the darkness. "That's right. Run away you bitc-" Crow's already tense body froze on the spot. But not by his own doing. No, a young ghost like girl had appeared behind Crow. And though he could not see her form, he could sense the darkness that seemed to irradiate from her body. Something that even Crow, as a highly trained shinobi felt himself fearing.
"When she said 'how unfortunate'. She was speaking on your behalf..." The girl's voice was calm, almost amused at the amount of mental torture she had just put crow though. "Now to introduce myself. People I like tall me Toshi, you cannot call me that..." As she spoke, Crow tried desperately to slide the cold blade he was holding across his throat, but he found that his body would not, or rather, could not obey. "What did I do to her?" The girl giggled in the same fashion as Fox, sending chills down Crow's spine. "Well, I made her experience her worst nightmare, birthing your child. But, I also made her happy about it. Joyous in fact." With a giddy sigh, the girl almost seemed to squirm with happiness. "I imagine the torture was unbearable for her. Luckily you were there to kill her huh?"
If Crow could turn around, he would have gouged the girls crimson eyes out on the spot. But alas he still could not move. "I know. I know. You want to kill me..." The girl muttered as if she could sense Crow's intentions. "But I have a payment to collect, and you killing me would only get in the way. So..." The girl sighed as her free hand plucked Crow's kunai from his frozen hands. Using the blade to carve her name into the back of the man's neck before she impaled him in the same fashion that Cat had impaled the guards before. Severing his spinal cord near instantly with a blow that would kill him quickly and painlessly. "Goodnight, silly bird. I wish we could have met under different circumstances. But you attacked the one who is going to feed me for the next six weeks. Big mistake..."
Sighing as she turned toward the mother and child, Toshi's eyes seemed to revert to their normal hues of amber and white. "Sorry that I took so long, I caught an odd job on the way..." Toshi didn't seem to show any sincerity behind her apologetic statements, but she didn't want her pay docked for being late. So she felt the gesture to be necessary. "Now can we get going before someone finds this massive pile of dead bodies?" Toshi sighed, while it was true that she had left Cat and Raccoon alive, they were just as likely to kill themselves after what she has just put them through. Something any kiri shinobi walking up upon the bodies certainly wouldn't look all to glad about. "Come on, we have to get you there before the sun rises. That was the agreement..." Offering a hand to the woman still kneeling below her, Toshi lazily pulled both mother and child to their feet. A sleepy haze filling her eyes as she began to curse the amount of chakra she had just used. 'Stupid eyes....'
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Genjutsu used
On Cat
Naisenranki no Jutsu (Internal Spawn Technique)
Description: Once that target is caught in the genjutsu (by seeing the user perform sealing) they begin to feel something moving inside of them. In a few moments slimy, blood covered tentacles come out of every orifice (mouth, nose, ears, eyes anything else in your imagination, wounds) in their body. It tastes like blood and many other bodily fluids (and makes strange squelching sounds). One of the effects is causing a gagging reflex. This gives the feeling of a helpless sort of weakening on the body.
On Raccoon
Hyoukai Nikutai no Jutsu (Melting Flesh Skill)
Description: Upon watching the user form the necessary hand seals, the victim will see many chains suddenly surround and bind him to the ground, upright. Slowly, he will feel the flesh on his bones melt and drip to the floor, all over, on his limbs and torso and face. There is a great deal of illusionary pain involved, of course… Even after the effects are over, the victim feels compelled to pat himself, just to make sure he isn’t really melting.
On Fox
Magen: Narakumi No Jutsu (Demonic Illusion: Vision of Hell Technique)
Description: A low level illusion skill, which makes the opponent envision a very traumatic scene. After being put in some form of trance by leaves, grass, flower petals, and dust flying in front of the eyes, the target creates this vision himself. The jutsu only forces the target to think about the worst event possible for them, and then capitalizes on that by showing it happen.
Ataeru Kanjoo No Jutsu (Inflict Emotion Technique)
This is a fairly high level genjutsu where the shinobi temporarily changes the emotions of the target to his/her liking. The emotions imparted can be anything from ecstasy, despair, overconfidence, grief, etc. One would be advised against using this technique on teammates, however. After the effect has passed, the victim remembers the one who used the technique, and almost always with hostility.
On Crow
Gotai Habamu no Jutsu (Body Stop Technique)
Prerequisite: Suguni Ouda (Instant Strike)
Description: The first primitive version of Leaf’s Kishibari no Jutsu. After forming the proper seals, the user seems to swirl and vanish into thin air. Instead of using a tree to trap the victim, it seems as though the user has appeared behind the enemy like a solid ghost, gripping the back of his neck with one arm. The victim feels a sense of paralysis settle over his body, and the user is free to do to his captive what he wants. The technique lasts two posts: in the first, the user disappears (and the victim can still move), in the second the user re-appears and paralysis takes hold, but it wears off after that one post of being unable to move.
Base Duration: 2 posts
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(I feel like this could have been better than it is now.
Like I could have explained things with a bit more clarity, or cleaned up the broken choppiness that plagues it.
But I just liked the scenario far to much to ruin it with to many revealing details...
Also I'm writing this in between naps and trying to eat without tossing my salad...
So I guess that could explain why it is suckier than normal.
...I hate being sick.) Bah.
You're right...
This sucks.
I'll redo this when I feel better then.
...Stupid post.
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Sep 23, 2010 11:25 am
While that sample is indeed an amazing piece of work, it is sadly lacking in the most vital of things. You didn't actually show the bloodline in use, just the effects caused by the illusions created. Your sample needs to show how you are using the bloodline, not just a bunch of attacks. The illusions aren't the only ability of that doujutsu either, rather, it's really a bit of a side benefit. The main ability of this one is the X-Ray vision and the ability to detect life force.
Also, as far as I know, there is nothing telescopic about this bloodline. Higher clarity of vision perhaps, but not telescopic.
Your "What I know" mentions tracking chakra. That is wrong. It actually tracks "Life Force", which, oddly enough, is completely different. Basically, you'd be able to track anyone that is currently alive, but the dead, no matter how much chakra they have running through them, would be impossible to track. By way of the bloodline at any rate. In the end it doesn't make much difference, but it is important to note. If we let you have it thinking it was tracking chakra, we'd have you predicting jutsu most likely.
But yeah, good story, but not a very good showing of the bloodline.
Yes, I can find fault in even applications of this quality! Fear me!
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Posted: Thu Sep 23, 2010 11:27 am
um once again it seems that my application has not been responded to. should i repost it or do i need to fix anything?
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Hinote Tosatsu Vice Captain
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Posted: Thu Sep 23, 2010 11:46 am
I think Cobra was looking at yours?
I just wanted to do Reqs myself cause... Umm... I dunno why, I just did.
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Posted: Thu Sep 23, 2010 12:58 pm
I'm still waiting for mine to be accepted... Just in case nobody saw this. Quote: Rpc Name: Masashi Tachibana Village: Iwagakure Rank: Academy Student Bloodline or Clan applied for: Chakra mouth -Exploding clay- What you know about the clan/bl: The Bloodline, Chakra mouth, has the ability to use exploding clay by the mouths in there Palms. Chakra mouths users tend to fight long range to mid as they use tactics to confuse enemies and bomb them with their clay. They are poor close range fighters as they leave some to a lot of open spots, leaving them for a easy attack. Chakra mouth users only have one element, Doton, as clay is apart of the ground and earth. Their clay can be defused if they are struck by lightning or someone that has the element Raiton. Other than that, they are perfect bomber ninjas. Rp Sample: Masashi was walking in the training grounds as he finally became a Chunin. He had a huge grin on his face as all his hard worked had payed off and all he wanted to do was train ever farther into his shinobi life. Setting all that aside, he reach in his backpack that was around his lower back down to his bottom, reaching in for some clay. The mouths on his palms started to chew huge pieces of clay, taking his hands out of the bag. Looking at his palms as the mouths chewed away, he smiled as he waited for the clay to soften up. About a minuet pass as the mouthes stick their tongues out with animal figures. One was a dog as the other was a bear. Masashi then toss the clay figures at the ground as a huge smoke surrounded the clay. Masashi watched as the clay was life size, seeming almost real but in a clay form.
The dog, which was the same size as a wolf and, barked and growled at a a tree as the bear roared softly at a boulder. The Bear it self was huge, about the same size as a grizzly and with huge claws that could tear a person in half. The dog ran at a tree as he sticked it's self to the tree while the bear ran after a boulder about ready to attack the huge rock. Masashi smirked as the only word he said was "Katsu!" and the two clay figures blew into a high explosion. The rock was completely gone as the tree itself was demolish, leaving almost no trace of it. Masashi nodded his head as he got the hang of this already. He sat on the ground as he needed to think on what other objects he could blow up next. The idea then came to his head as Masashi got up from the ground as he reached for some more clay in his bag. The mouths chew fiercely as he took his hand out and waited for the clay to soften up again. The mouth's tongues stuck out again as the figures were a tombstone and a spider. He toss them to the ground as another smoke cloud burst out of the air, reveling the life size objects.
The spider was as big as the bear as the tombstone was just staying at one spot. The spider turn to look at Masashi as it's front leg shot up as the fangs were moving. It's eyes bolted from every direction as to look and see what was around. His eye that had a scope on it extended and shot back in as to examine the thing. He smiled as the jutsu was just about right, commanding the spider the hid in the ground. The spider hid himself to surprise someone. The tombstone molded up into a texture like tombstone, camouflage from it's clay texture. Masashi smiled as he was about ready to explode a slay a random lightning bolt stuck the tombstone, messing up the properties as Masashi tried to set the clay off. Masashi was confused as nothing happen as the spider as well pop out of the ground, animating it's death. They then turned back to the small size as Masashi sighed.
Masashi looked around to fine the person that did this, knowing all too well that it was a lightning element user. He zoomed in on his scoped eye he had as it sense no chakra signs near by or anything else. A hour or two later, he gave up as he headed back to the training grounds, looking to train more. Masashi then reached for more clay as he gathered more clay into his chakra mouths. Masashi, taking a minuet for his clay to soften up, made a small bird that was roughly 5 cm in width and 2 in hight. In his other hand was a couple of worms he made so in case that person came back to the training grounds. He toss the small clay bird in the air as the bird then grew bigger around 10 feet in width and hight as the worms just slid off from his hand onto the ground. The worms swim its way into the dirt and earth as they lay still for the vibration of another to walk by. Masashi quickly jump on the back of the huge bird, a falcon from the looks as it quickly zoomed through the air to the Kage's office. He was thinking that he needed to find someone that has the same bloodline he has. He was at the gates as he looked back for the last time as the grounds looked peaceful as ever. The mouths on his palms smiled as they sticked out thier tongues like a dog as he calmly glided to the Kage's office, asking to see if he could find another user with his bloodline. Masashi spoke under his breath as to see which place he should go first as his trip will last him for some time. Edited
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Posted: Thu Sep 23, 2010 2:19 pm
Golden Spider of Kumo Rpc Name:Kenji Kana Village:Iwagakure Rank:Academy student Bloodline or Clan applied for:Hyouton What you know about the clan/bl:Hyouton- Haku's Kekkai Genkai, Ice manipulation The users are able to mold water and wind to create ice. This ice isn't able to withstand much, and melts against fire jutsu one rank above the jutsu's rank, Granted this melting is hardly enough to destroy the entire ice, but it can leave the ice weakened. Hyouton ninja are able to create their own ice, unlike other ninja who use Snow and Ice. Also they are capable of using one handed seals. Rp Sample: Kenji stood at the edge of the well in Sunagakure. He focused a bit and water came up to the top, and doused the sand around him. Freezing the water on the sand, Kenji raised it into the air, focusing as he did so. This wasn't a practical jutsu, and was extremely hard to control. Yet somehow he had managed to convince most of Sunagakure that it was his element. He had effectively taken refuge in this village. He had even made some "Friends” as they called themselves. He knew they weren't friends, yet he dreaded that he might have to kill them. "Man, Now of all times to let my Sand thaw.” He said shaking his head he sighed, making the sand land into his gourd. "Man, the Research squad really knows their stuff. I couldn't even tell the difference between this gourd, and a real Sunagakure gourd. "He said laughing. "Kenji?” Two Genin said, walking out from behind a wall. "Did you just... Use a Suiton jutsu? "They said in unison, looking at their friend.” We thought that you had dedicated yourself to Sand type jutsu... "They said, noticing the ice where he stood.” Wait... Not just that, you use ice? Only Yukigakure ninja can use that... "The both gasped and looked at Kenji.” You are a Yuki Ninja! "They said, freaking out. "No! I'm an Iwa Ninja. "Kenji said, Making hand signs, the water in the well shot out, into the air making a ten foot by ten foot Glacier and dropping it directly in front of them. The Glacier started as a small hail stone, but got bigger and shaped better, until it reached its maximum size. Kenji used it again and again, until they were all encased in the makeshift igloo. Two on each side, two long and two wide. Even two tall." Ninja art, Ice block. "Kenji said, a smile crossing his face.” I'm sorry guys, but I can't let you out. "He said sighing; He had made it small enough only half of his chakra was exhausted. He could manage these two mediocre people. "Now, Let us begin.” He said, Making a Ten by ten Glacier over the Well entrance. He made more hand signs, a bubble appearing in the Glacier, and slowly spreading. "Now, Let us finish this. If you two can defeat me, I will pay the price for infiltrating your village and you will be considered heroes. "He said, playing on their weakness. "Heh, One of you against both of us?” They said, jumping up onto the Ice block. One quickly made hand signs, and inhaled. He exhaled a huge amount of fire, and his friend made hand signs and expelled a huge amount of air, The Two collided, making a huge fireball head directly towards Kenji. Keji just sighed and jumped into other air, Making hand signs, He smiled at his "friends" and said. "Zero grip.” He then ran, not sliding an inch on the ice. He ran around the blast, fast enough that the Genin couldn't see him. He threw two handfuls of senbon into the side of the one that used the Katon jutsu, and jumped over, landing squarely. He turned and threw some senbon into the Genin that had used the Fuuton jutsu. "Now, let’s do it this way.” He said, making hand signs with one hand. He Grabbed a Senbon in his other, Ready to fend off Kunai or Shuriken with it. "Ice Swallow.” He said, sending some Ice from the Ceiling of the Box he had made out of ice directly at the Two Genin. The Air pocket in the Glacier they stood on was huge now. A loud whirring noise could be heard distinctly. "Damn! My Right half is immobilized! The one on the right said, trying to limp away, but his right leg was struck, His foot being frozen to the Block of ice beneath him. "My Left Side as well!” The one on the left said, jumping away, but tripping backwards. He drove a couple of senbon on his back into his body, not dealing a heavy death blow, but he would die from it. "Damn!” He said His arms, legs, and even his neck getting bound to the Glacier below him. "Curse you!” He said, trying to move. His Katon counterpart tried to move as well, not succeeding. "Dammitt! I'm using fire! Why won't this melt! "He said yelling. He reached for his Kunai and began throwing all that he had at Kenji. "We trusted you! We even showed you our scrolls! "He said, coughing up blood. "Heh, Child's play." Kenji said, blocking all of the Kunai and shuriken. Kenji looked down and laughed. "Now you guys will see how I lived.” He said laughing, attaching to the Ice on the ceiling, he pushed off. He was going to escape at the Last second. That wind was enough to harm him. The Glacier exploded with cold air, The Two Genin's bodies flying off, hitting the walls of the Box in which they were encased. The entire place was covered in ice in a matter of second. Kenji made quick hand signs; The Ice that attached to him began to form into armor, covering every inch of his body. "Ice Armor.” He said smiling, going directly down the well hole. He felt the water hit his armor, and He looked above. He smiled. Even though he was in ice, he still felt cold, because of the temperature of that storm. The two Genin were frozen by now. He canceled all of the Glacier jutsu, and cast another one, at the Bottom of the well. He smiled, making a Cold breeze below it, He used it as a launching pad for himself, Rocketing himself into the air. He Smiled. "Fuuton, Air riding.” He said, Making two air bubbles underneath his feet, he made them have ice steps which he stood on. He laughed as he flew through the air, although he knew he was about to pass out, he wanted to at least get halfway home before he did so. Reposting because it hasn't been responded to in 14 days...
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Posted: Mon Sep 27, 2010 4:44 pm
Even though I all but swore I wouldnt do bloodlines any more........I'll do bloodlines. Kumo: You've submitted this several times, and seem to have a fairly good understanding of what a Hyoton user can and cannot do. Combining that with your extremely long wait time, I'm sorry that you had to wait this long.  @Demonic: You left out one semi-major part about this clan. I wont say what it it, please go back and read through it. If you really cant find it, just PM me. The clay birds dont just grow big on their own, you need to activate that ability. It seems like you just made a tiny bird, and it grew as if all of them do that.
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Posted: Mon Sep 27, 2010 6:10 pm
Thank you very much Gregar. ^.^
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Posted: Tue Oct 05, 2010 8:59 am
Rpc Name: Elizabeth Bishop
Village: Rock
Rank: Academy Student
Bloodline or Clan applied for: crystal Release
What you know about the clan/bl: Members of this bloodline MUST have lightning and earth chakras. Users can Manipulate and create chakra, but the extent of the control depends on rank. Ninjutsu cant break it, taijutsu can. The crystals are whatever colour your chakra is.
Rp Sample:
Before you read this, I must warn you. I might put stupid puns making fun of a typical Naruto Anime fight, lines from any shounen anime, or stuff just to be silly. Yes, this is just to kill time and make my post longer, but it's also to make this fun. I hate doing long, serious RP samples, so I thought I'd spice things up a little bit. you have been warned.
It was a lovely day. The sun was shining, and the birds were singing. A gentle breeze swept through the air, and crowds cheered as ninja maimed each other for advancement. It was time for the final rounds in this years chuunin exams. The current fight was Elizabeth Bishop vs Girl-chan, and tensions were running high. Both ninja seemed to be equally matched in skill and strategy. Beth looked across the feild at her opponent and said smugly, "Hey, good luck out there. Oh, and dont go crying home to mommy when i stop your a**!". Girl-chan looked into the sky with a seriously looks, then sighed. She slowly turned her head to face Beth, then said "No! for it will be you who will be crying home". Beth laughed quickly then said, "Enough talk, lets fight!". Girl-chan, nodded, "Right, lets see who is truly worthy of becoming a chuunin!" The two genin then began to plan out their first attack.
Beth jumped back against the arena walls. She used the tree walking technique to stick to the wall. This would give her the appearance of being easily cornered, when she really wasnt. Girl-chan began to make some hand signs, then shot several fireballs at Beth. Beth made a single hand sign and performed the substitution jutsa. Left in her place to take the blast from the fireballs, was a log. Beth reappeared behind Girl-chan swinging a kick downwards onto her head. As she swung the kick, the air around her foot could begin to form a crystal boot. The edges of the boot were very sharp, and the extra weight would add increased force to the kick. Girl-chan barely managed to dodge the kick. She rolled to the right and jumped into a tree. "Ah, I see you have THAT bloodline" She said adding emphasis to the 'that'. Beth replied, "yes, THAT bloodline, and with it, I will become the greatest ninja in the world!". Girl-chan nodded, then prepared a next attack.
Beth made a few quick handsigns, and crystal Shurrikans began to form in her hands. She took aim at Girl-chan, who was still perched in the tree, and threw them with great accuracy. Even though this was an attack, meant to do damage, it served as a distraction. Girl-chan saw the shurrikan heading towards her. She went to jump to the right to avoid the attack. As soon as her body shifted, Beth made note of her direction, then performed several hand signs. A hexagon of crystal formed in her hand, and she threw it ahead of girl-chan, so she would run into it. The hexagon had razor edges, much like a giant shurrikan. Girl-chan made one hand sign, then used the substitution jutsu to dodge the attack. She appeared behind Beth, and used the fireball jutsu. A large fireball shot at Beth. She had no time to react, and was hit. Beth fell to the floor, her back was a little burned, but there was no serious damage. Girl-chan looked down at Beth, "You see? This is why I deserve to the be the greatest ninja. I'm far more superior to you in many ways. you should just give up."
Beth struggled to get up, but she made it to her feet. She laughed, then looked at girl-chan. "No, I'm a much more stronger ninja than you. Now prepare for my ultimate super secret bloodline jutsu!", she said courageously. Girl-chan suddenly grew a look of great peral, "No, you dont mean..." , her words were quickly cut off by Beth, "Yes! that jutsu!". As she spoke, she performed several hand signs. A Crystal snake-like dragon, 6 feet long, appeared from the ground between Beth and Girl-chan. She dragon shot at girl-chan and quickly coiled around her. Girl-chan was now trapped, and had prety much lost the fight. Beth walked up to Girl-chan and said, "You put up a great fight. I hope we get to do it again sometime." The snake-dragon coiled into the ground, releasing Girl-chan. The proctor jumped in and declared Beth the winner. as the two walked off to their waiting areas, Girl-chan mumbled, "Oh, believe me, we will fight again. And when we do, I will win, and become ultimate ninja number one!"
there you go, hope the stupid puns didnt effect it in anyway. I made mentions to the bloodline's abilities and jutsus, though i didnt have any delfections with the crystal... I hope i get it.
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Posted: Thu Oct 07, 2010 5:48 pm
Shikotsumyaku
Rpc Name: Kagetsuki Burudoshisu (Profile not yet submitted)
Village: Sunagakure
Rank: Academy Student
Bloodline or Clan applied for: Shikotsumyaku
What you know about the clan/bl:
Users of this bloodline can only have two chakra elements and only one of these can be mastered, as well as being more susceptible to Genjutsu’s than the average Shinobi of the users rank. This ability involves the complete control of cells responsible for bone growth which allows them to manipulate their bones at will. Accompanied with this is an increased healing factor allowing bones to protrude through flesh and vital organs without causing fatal injuries. There are four stages in the development of this bloodline.
Rp Sample:
Kagetsuki raced through the Oak and Birch treetops that spanned for miles across the area, forever wary of the distance between him and his pursuers. After every footfall small shards of bone were shot out of the soles of his feet and lower shins, coating the wood with small extremely sharp bone makibishi. Content with the delay created by the makibishi, Kagetsuki spotted a clearing and set down beside a large tree to allow his wounds to heal. It only took a couple of seconds for the shallow wounds to heal, while the deeper of the wounds took around ten minutes to heal. Kagetsuki closed his eyes and took a short-lived moment of solace as Kagetsuki heard the approaching Shinobi through the undergrowth, having had to navigate through the traps and makibishi to get to him. Kagetsuki guessed that they would be upon him in a matter of minutes, and so drew a small chakra metal sphere with small holes in the surface from his bag. Holding the ball so that he was not covering any of the holes, Kagetsuki placed a slowly protruding bone from the end of his finger tip into one of the holes. This bone quickly spread through this device, creating bony needles whose tips protruded from the metal casing. He then channelled wind elemental chakra into the ball and chucked it into the clearing before sprinting in the opposite direction.
As soon as the metal ball hit the ground the internal timer triggered and forced the needles to fire outwards at explosive speeds, right into a group of Shinobi passing just overhead. Two of the Shinobi saw the attack in time and managed to manoeuvre themselves out of the needles path. The two Shinobi closest to the bomb were not so fortunate, the projectiles tearing through their flesh and shattering their bones. The last Shinobi realized what was happening too late, bringing up a kunai to block an incoming dart. The dart hit the kunai and, without slowing, proceeded to go through it and the Shinobi’s shoulder due to wind element chakra permeating it from the metal sphere. The two Shinobi that had escaped the trap turned to their fallen comrades. Surprisingly, none of the Shinobi had died, though the unfortunate two were seriously injured. They moved towards their comrades as another team stopped in the clearing.
The captain of the second team walked up to the two uninjured Shinobi. “Report” he ordered as the Shinobi finished basic treatment to the injured Shinobi. At once they both stood up and saluted the captain, “The enemy passed through here a couple of seconds ago, leaving a small trap which caught us off guard, Sir” replied the taller of the two. The captain looked around, surveying the situation and thinking on what course of action would be best to take. “Okay, Hiroki, Manabu” the captain said, addressing the taller Shinobi first. “I want the both of you to scout the surrounding area for any signs of....” but before he could finish his sentence Manabu shouted out. “Shou-Sensei, look out” but too late, as the figure that had pounced from between the trees landed a solid hit on the unprepared captain. Captain Shou was propelled across the clearing and into a tree, a figure with the bone of his knuckles protruding slightly standing where he once was. Kagetsuki allowed his knuckle bones to thicken and become denser underneath his skin while the protruding portions became more convex and smooth. He looked at the two Shinobi, who both instantly jumped back to increase the distance between them and him.
After a brief pause Hiroki performed a series of hand signals while shouting “Katon: Kaen Hisame no Jutsu”, facing his hands towards and slightly above Kagetsuki while Manabu sprinted towards him, saying “Doton: Tsuchi Zuhan Danmaku” along with performing the appropriate hand signals. Manabu violently stopped, using the extra momentum for a greater force as he dug his hands into the ground, lifting a large chunk of earth and propelling it towards and above Kagetsuki. The two jutsu collided in midair just above where Kagetsuki stood, the Katon fireballs striking the chunk of earth as it arched over Kagetsuki, raining down chunks of molten rock. Kagetsuki smiled as the Kage Bunshin dissipated, leaving the molten rock to harmlessly hit the ground. “Crap, can anyone see him” Hiroki asked his fellow Shinobi, some of who were still stunned by what had just happened. Suddenly, Kagetsuki burst from the ground between the bewildered Shinobi, striking out at the two in front. As the two Shinobi shot forward from the force of the punch, Kagetsuki swung his left arm around, aiming for the shoulder of the last Shinobi but coming into contact with Captain Shou’s held kunai, now recovered from his daze.
“Go heal the others” Captain Shou said to the Shinobi whom he had just defended. He then lunged forward with a second kunai at a frightening speed, Kagetsuki only just jumping back in time. Kagetsuki stood up strait, surveying the situation at hand. ‘So, three Jounin and maybe six Chunin, taking into account of the injured. And probably more on the way, I’ll have to disable them quickly before making my escape’ he thought before placing his hand next to his ear, and the concealed communication device. “Mission successful, eliminate any pursuers” Kagetsuki heard as his hand fell to his side and the knucklebones receded back into his flesh. “It’s going to be a bad day for you guys, but I’ll make it quick” he called to the enemy Shinobi. Captain Shou smirked “Don’t underestimate us; you have no idea who you’re dealing wit...” he replied as Kagetsuki suddenly appeared before him, piercing him through the heart with an elongated bone shard protruding from the palm of his hand. “Dance of the Willows” Kagetsuki said as he retracted the bone and turned towards the other Shinobi. “I am sorry but I have my orders and this must be done. Dance of the Early Beckon” Kagetsuki said as he crouched down and placed his hand on the floor.
(The timed metal ball is an invention of my own specifically for this rp sample, not to mistake it with an official custom weapon)
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Posted: Sun Oct 10, 2010 12:31 pm
@Snuff: In the what you know section, you put that members of this clan can "create chakra". Is that a typo? I assume you meant to put "crystal", not "chakra".
You really didnt describe the creation of the crystal that well, such as the manipulating of your chakra and the earth around you. Every single jutsu makes it seem like your crystal comes out of thin air. You also did not mention handsigns or jutsu names for either you or your opponent, a major part of RP fights. Change that.
The correct spelling is Shuriken (not a major issue, just something I wanted to point out.
@Shinigami: That thing with the ball.........no. You cant just take raw chakra and put it into an item, and let it have any effect you want.
Yes, human bone is strong, but strong enough for a needle of it to go through a piece of steel? No, no way.
You really didnt show yourself doing much in this sample. It was more like reading about the enemy chasing you, rather than you. And the whole time your doing nothing but running away. You need to make this sample show that you know every aspect of this bloodline, and that you can use each one skillfully. All this RP sample says is "I know how to run from the enemy." The only time you really used your Shikotsumyaku powers as they were intended was at the end, and that was far too brief and unexplained.
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Posted: Sun Oct 10, 2010 12:52 pm
the way i read the jutsu was that the shurrikan and hexagon disks come out of thin air yes...i thought i put the snake as coming out of the ground, and yeah, i meant crystal, i was originally applying for pure chakra, but changed my mind, must have missed that part, I'll edit
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Posted: Sun Oct 10, 2010 12:56 pm
Despite that, you still made zero mention of actually creating the jutsus. It was as if all the jutsus in your sample were "I think, and it happens." There was no mention of handseals, chakra manipulation, or even saying the names of the jutsus to activate them (the japanese name, not the english one). And again, its shuriken, not shuurikan.
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Posted: Sun Oct 10, 2010 1:27 pm
Rpc Name: Elizabeth Bishop
Village: Rock
Rank: Academy Student
Bloodline or Clan applied for: crystal Release
What you know about the clan/bl: Members of this bloodline MUST have lightning and earth chakras. Users can Manipulate and create crystal, but the extent of the control depends on rank. Ninjutsu cant break it, taijutsu can. The crystals are whatever colour your chakra is.
Rp Sample:
It was a lovely day. The sun was shining, and the birds were singing. A gentle breeze swept through the air, and crowds cheered as ninja maimed each other for advancement. It was time for the final rounds in this years chuunin exams. The current fight was Elizabeth Bishop vs Girl-chan, and tensions were running high. Both ninja seemed to be equally matched in skill and strategy. Beth looked across the feild at her opponent and said smugly, "Hey, good luck out there. Oh, and dont go crying home to mommy when i stop your a**!". Girl-chan looked into the sky with a seriously looks, then sighed. She slowly turned her head to face Beth, then said "No! for it will be you who will be crying home". Beth laughed quickly then said, "Enough talk, lets fight!". Girl-chan, nodded, "Right, lets see who is truly worthy of becoming a chuunin!" The two genin then began to plan out their first attack.
Beth jumped back against the arena walls. She used the tree walking technique to stick to the wall. This would give her the appearance of being easily cornered, when she really wasnt. Girl-chan began to make some hand signs and said, "Katon Housenka no Jutsu". Suddenly, several fireballs shot at Beth. Beth made a single hand sign and performed the substitution jutsu. Left in her place to take the blast from the fireballs, was a log. Beth reappeared behind Girl-chan, spinning on one hand, and swinging at her feet. As she swung the kick, Beth focused her earth and lightning chakra into the ground, using it to make crystals form on the bottom of her kicking foot. The edges of the crystal were very sharp, and the extra weight would add increased force to the kick. Girl-chan barely managed to dodge the kick. She rolled to the right and jumped into a tree. "Ah, I see you have THAT bloodline" She said adding emphasis to the 'that'. Beth jumped back to her feet, recovering from the kick, into a crouching position, then replied, "yes, THAT bloodline, and with it, I will become the greatest ninja in the world!". Girl-chan nodded, then prepared a next attack.
Beth made a few quick handsigns, and said, "Crystal Shuriken Jutsu". Her chakra moved through her feet and began to form several crystal Shuriken in the ground. The shuriken rose up to the surface, and Beth grabbed them. She took aim at Girl-chan, who was still perched in the tree, and threw them with great accuracy. Even though this was an attack, meant to do damage, it served as a distraction. Girl-chan saw the shurrikan heading towards her. She went to jump to the right to avoid the attack. As soon as her body shifted, Beth made note of her direction, then performed several hand signs and said, "Crystal Hexagon Disk". A hexagon of crystal formed from the rock in the wall. Beth quickly grabbed it, and she threw it ahead of girl-chan, so she would run into it. The hexagon had razor edges, much like a giant shurrikan. Girl-chan made one hand sign, then used the substitution jutsu to dodge the attack. She appeared behind Beth, making several hand signs and yelling Katon: Goukakyuu no Jutsu. A large fireball shot at Beth. She had no time to react, and was hit. Beth fell to the floor, her back was a little burned, but there was no serious damage. Girl-chan looked down at Beth, "You see? This is why I deserve to the be the greatest ninja. I'm far more superior to you in many ways. you should just give up."
Beth struggled to get up, but she made it to her feet. She laughed, then looked at girl-chan. "No, I'm a much more stronger ninja than you. Now prepare for my ultimate super secret bloodline jutsu!", she said courageously. Girl-chan suddenly grew a look of great peral, "No, you dont mean..." , her words were quickly cut off by Beth, "Yes! that jutsu!". As she spoke, she performed several hand signs, then yelled "Crystal Dragon Jutsu". As Beth focused her lightning and earth chakra into the ground, a Crystal snake-like dragon, 6 feet long, appeared from the ground between Beth and Girl-chan. She dragon shot at girl-chan and quickly coiled around her. Girl-chan was now trapped, and had prety much lost the fight. Beth walked up to Girl-chan and said, "You put up a great fight. I hope we get to do it again sometime." The snake-dragon coiled into the ground, releasing Girl-chan. The proctor jumped in and declared Beth the winner. as the two walked off to their waiting areas, Girl-chan mumbled, "Oh, believe me, we will fight again. And when we do, I will win, and become ultimate ninja number one!"
((OK, I fixed all mistakes I could find. If you could note any others while you recheck, that would be most appreciated))
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