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 Posted: Mon Feb 08, 2010 8:16 pm
I would also have no problem with it. *thumbs up*
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Posted: Mon Feb 08, 2010 11:13 pm
I let him know, but he's like a stage and a half away from beating Assassin's Creed II and kind of not listening at the moment, so when he's done with that we'll see what limitations he'll be putting on. *grumbles something about avid gamers and their single-mindedness*
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phoenixianCrystallist Crew
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Posted: Fri Feb 19, 2010 9:43 am
Cory's profile has been edited to include the revised Indomitable Eye, a change to his bio, and the other abilities I posted up that no one ever bothered to look at and approve. >->
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Posted: Wed Feb 24, 2010 10:52 pm
Starlit Struggle Name: Kuropo Guroko
Nickname/Alias: Copy Cat, Kuro, Guro
Age: 60
Gender: Male
Appearance: Kuropo
Height: 3'0"
Weight: 50 lbs.
Body Type: Short and stubby
Skin type: Tan skin and slightly furry
Eye Color: Black
Hair Color: Grey
Hair Style: Flat, basic
Clothing: Kuropo Wears a long white hooded robe that falls down to about his knees. It is decorated very intricately(shown in picture) and is designed to allow his ears to stick out in the hood. He wears black gloves that are adorned with blue jewels on the back sides and pants that have grey and black vertical stripes down them. His boots are brown and come to little points at the end.
Unusual Body Art/Parts: Pointy Ears, small button like nose.
Race: Tarutaru
Theme Song(s):
Significant Trait: Mischievous
Quotes: "Incompetent people do so annoy, it makes them unworthy to treat as a toy."
"Traps indeed are so annoying, It's no fun when I'm not the one who is toying."
"I promised you power, so do not despair. I just hope my company won't be too much to bear."
Good/Evil: Neutral
Homeworld: Vana'diel
Main Weapon: Staff(same as in appearance)
Additional Equipment: {Secondary Weapons, Enchanted Armor, Accessories, Conclave Jewelry}
Job Class: Blue Mage
Attack Abilities:
Assimilation- A much smaller version of the Spiral of Assimilation, Kuropo sends a single non-elemental orb to 'strike' his opponent, it requires no focus and no energy on his part, but it gathers only a small amount of data.
Spiral of Assimilation- Kuropo drives his staff into the ground and focuses his energy, creating an out of control spiral of the assimilation orbs that encompass the battlefield. The orbs fly around wildly, untouchable, and the opponent(s) is greatly pulled towards the center. The orbs do no damage; however, the longer they fly around the area, the more data they copy from his opponent(s).
*Weaknesses: The only way to stop the spiral pre-maturely is to cause damage to Kuropo, who is forced to remain focused.
Total Assimilation- Kuropo literally draws an opponent into the orb of his staff. While they are trapped in the orb, Kuropo has access to all of their abilities, and his staff can (if needed) become their weapon of choice, effectively becoming a total clone of the target. There is a 1 in 3 chance of the person breaking out every post; after the third post, the target breaks out regardless
Your Own Worst Enemy: Using data gathered from an opponent's memories, Kuropo can clone the various traits- weapons, elements, spells, even so much as a battle stance and strategy. He does this by gathering all of the data to form a separate staves- from these staves, full-body clones are created using whatever data may have been stored. He can use abilities he has copied permanently, or he can use data he's copied from the battle at hand.
*Weaknesses: The only way to destroy the clones is to destroy the hovering staff that formed them. As long as the staves remain in-tact, the clones cannot be destroyed.
Support Abilities:
The Blue Mirror- Kuropo casts an enchantment on his staff that lasts for three posts. If he manages to block any blows with his staff, the attack is immediately reflected, dealing no damage to Kuropo.
Passive Abilities:
The Blue Arts- Any time a spell or ability is used on Kuropo, he has a 5 in 20 chance of learning the ability for a few uses (whether on his own or via his clones) and a 2 in 20 chance of remembering it permanently.
Limit Breaks:
The Blue Fury When pushed to the brink, Kuropo can consolidate all of his copied knowledge into his conscious mind, giving him access to everything he has ever copied from opponents, including spells, abilities, even weapons and styles. His staff becomes enchanted so that it may turn into whatever weapon he needs. His abilities take little to no energy to use. Kuropo remains in this state for a maximum of 5 posts. Afterward, he is completely drained of his mana.
Permanent Data:
Basic Mastery of Vana'diel Weapons
Fire
Thunder
Cure
Strengths: High magic ability in terms of offense and defense. Strategic in combat.
Weaknesses: Low physical defense and attack strength.
Personality: Despite his mischievous tendencies, Kuropo is actually quite considerate. Though he does have a bit of a short fuse when people make fun of his size. For reasons that are unexplainable though he can only speak in rhymes.
Likes: Rhyming, strategizing, researching, exploring, scheming, and reading.
Dislikes: Incompetent people, People who mock him because of his size. People who do not like rhymes.
Fears: Being defeated, failing to accomplish his goals, being defenseless.
Family: He has a wife and son on his home world. However, their fates are currently unknown.
Bio: Kuropo hails from the land known as Vana'diel. He was a researcher for the Federation of Windurst, one of four great nations of the world. He gained his unique powers by finding a mysterious tome within the ruins outside of his nation. However, he forced himself to keep them a secret except in combat. He left his home nation to become an explorer, Gaining data on many different weapons during his travels. Until the day the Heartless arrived, he fought as hard as he could but in the end he passed out, when he came to he was in Traverse Town.
Sample Post: Kuropo walked around Traverse Town. The Town of Survivors of the lost worlds, not that the tarutaru knew that. He looked all around, seemingly very confused. He didn't know where he was or how he got there. His black eyes gazed around in wonder at the brick streets and the street lights. To his perspective everyone he had seen was quite tall, except for the occasional moogle or child he had seen. To everyone else though he only stood up to their knees.
Despite his small size he was moving at a good pace. His small pointed boots making little noise as he explored the area. His pointed ears seemed to twitch inside the hood that covered his head. As if trying to focus on every little sound that he heard. His eyes narrowed as he saw the little cafe. He made his way over there and pulled herself up into a seat to relax.
"Where am I and how did I get here? Why doesthinking about the fate of my world fill me with fear?"
He said to himself, stuck in a rhyme. For some reason it was something that he couldn't prevent from doing. Every time that he spoke it would be in a rhyme.
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Posted: Thu Feb 25, 2010 10:46 am
Starlit StruggleName:Moggie
Nickname/Alias:Mog
Age:50
Gender: Female
Appearance:height: 2'3"
Weight:45lbs
Body Type: That of a moogle O.o;
Skin type: White fur
Eye Color: Black with a little blue glint
Hair Color: White
Hair Style:Soft hair everywhere but a small extra puff on the top of her head
Clothing: A little Dark blue cape tied to her back
Unusual Body Art/Parts:Small Pink nose. A pink pompom above her head thanks to an unusually thick and strong hair and purple wings.
Race: Moogle!
Theme Song(s):
Significant Trait: Impulsive
Quotes: "I maybe cute. I maybe fuzzy. I may have this pompom on my head. But that doesn't mean I can't kick your a**!"
"Let me at 'em! Let me at 'em!"
"Kuuupo!"
Good/Evil:Good... unless you call casting fire on your allies butts for ticking you off, evil...
Homeworld:Moogle Nest
Main Weapon: Fire Staff
Additional Equipment:
Job Class: Black Mage
Attack Abilities:Fire- Casts a fire spell on her enemy (Depending on the power she can make it into a Fira spell)
Blizzard- Casts an ice spell on her enemy (Depending on the power she can make it into a Blizzara)
Thunder- Casts a thunder spell on her enemy (Depending on the power she can make it into a Thundara)
Drain- Drains one enemies health and uses it to heal herself.
Osmose- Drains one enemies magic to replenish her own supply.
Flare- A massive non-elemental spell.
Support Abilities:Blaze Spikes- A circle of flames circle Moggie that will cause minor fire damage to an enemy that attacks her.
Sleep- Puts her enemy to sleep.
Passive Abilities: Moogle's sixth sense- Can feel the darkness in other people's hearts. Extremely powerful foes can mask the Darkness in their hearts.
Clear Mind- Increases Magic restore rate.
Limit Breaks:Manafont- The next 3 spells Moggie casts are free of Magic cost.
Strengths:High magic attack and defense l Quick magic restore rate l High Fire elemental damage l Can fly
Weaknesses:Low physical attack and defense l easily angered l
Personality: Quick to anger. Likes to act like a know it all, which yes she is pretty smart, but she still has a lot to learn. Which is something she often fails to see herself. So when she is proven wrong she usually likes to come up with something else that is true to cover up her mistake.
Moggie in short, her personality is opposite of everything one would think a moogle to be....
Likes: Kupo Nuts~ l Being right l Giving those who annoy her what they
deserve, a fire spell to the butt l Adventure
Dislikes: Being proven wrong l Being called short l Being underestimated
Fears: The darkness l Being useless
Family: Mother and Father and 3 brothers and 3 sisters(Moggie is the middle child) and several more aunts, uncles and cousins.
Bio: Moggie was born and raised on the Moogle home world, Moogle Nest. Even as a young moogle, Moggie had always been opposite of everyone else, living by the beat of her own drum.
At the young age of 13, Moggie started studying black magic, in hope of one day going on a grand adventure of some sort, such as a lot of the older Moogles told stories about. At the age of 25 she became a master of fire elemental spells.
One fateful day, her home world was attacked by the heartless. She put on her bravest face and tried to fight them back, but she was stopped by one of the moogles that came home to visit. He forced her onto his Gummi ship and they retreated. Not knowing what happened to her home, Moggie has been living and working in the Synthesis shop in Traverse Town, but inside of her heart she wants to know desperately what happened to her home. And so she is about to run away...
Sample Post:Moggie was sitting in the small back room of the synthesis shop. He was busy looking over the inventory and arranging. Which was what she was supposed to be doing... but that was boring.
Everything about this place was boring. What she wanted to do is going on an adventure and hunting down those creatures that attacked her home. But so far no matter what she did the stupid moogles would not answer a single question she asked and tell her it is best to stay here and help with the shop.
Customers that came into the store gave out more information and were actually trying to fight the beings known as Heartless. Some said that as of late even more and more worlds have fallen pray to them. The stars were almost completely gone. That was more than enough to send Moggie over edge.
"Moggie, can you come over here and help me synthesis this with your magic."
"Oh alright..." Moggie said with a roll of the eyes as she made her way over.
'...But just you wait you lazy Moogles, I am going to leave. If you like it or not.'
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Posted: Sat Feb 27, 2010 9:51 am
Appearance
Name: Ruki
Gender: Male
Age: 18
Height: 5’10”
Weight: 160 lbs.
Body Type: Athletic build
Hair Color: Black with streaks of aquamarine
Hair Style: Medium length hair with teased spikes
Eye Color: Hazel
Unusual Body Parts/Art: He has two blue rectangular streaks under each eye, a medium sized circle on his on his lower back and a circle on the palm of each hand. When he is using his powers they glow.
Race: Human
Apparel/Equipment: EL Clickador He also has a bracelet which he uses to create portals to travel.
Weapon: Mostly weapons made from his magic, but he has learned some hand-to-hand combat.
Personality
Songs:
Breathe Carolina ♦ The Dressing Room
Shiny Toy Guns ♦ Le Disko
Color: Purple
Significant Traits: Pleasant and bubbly
Alignment: Neutral good
Strengths: Smart, dependable, agile
Weaknesses: Overly trusting, blunt, over confident
Likes: Anything unique and eye catching, night, pudding cups
Dislikes: Liars, pushy people,
Fears: Being alone, ghosts, not getting his daily dose of pudding
Other
Homeworld: Unknown
Family: Mother, Father, Brother (M.I.A.)
Job/Class Martial Artist/ Hydromancer
Abilities:
Sync ♦ Day use only. Ruki concentrates psyching his Hara increasing his chances to dodge and block attacks from quicker opponents.
Focus ♦ Night use only. Ruki calms his Hara slowing him down, but increasing his magic power
Swap ♦ Ruki is affected by the sun and moon. During the day he can only use water magic. At night he can only use ice magic.
Immunity ♦ Ruki is immune to being frozen and resists most damage from water and ice attacks.
Condensate ♦ Water from the ground or atmosphere is drawn to Ruki when no body of water is available.
Magic: Water/ice
Ice:
Cryo Freeze ♦ Drastically lowers the temperature causing any enemies around him to be severely damaged. Also has a chance to immobilize for a short time
Needle Field ♦ Ruki creates shards of ice which he controls by thought to attack and defend.
Cryo Beam ♦ Shoots rays of ice at his opponents causing damage and if it hits will immobilize them for a short time. Uses a lot of MP
Water:
Waterspout ♦ Creates a large tornado of water over opponent(s). Quickly depletes MP but will inflict a lot of damage against his opponent(s).
Liquid Metal ♦ Ruki creates various amounts of water that he controls by thought. When attacking it takes the form of weapons that will move at speeds fast enough to make it capable of cutting through most armor.
Water Aura ♦ Creates a pure water that heals Ruki while he fights, but the longer its used the slower the healing.
Bio: Ruki remembers few things of his childhood home, partially because of how short a time he lived there. Being born into a family of warmongers Ruki only had a few moments of happiness before everything began to unravel around him. At the age of three his parents told him his older brother was coming home. He had no idea he even had a brother, but the looks on his parents faces told him that his brother was like them. A few weeks later and the stranger that was his brother came into his life. He couldn’t explain it, but something seemed so wrong about him, they way he seemed so sad to see Ruki, the way he talked sounded so detached, as if he wasn’t even in the same universe. On his fourth birthday his parents gleefully announced that they were going on a trip as a way to celebrate. They walked to the sea and had a picnic, something Ruki would never have believed his parents capable of, yet the weary look of his brother made him weary. That night they had him walk waist deep into the water. The moon shining brightly upon the water gave illumination to the eerie mist that had enveloped the cove some hours ago. The mist began to shift into what seemed to be the shape of a person. He watched in fear as the world around him started to warp and fade, leaving him and the being. It moved closer engulfing him. His body went numb as the sheer cold of the being numbed him entirely. Then he heard the screaming, and the chanting. His body slowly becoming weaker and weaker as the being seemed to meld into his body. Eventually he blacked out.
When he awoke he was in a strange world, his body was still so cold, but it didn’t hurt. He couldn’t remember how he had gotten where he was, but he suspected more of his parents dirty work. Though he cared little of that now, he only wanted to survive. As the little boy wandered the streets of the town, it was the busy kind of day, and he couldn’t help but joyously run to and from shop windows and chatting with the people he bumped into. Eventually he learned, much the horror of the woman he was talking to, that he was in Twilight Town. Towards the end of his brief tour of the town he was reunited with his brother, who was still as unhappy to see him as ever. Without hesitation his brother took Ruki into his arms, and after a brief hug gave Ruki a bag of munni and an address. After that his brother left and Ruki went to the address to be taken in by a strange woman, Sherri. There he lived out the rest of his childhood and much of his teens. Throughout these years Ruki, under the instruction of Sherri, began to learn how to fight and defend himself. He didn’t fully understand why she was teaching him, but thought it was her way of being a mother and providing all she knew to better him.
After his seventeenth birthday he began to search for his brother, and hopefully, the answers of what happened that day so many years ago. Though he searched everyplace in the town, his brother was nowhere to be found. Sherri, told him to stop looking. She told him that his brother was most likely dead, for he worked with darkness. Ruki didn’t understand, but she wouldn’t explain further. However, she didn’t realize she’d told him enough to make him search all the more. Ruki wanted answers: What was this darkness? What did it have to do with his brother? He knew not how to get them, but somehow he felt like the answers would come soon.
Upon his eighteenth birthday, to his horror, the being of cold and mist appeared before him. He tried to yell, or scream, but it had already frozen him. However, he felt no cold, or pain, but he felt warmth. The being, though without a face, spoke to him, and revealed his purpose. Ruki had been bred as a weapon, but his brother had ruined that plan, by spiriting him away from his home world. The being went on to explain that the same fate had been his brother’s, but with a different means of achieving it. It told him that while his brother was possessed by his power, Ruki had transcended his own and could now choose his path. At this Ruki could hear the anguish of the being as if it was admitting some failure. The being showed Ruki his power, the control of the water and its forms. It also explained that because Ruki remained conscious he was subject to flaws in his abilities. Though Ruki cared little of that regard, all he could think of was finding his brother, and now he had the means to do so; with a little help from Sherri. Once he had told her she handed over a simple chain bracelet connected by a padlock with strange symbols etched into it. With it he would be able to create portals to other worlds to broaden his search.
Sample Post: Ruki stood on the roof of the archway in the Tram Commons watching the hustle and bustle of the towns people. The joyous buzz of life struck deep into him, making him smile just as much as those whose lives were simple and easy. Though he’d rather be down in the crowd chatting with them, he knew he was on his own mission, training. Ever since he’d received his strange command over water and its many forms, he had became ever more determined to find his brother and get the answers to what was going on.
“Well standing here gets me soooo no where!” He joked as he walked to the edge. Looking over he watched as the tram just past underneath. He quickly jumped off the archway flipping twice and landing with a resounding thud on the roof.
“Hmmm…that was pointless. Sooo that makes it pointless objectives two, fun four billion!” He laughed and jumped down as the tram went past the way to the station heights. He was blowing off training for the most part, seeing as heartless only really appeared in the forest, but he shrugged it off.
“Shouldn’t you be training?” Ruki sighed as his hara spoke to him, he’d been caught, but could he have gotten away with it anyway? It was funny to him though that his conscious was really some sentient being trying to take control of his body, but still somehow failing miserably.
“No you couldn’t have. I’ve got no other purpose, but to watch your every move seeing as I am stuck inside of you.” Ruki rolled his eyes and continued to walk up the hill.
“Some one is such a party pooper!” He retorted weakly. It was so hard to think a good retort when the person your talking to already knew what you were going to say.
“Don’t argue just go back.” His hara answered flatly. Ruki was always trying to see if he could get it to be angry as a sort of game to pass the time with it. Though he never succeeded.
“Fine! I’ll gooooooo… Blarg.” He shouted aloud and turned around laughing as people turned to stare at him.
“Don’t mind me just procrastinating!” He shouted to the onlookers smiling embarrassed at having spoken aloud.
He reached the hole in the Tram Common leading into the forest, and the old mansion. He poked his head into the other side surveying for any heartless. It was relatively inactive, but a few shadows were scuttling about. Not much of a challenge, but Ruki moved in to strike none the less. He glanced briefly at the sky and much to his surprise the sun was close to setting.
“Looks like I have only a few minutes or so of water power. Well that shouldn’t be a problem!” He giggled lightly and jumped into the air. He created several blades of water as he landed. The shadows, noticing him, began to close in. The blades floating around him suddenly launched themselves at the closest with a simple provocation of Ruki’s will. The shadows fell easily and the others further away had finally caught up. He didn’t bother to summon more blades and simply threw himself at the four left. He stopped in front of the first lifting his leg and swiftly bringing it down upon the shadow. The other three closed in behind him, but the crouched and swiped at them with his leg knocking two into trees and the other managed to jump before it got hit.
“Crafty little guy! If they weren’t so hostile I’d take him home!” He mused aloud before punching the lunging shadow. It hit a far off tree and dissipated.
“Well that was easy…YAY! Now off to find me some pudding!” He smiled gleefully and ran off to the tram common to celebrate his minute win.
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Time-traveling Gatekeeper
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Posted: Fri Mar 05, 2010 6:45 am
Teddy: Raziel Hotokashi Rules♦ Follow the ToS
♦ No God mode please
♦ Be active, but give others a chance to reply
♦ Please stay in character
♦ Send me your applications in PM
♦ Make your characters unique
♦ Try to be literate. Conversations are the exception.
♦ No duplicate weapons or magic types.
♦ If you want to be in the Covenant of Shadow, then put 'Vexation' in your application. If not, then put 'Bastion of Hope'
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Posted: Fri Mar 05, 2010 5:18 pm
Oooooh so this isn't like a pre-check thing...oops sweatdrop
Sorry! x.x
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Time-traveling Gatekeeper
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Posted: Fri Mar 05, 2010 5:43 pm
Nah, the Audition thread is pretty much for finals drafts. However, since Raziel prefers the profiles to be PMed, then there's no need for the audition thread ^^
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Posted: Sat Mar 06, 2010 10:22 pm
Adding Cory's Drive Contributions. I guess these can just go over his "Drive Abilities" section:
Quote: Drive Contributions: Indomitable Will- The person infused with Cory has access to Cory's basic Elemental abilities, namely: Indomitable Resolve, Indomitable Firaga, and Indomitable Strike.
Cataclysmic Deviation/Industrialization- The person infused with Cory will have access to variations of his "Cataclysm"-caliber abilities if they don't instead received a motorized version of their own weapon.
Attribute Boost- The person infused with Cory has the following stats boosted : Attack Strength, Attack Speed, and Energy.
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Posted: Tue Mar 09, 2010 7:00 pm
Would like to append the sentence "Despite what you'd think about him having a authoritative personality, he has come to care quite a bit about Kichi's Mental state and emotional supports, almost like a very worried father." to the Summon Personality section on Kichi's profile.
Also, Drive stats with Bahamut
Attack Strength: +2 = 7
Attack Speed: +0 = 8
Magic Strength: +3 = 6
Magic Defense: +0 = 2
Guard Strength: +0 = 6
Evasive Reflexes: +0 = 6
Outright Speed: +1 = 8
Constitutional Endurance: +1 = 5
Energy: +2 = 6
Ability for Bahamut Drive:
Flare Redirection - Firing one or more of the spikes off of the rocket wings on his back, he controls their position and angle, so that when they are hit by a flare attack, they redirect it in the direction the spike is pointing.
Flight - Upgrading Kichi's glide ability to full on flight, this allows him do fly around at top speeds thanks to Bahamut's Rocket wings.
And Weapon Alteration:
The tonfa become gold, and pointed, looking much like the spikes from Bahamut's wings, with the handle attached. This makes punching attacks much more damaging, and also amplifies Flare power some.
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Posted: Sun Mar 21, 2010 3:52 pm
Starlit Struggle Name: Silveredge Helios
Nickname/Alias: Reikonsesshou
Age: Reikon, Rei
Gender: Male
Appearance:
Height: Roughly six feet (2 meters)
Weight: 150 lbs
Body Type: Muscular
Skin type: Tan
Eye Color: Dark Green
Hair Color: Black
Hair Style: Ponytail
Clothing: Loose white pants and shirt (think typical Samurai garb)
Unusual Body Art/Parts: An x-shaped scar across his upper back.
Race:Nobody
Nobody Element:Wind
Theme Song(s):
Significant Trait: Quiet Determination
Quotes: "Strength is born from many sources, but weakness stems from many more."
"We are the architects of our own destinies."
"Fate...is a coward's refuge."
Good/Evil: Good
Homeworld: Land of Blades
Main Weapon: A daisho sword pair, Penance, the katana, and Guilt, the wakizashi. These can be combined at the hilt to create a third weapon, Innocence.
Additional Equipment: A singel prayer bead.
Job Class: Samurai
Attack Abilities:
Penance Gale- Draws and attacks with Penance, creating blades of air that fly around the battlefield at random. They cannot be dodged, but have only a 1 in 6 chance of hitting Reikon or his opponent.
Howling Guilt- Draws and attacks with Guilt, creating small tornados.
Scouring Innocence- Draws and attacks with Innocence, creating powerful blasts of wind.
Support Abilities:
Samurai's Pride- Allows Reikon to take one hit for an ally. 1 in 3 success rate.
Passive Abilities:
Extreme Agility- The Natual Reflexes of A Samurai allow Reikon to act and react faster than most ordinary warriors.
Intense Training- A life spent training his body has made Reikon tougher, faster, and stronger than normal.
Limit Breaks:
Second Wind- Boosts Reikon's health, allowing him to continue the fight.
Resolution- Increases Reikon's defence, reducign the damage he takes.
Final Stand- Boosts Reikons strength, giving him a chance to defeat his opponent, even at the cost of his own life.
Strengths: Agility, Versatility, Determination
Weaknesses: Poor Defense, Lacking in Self-Protection
Personality: Quiet, Calm, Intelligent, Determined, Wise
Likes: Honor, Truth, Peace, Knowledge
Dislikes: Cowardice, Lies, War, Ignorance, Destruction
Fears: Failure.
Family: His Parents are disceased, and he had a younger sister until he became a Nobody.
Bio: Reikon was, from a young age, determined to make the world a better place, even if not for himself. He trained for years to master his swordsmanship, and broke almost every bone in his body along the way. He lost his Heart to a powerful Heartless, but unlike most Nobodies, he has no desire to have it back. He sees his current state as punishment for his failure, as well as an opportunity to fight on a new front.He seeks to rid teh wrolds of their evils, and if he is still alive at the end of it, he plans to destroy himself.
Sample Post:
Reikon sighed and drew his blades slowly. Time and again he'd fought them, these meager Heartless and Nobodies. And time and again they stood in his path. They fell easily, as they always did. They were no match for him, a living force of nature, and man with no fear of death and the resolve to carry out his plan. He would destroy every last Heartless and Nobody, if that was what it would take to make the worlds a better place.
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Eloquent Conversationalist
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Posted: Mon Mar 22, 2010 8:03 am
As a disclaimer, all of this is merely objective critique; if it comes across as offensive, it was not meant as such. Penance Gale is somewhat confusing. I think I understand what it means, but to clarify: when you use the attack, both you and your opponents generate a number (1-6), and if they get a 1 (or whatever single number you choose), they must be hit by it?
How small are the tornadoes you're talking about in Howling Guilt?
Could you be a bit more specific with Scouring Innocence's 'blasts of wind'? Like, a strong gust in the direction you swing? Or something else?
I'm not sure Samurai's Pride is very practical, seeing as you simply need to jump in front of the ally to take their hit. Perhaps come up with some different Supports? Or does Samurai's Pride work differently than I'm assuming?
Intense Training is a bit too all-encompassing. You're increasing 3 separate attributes, 1 of which you call a weakness (toughness/defense). Please narrow it down to one attribute (two if they are closely linked, such as Physical and Magical Defense, or Speed and Agility). As a personal suggestion, I would not make it defense related; how can you have that as a passive ability and still call it a weakness? Seems like a waste to me.
I'm going to have to ask for a longer, more detailed sample post. The sample post is your 'par', so to speak- I want to know what your average post will be like. If it's that short, I'm sorry to say you won't be accepted.
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Posted: Mon Mar 22, 2010 9:11 am
Silveredge Helios Starlit Struggle Name: Silveredge Helios
Nickname/Alias: Reikonsesshou
Age: Reikon, Rei
Gender: Male
Appearance:
Height: Roughly six feet (2 meters)
Weight: 150 lbs
Body Type: Muscular
Skin type: Tan
Eye Color: Dark Green
Hair Color: Black
Hair Style: Ponytail
Clothing: Loose white pants and shirt (think typical Samurai garb)
Unusual Body Art/Parts: An x-shaped scar across his upper back.
Race:Nobody
Nobody Element:Wind
Theme Song(s):
Significant Trait: Quiet Determination
Quotes: "Strength is born from many sources, but weakness stems from many more."
"We are the architects of our own destinies."
"Fate...is a coward's refuge."
Good/Evil: Good
Homeworld: Land of Blades
Main Weapon: A daisho sword pair, Penance, the katana, and Guilt, the wakizashi. These can be combined at the hilt to create a third weapon, Innocence.
Additional Equipment: A singel prayer bead.
Job Class: Samurai
Attack Abilities:
Penance Gale- Draws and attacks with Penance, creating blades of air that fly around the battlefield at random. These blades are near invisible and very difficult to dodge. They are also highly inaccurate, and have only a 1 in 6 chance of hitting Reikons opponenet. At the same time, they have and equal chance of hitting Reikon himself.
Howling Guilt- Draws and attacks with Guilt, creating small, short lived tornados, roughly half a meter in diameter that last for a bout a minute.
Scouring Innocence- Draws and attacks with Innocence, creating powerful blasts of wind in the direction Reikon is attacking.
Support Abilities:
Passive Abilities:
Extreme Agility- The Natual Reflexes of A Samurai allow Reikon to act and react faster than most ordinary warriors.
Intense Training- A life spent training his body has made Reikon far stronger than normal.
Limit Breaks:
Second Wind- Boosts Reikon's health, allowing him to continue the fight.
Resolution- Increases Reikon's defence, reducign the damage he takes.
Final Stand- Boosts Reikons strength, giving him a chance to defeat his opponent, even at the cost of his own life.
Strengths: Agility, Versatility, Determination
Weaknesses: Poor Defense, Lacking in Self-Protection
Personality: Quiet, Calm, Intelligent, Determined, Wise
Likes: Honor, Truth, Peace, Knowledge
Dislikes: Cowardice, Lies, War, Ignorance, Destruction
Fears: Failure.
Family: His Parents are disceased, and he had a younger sister until he became a Nobody.
Bio: Reikon was, from a young age, determined to make the world a better place, even if not for himself. He trained for years to master his swordsmanship, and broke almost every bone in his body along the way. He lost his Heart to a powerful Heartless, but unlike most Nobodies, he has no desire to have it back. He sees his current state as punishment for his failure, as well as an opportunity to fight on a new front.He seeks to rid teh wrolds of their evils, and if he is still alive at the end of it, he plans to destroy himself.
Sample Post:
Reikon sighed and drew his blades slowly. Time and again he'd fought them, these meager Heartless and Nobodies. And time and again they stood in his path. They fell easily, his blade splitting thier bodies, passing through them as easily as they might pass through air itself, as they always did. Reikon had trained for much of his human life to bea warrior, and now he was only a warrior, his only purpose being the ending of lives. They were no match for him, a living force of nature, and man with no fear of death and the resolve to carry out his plan. He wondered if, had they the power, the Nobodies would have feared him. He wondered if the Heartless would ever realized that he would never stop hunting them. That was his goal, to rid the worlds of the cancerous diseases ot the Heartless and Nobodies. He would destroy every last Heartless and Nobody, inculding himself. He too was an abomination, a being not meant to be. It was his duty, if he survived to see hsi plan through, to destroy himself. And even that, held no fear or joy for him, he reflected. He would not suffer doubt, never question his own resolve. That, he thought, must be one of the few perks to losing one's heart.
Is this better?
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